Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Focus on correct verb forms and countable/uncountable nouns.

예시: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home because my city is quite small. For example, most buildings are two or three storeys high, and there are more houses and low-rise shops than skyscrapers.

제안: Give a clear opinion followed by a concise reason using linking words. Reduce hesitation and repeat words; use correct phrasing (e.g., "see the aesthetic value"). Add a brief example to make it specific.

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer to appreciate them in person. For instance, when I visit historic sites I like to walk around and enjoy the details rather than photograph them.

제안: Answer directly and correct proper nouns and names. Use linking words to explain why, and be specific about which building you mean and what appeals to you. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a famous building in New York, the Empire State Building. I want to see it because I have watched many videos of its views, and I think the observation deck would offer amazing city panoramas.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (remove extra 'is' and repetitions), and add a specific reason with an example. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I dream of living in a tall apartment because I would enjoy the view of the city. For example, from a high floor I could see the skyline and busy streets, which I find exciting and inspiring.

× No, tall buildings in my city is not a common things.

✓ No, tall buildings in my city are not common.

Subject 'tall buildings' is plural so the verb must be 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'common things' is unnatural; use the adjective 'common' without 'things'. Use concise noun phrase for clarity.

× My city hometown is like a small hometown and it's not really uh, it's not the.

✓ My hometown is small and it's not really big.

Redundant and awkward phrasing: 'city hometown' repeats idea. Sentence was incomplete ('it's not the.'). Simplify to 'My hometown is small and it's not really big' to convey intended meaning and complete the thought.

× No, I don't really see any any aesthetic or value of taking a building, but I love to see with my eyes, uh, the beautiful building.

✓ No, I don't really see any aesthetic value in photographing buildings, but I love to see beautiful buildings with my own eyes.

Use present simple correctly and natural collocations: 'see any aesthetic value in' and 'photographing buildings' (gerund after preposition). Remove duplicate 'any' and reorder phrase to 'see beautiful buildings with my own eyes' for natural English.

× Yeah, absolutely. But the building is not in my hometown, is in the other country, the New York.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. But the building is not in my hometown; it is in another country, in New York.

Pronoun and demonstrative errors: use 'it is' to refer to 'the building'. Use 'another country' not 'the other country'. Use 'in New York' rather than 'the New York'. Also punctuation: join clauses properly.

× I love to visit the New York Big Bang because I saw a lot of video that it was so beautiful.

✓ I would love to visit the New York 'Big Bang' because I have seen many videos showing how beautiful it is.

Tense and word choice: 'I saw a lot of video' should be 'I have seen many videos' (present perfect to indicate experience). 'That it was so beautiful' is awkward; use 'showing how beautiful it is'. Also clarify name in quotes if it's a proper noun; adjust article usage.

× Yeah, it's actually is my dream, like living in a tall building, tall apartment that I can see a lot of the other building or the busy, busy city.

✓ Yeah, it actually is my dream to live in a tall apartment building so I can see many other buildings and the busy city.

Remove redundant 'it's is' (two verbs). Use infinitive 'to live' after 'dream'. Use plural 'buildings' and 'many' for quantifier. Simplify repetition 'busy, busy' to 'busy city'. Ensure subject-verb consistency and natural word order.