Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจน เลือกคำให้ถูกต้อง และลดการซ้ำ ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้น ๆ ระบุระยะเวลาและลักษณะสถานที่อย่างชัดเจน (ไม่เกิน 5 ประโยค) เช่น กล่าวว่าบ้านอยู่ในพื้นที่ชนบท ใกล้/ไกลจากตึกสูง และอธิบายเหตุผลหรือระยะเวลาเป็นข้อสนับสนุน

예시: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in Pachumtani province, which is a rural suburb of Bangkok. I have lived there for over ten years, so I am used to low-rise houses and open fields.

제안: ทำประโยคให้เป็นธรรมชาติและชัดเจน มากำหนดตัวอย่างเฉพาะ ใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อให้รายละเอียด และแก้คำศัพท์ที่ผิด เช่น 'strength' ควรเป็น 'striking' หรือ 'interesting' ระบุความถี่และเหตุผลสั้น ๆ

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings, especially when I see striking or unusual architecture. I often take pictures when I travel to the city, because tall towers and unique designs are very different from the buildings in my hometown.

제안: ตอบให้ตรงประเด็นโดยเริ่มจากประโยคหัวข้อ แล้วยกตัวอย่างอาคารที่ชัดเจนและอธิบายเหตุผล ใช้คำและโครงสร้างที่ถูกต้อง (เช่น 'have many stories' หรือ 'tell stories about history') หลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำและเติมรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ชื่อสถานที่หรือประสบการณ์ที่ต้องการเรียนรู้

예시: I would like to visit historic buildings or memorials that tell stories about the past. For example, I want to see old temples or war memorials because they teach me about history and local culture.

제안: ตอบให้กระชับและชัดเจน ระบุเหตุผลเฉพาะและเชื่อมด้วยคำเชื่อม เหตุผลควรเป็นประโยคสั้น ๆ ที่ถูกไวยากรณ์ เช่น บรรยายความรู้สึกในเหตุการณ์ที่เกิดขึ้นและสรุปความต้องการของตนเอง

예시: No, I don't want to live in a tall building. I once lived in a high-rise during heavy rains and felt unsafe when rain hit the windows, which made me uneasy. I prefer a low-rise house where I feel more comfortable.

× In my home is doesn't have a tall building because I live in a rural areas where where we call Pachumtani province.

✓ My hometown doesn't have tall buildings because I live in a rural area called Pachumtani province.

The original sentence mixes singular and plural nouns incorrectly ('a rural areas') and misorders the subject. Use 'hometown' or 'my home' consistently, 'doesn't have' agrees with singular subject, and 'rural area' should be singular. Suggestion: use 'My hometown doesn't have tall buildings' or 'There are no tall buildings in my rural area.'

× It's just like a suburban of Bangkok and I live here for over.

✓ It's just like a suburb of Bangkok and I have lived here for years.

'Suburban' is an adjective; the noun needed is 'suburb'. 'I live here for over' is incomplete and wrong tense. Use present perfect 'have lived' with a time expression like 'for years' to indicate duration up to now. Suggestion: 'I have lived here for over ten years' or 'for years.'

× Of course I like taking photo of buildings when I face some the strength building or some days architecture that are different from my hometown, especially for the highest tower.

✓ Of course I like taking photos of buildings when I see impressive structures or unusual architecture that is different from my hometown, especially tall towers.

Use plural 'photos' and correct verb 'see' instead of 'face'. 'Strength building' is incorrect; use 'impressive structures'. 'Some days architecture' is ungrammatical; use 'unusual architecture'. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'architecture that is different'. Also use 'tall towers' rather than 'the highest tower' unless a specific tower is meant. Suggestion: simplify phrases and use correct noun forms and verbs.

× For me, I like the building that have a many storytelling about the history or it's just like a memorial monument or just like a cemetery that told about the story or the lesson for for the.

✓ For me, I like buildings that have many stories about history, such as memorials or cemeteries that tell stories or lessons.

Use plural 'buildings' and plural verb 'have' must match plural subject. 'A many storytelling' is incorrect; use 'many stories' or 'a lot of history'. 'That told' should be 'that tell' to match present tense. Remove redundant words. Suggestion: use 'buildings that tell stories about history' or 'memorials that teach lessons.'

× No, I never had the idea for living in a tall building because of I used to live in tall building when it's a heavy raining it's sort of dangerous and when the rain touch the glasses I feel fear about.

✓ No, I never wanted to live in a tall building because I used to live in one and during heavy rain it felt dangerous; when rain hit the windows I felt afraid.

'I never had the idea for living' is awkward; use 'I never wanted to live'. 'Because of I used to' is ungrammatical; use 'because I used to'. 'Tall building' should be 'one' or 'a tall building'. 'It's a heavy raining' should be 'during heavy rain'. 'When the rain touch the glasses' should be 'when rain hit the windows'. 'I feel fear about' should be 'I felt afraid'. Suggestion: use simpler sentence structure and correct verb tenses and collocations.