Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 発音や語彙のミスを直し、構造を簡潔にして自然な表現を使いましょう。具体的には “near my heart” は不自然なので “near my home” に直し、“sculptor/most famous nearby sculptor” は誤用なので“most famous landmark” にすること。トピック文の後に1〜2文で理由を述べ、接続詞（for example, so, therefore）を使って論理を明確にしてください。語彙は “skyscrapers”, “historic landmark”, “low-rise” を適切に使い、冗長な語を避けること。

예시: No, there aren't many tall modern skyscrapers near my home. The most famous nearby landmark is Big Ben, which is a historic clock tower rather than a high-rise building. Therefore, the area feels more traditional and low-rise.

제안: 文法と時制を整え、より自然で簡潔に理由を付け加えましょう。過去形の扱い（“I took” と “it's” の混同）を直し、“historic architecture looked very impressive” は不自然なので “its historic architecture was impressive” のように修正してください。接続語（because, so, for example）を使って一貫性を保ち、具体的な描写（stone walls, towers, details）を加えると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings. For example, I photographed the Tower of London last year because its historic architecture, such as the old stone walls and towers, looked very impressive.

제안: “the building in London” は具体性に欠けるので、訪れたい建物名を言いましょう（例：Tower of London, Westminster Abbey）。“architecture workarounds” は意味不明なので “architectural details” や “design features” に直すこと。理由を短く明確にし、接続詞（because, so, and）を使って文を滑らかに繋げてください。

예시: I would like to visit the Tower of London because it is very famous and often featured in guidebooks. I want to see its architectural details and take some photos of the old towers and walls.

제안: 流暢さと正しい語順、語彙を改善しましょう。無意味なフィラー（uh）を減らし、理由を明確に述べること。“when it occurs” は不自然なので “during an earthquake” にし、“higher area is not safety” は “high floors are not safe” に修正してください。代替案（low-rise house）を一文で付け加えると会話が豊かになります。

예시: No, I wouldn't. I think living on high floors is less safe during an earthquake, so I prefer a low-rise house or ground-floor apartment.

× No, there aren't many very tall modern skyscrapers near my heart.

✓ No, there aren't many very tall modern skyscrapers near my home.

'Near my heart' is a literal phrase about emotions and is incorrect for location. Use 'near my home' or 'near where I live' to describe physical proximity. Replace the preposition phrase to match intended meaning.

× The most famous nearby sculptor is Big Ben, which is a historic landmark rather than a high rise building, so the area feels more traditional and low rise.

✓ The most famous nearby structure is Big Ben, which is a historic landmark rather than a high-rise building, so the area feels more traditional and low-rise.

'Sculptor' is the wrong word; the correct noun is 'structure' or 'landmark'. Use hyphenated adjectives 'high-rise' and 'low-rise' when used before nouns. This fixes word choice and adjective form for clarity.

× Yes, I took photos of a big famous building in London.

✓ Yes, I took photos of a very famous building in London.

The phrase 'big famous' is awkward in English. Use an adverb 'very' to modify 'famous' or change order to 'a big, famous building' with a comma. This maintains past tense appropriate for a completed action.

× I photographed the Tower of London because it's historic architecture looked very impressive.

✓ I photographed the Tower of London because its historic architecture looked very impressive.

The sentence mixes 'it's' (it is) with a past-tense verb 'looked', causing a structure error. Use the possessive adjective 'its' to link to 'historic architecture', then keep the past tense 'looked' to match the action of photographing.

× I would like to visit the building in London because it is very famous and often mentioned in guidebooks.

✓ I would like to visit that building in London because it is very famous and often mentioned in guidebooks.

Using 'the building' is grammatically possible but may be ambiguous. Replacing with 'that building' clarifies which building is meant. No tense change is needed; sentence structure improved for clarity.

× I want to see its architecture workarounds and take some photos.

✓ I want to see its architecture and take some photos.

'Architecture workarounds' is incorrect and unclear. The correct noun is 'architecture' or 'architectural features'. Remove the inappropriate word 'workarounds' to convey the intended meaning.

× No, I don't because, uh, when I, when it occurs, uh, earthquake, so higher area is not safety, I think.

✓ No, I don't, because if an earthquake occurs, higher areas are not safe, I think.

Multiple issues: word order and articles ('an earthquake'), conditional phrasing ('if an earthquake occurs' rather than 'when I, when it occurs'), plural agreement for 'areas are not safe', and use of adjective 'safe' not noun 'safety'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity and correct tense/structure.