Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/capitalization errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using a linking word. Avoid filler words like “Oh” and “Yeah.”

예시: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home. For example, I can see multiple apartment blocks and a very tall department store about two blocks away, which stands out in the skyline.

제안: Give a direct, natural response and give a concise reason with a linking word. Reduce repetition and awkward phrasing (e.g., “I don't prefer” → “I don't usually” or “I don't like”).

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not particularly interested in photography; instead, I prefer taking pictures of friends and nature when I have the chance.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence naming the building, then give specific details (location, why it attracts you). Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect word order.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit N Seoul Tower in Seoul because it is a famous landmark; additionally, it offers panoramic views of the city and has restaurants and observation decks that interest me.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear, concise reason using linking words. Correct grammatical issues (conditional forms, article use) and avoid repeating phrases. Provide a brief example or consequence.

예시: No, I wouldn't like to live in a very tall building because I would have to use the elevator for a long time each day; moreover, I prefer easy access to the street and quicker emergency exits.

× Oh, yeah, Actually, there are many tall buildings near my house.

✓ Oh, yeah, actually, there are many tall buildings near my house.

Capitalization error at 'Actually' is not grammatical but stylistic; the sentence otherwise is correct. Use lowercase 'actually' mid-sentence. No article change needed.

× For example, I can see a lot of apartments around my house, and I can also see a department store, which is really tall.

✓ For example, I can see a lot of apartments around my house, and I can also see a department store that is really tall.

Using 'which' after a comma creates a non-restrictive clause; here the speaker is specifying the department store and describing it, so 'that is really tall' is more natural. Also avoid redundant 'I can' by keeping structure parallel. This fixes sentence clarity and structure.

× Honestly, I don't prefer taking a photo of buildings and anything else because I don't have any preference on taking a picture so I just do not take photos of buildings.

✓ Honestly, I don't prefer taking photos of buildings or anything else because I don't have a preference for taking pictures, so I just don't take photos of buildings.

Problems: plural/quantifier consistency ('a photo' vs 'photos'), incorrect preposition 'on' should be 'for', and redundant phrasing. Use the modal/negation 'don't' consistently and pluralize 'photos' to match general preference. Also replace 'or' for alternatives instead of 'and'.

× Yeah, I have one building to what where I want to visit, which is you some building which is located and in Seoul.

✓ Yes, there is one building that I want to visit, which is located in Seoul.

Original contains redundant and incorrect words ('to what where', 'you some', 'and in'). Simplify to a clear relative clause: 'one building that I want to visit' and 'which is located in Seoul.' This fixes sentence structure and removes extra words.

× It actually a landmark of Seoul.

✓ It is actually a landmark of Seoul.

Missing verb 'is' creates a verbless clause. Add the verb to form a complete sentence: 'It is actually a landmark of Seoul.'

× So I really want to visit there sometime later.

✓ So I really want to visit it sometime later.

Use correct object pronoun 'it' for 'visit it' rather than 'visit there.' 'There' indicates location but after 'visit' we use the object. The tense is fine; this corrects pronoun usage and word choice.

× I do not prefer living in a tall building because if I were I if I live in a tall building then I have to go to take a elevator much longer to reach my house, which is really I mean which is located in very high floor.

✓ I don't prefer living in a tall building because if I lived in one, I would have to ride the elevator much longer to reach my apartment, which would be on a very high floor.

Multiple issues: conditional structure and modal verbs ('if I lived... I would'), tense consistency (use past tense in the 'if' clause for unreal present), incorrect article 'a elevator' should be 'the elevator' or 'an elevator' (use 'ride' instead of 'take' for elevators is acceptable but 'ride the elevator' is natural), pronoun/word choice ('house' to 'apartment' or 'flat' if living in tall building), and phrase 'located in very high floor' needs 'on a very high floor.' The correction fixes conditional/modal usage, articles, and prepositions.