Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Use correct subject-verb agreement and avoid fillers like "hmm."

예시: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small village. For example, the tallest structures are two-story houses and a church, so the skyline is mostly low and open.

제안: Answer directly in the present tense if you usually don't do it, and give a brief reason and an example. Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

예시: Not really — I rarely photograph buildings because there aren't many interesting ones nearby. For instance, when I visit the city I sometimes take pictures of old bridges and modern towers.

제안: Be specific about a real building you want to visit and explain why using clear reasons and a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "in my imagination."

예시: Yes, I'd like to visit the Eiffel Tower because from the top you can see the whole city of Paris. For example, I imagine watching the sunset over the Seine would be a memorable experience.

제안: Give a concise reason with correct grammar and one supporting detail about how it affects you. Use linking words to show cause and effect.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the views help me relax and feel happier. For example, looking out over the city in the evening would be a peaceful way to end my day.

× they are no tall buildings near my home because I live in the village.

✓ There are no tall buildings near my home because I live in a village.

The original uses incorrect word order and article usage. 'they are no tall buildings' is ungrammatical; use the existential construction 'There are no...'. Also 'the village' implies a specific village; general statement prefers 'a village.' Suggest using 'There are no tall buildings near my home because I live in a village.'

× I did not take photos of the buildings because there are no buildings near my home.

✓ I did not take photos of buildings because there were no buildings near my home.

The student uses present 'are' with past 'did not take.' Maintain past tense consistency: change 'are' to 'were.' If referring to habitual present, keep present for both. Suggest matching tense across clauses.

× I would like to visit many buildings in my imagination, because when I go up there I can see all the view and that very good moment.

✓ I would like to visit many buildings in my imagination, because when I go up there I can see the whole view and enjoy that very good moment.

Problems include collocation and word choice: 'all the view' is incorrect; use 'the whole view' or 'the entire view.' 'That very good moment' is awkward; use 'enjoy that wonderful moment.' Also 'enjoy' fits with 'moment' better than nothing; this correction keeps grammar types within allowed list (verb participle and adjective use).

× Yes, of course, because when I go up there I can see the view that's make me happy and make me calm down by myself.

✓ Yes, of course, because when I go up there I can see the view that makes me happy and helps me calm down by myself.

The verb after 'that' needs third person singular: 'makes' not 'make.' Also 'make me calm down by myself' is awkward; 'helps me calm down by myself' is more natural. This preserves tense and subject-verb agreement.