Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите заполнители (uh, um) и говорите более ясно и связно. Начните с прямого ответа на вопрос, затем добавьте одну-две конкретные детали. Избегайте противоречий в ответе (сначала «не думаю», затем «есть много»). Используйте связующие слова (for example, actually, in fact) и точные числа или описания.

예시: Not many are taller than my building. I live in a 12-story block, which is one of the tallest nearby. In fact, there are about twenty tall buildings in the wider neighborhood, mostly modern apartment blocks.

제안: Уменьшите количество «uh» и повторений. Дайте краткий прямой ответ и добавьте одну-две конкретные причины с примером. Используйте связки (because, when, for example) и точную лексику (architecture, façade, skyline).

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel because I appreciate interesting architecture. For example, I photographed several old cathedrals last year to remember their intricate façades.

제안: Говорите более уверенно и структурировано: назовите место и архитектора, если помните, или опишите здание конкретно. Избегайте обрывистых фраз и объясните, почему хотите посетить это место, с одной конкретной причиной. Используйте связки (for example, because, I admire) и точные термины (architecture, Gaudí, Sagrada Família).

예시: I would love to visit Barcelona to see Antoni Gaudí’s architecture, especially the Sagrada Família. I admire its unique, fairy-tale style and the way Gaudí blends nature into the design.

제안: Дайте ясный прямой ответ и добавьте 1–2 конкретные причины с примером, используя связующие слова (however, although, because). Избегайте невнятных окончаний и пауз. Сформулируйте предпочтение законченно (I prefer a house because...).

예시: I wouldn’t mind living in a tall building for the views it offers, especially overlooking a lake or forest. However, I prefer my own house because it gives me more privacy and outdoor space.

× I live uh, in UH-12 story building, uh, and it seems to me it is the most high building.

✓ I live in a 12-story building, and it seems to me it is the tallest building.

The sentence uses incorrect articles and adjective forms. Use the indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun '12-story building'. Compound adjectives like '12-story' are hyphenated. 'Most high' is nonstandard; the correct superlative form is 'tallest'. Suggestion: use 'a 12-story building' and 'the tallest building' to be grammatically correct and natural.

× Oh, uh, no. I am uh, uh, Lion.

✓ Oh, no. I am a lion.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun 'lion'. Singular common nouns need an article or determiner. Suggestion: add 'a' to form 'a lion' (or use 'I'm Lion' only if Lion is a name).

× Uh yeah. Uh, there are more uh, toll buildings near my house.

✓ Yeah. There are more tall buildings near my house.

Misspelling 'toll' instead of 'tall' is a word choice error. Also 'more tall' is acceptable but 'tall buildings' is sufficient; if comparing use 'taller'. Suggestion: use 'tall buildings' or 'more tall buildings' only in comparative contexts with a point of comparison.

× Uh, I guess, uh, near 20.

✓ I guess there are about 20.

'Near 20' is informal and incomplete. Use quantifier 'about' or 'around' with a verb: 'there are about 20'. Suggestion: say 'I guess there are about 20 buildings nearby.' for clarity.

× usually I take photos of buildings, uh, when I really like, uh, building and uh, when I travel and uh, uh, find it particularly interesting, beautiful and amazing.

✓ Usually I take photos of buildings when I really like a building, and when I travel and find it particularly interesting, beautiful, or amazing.

Missing article 'a' before 'building' and punctuation/connector issues. Use 'a building' as singular countable noun. Use commas and conjunctions to list adjectives. Suggestion: include 'a' and streamline the sentence: 'I take photos of a building when I find it interesting.'

× I, uh, make, uh, pictures for memory.

✓ I make pictures as memories.

'For memory' is incorrect collocation. Use 'as memories' or 'to remember' or 'for memory's sake'. Also unnecessary commas removed. Suggestion: say 'I take pictures as memories' or 'to remember the place'.

× I uh, definitely would like to visit Barcelona and uh, all this, uh, beautiful buildings, uh, like in fairy tale, uh, by, uh, this famous architecture, uh, unfortunately I don't remember, uh, his name, uh, but I know that there is a building which is, uh, still built in and.

✓ I would definitely like to visit Barcelona and all its beautiful buildings that look like something out of a fairy tale by a famous architect; unfortunately I don't remember his name, but I know there is a building that is still under construction.

Multiple issues: possessive 'its' needed instead of 'this', 'buildings' plural with determiner, awkward phrasing 'like in fairy tale' should be 'like something out of a fairy tale', 'by this famous architecture' incorrect—use 'by a famous architect', and 'still built in and' is incomplete; correct is 'still under construction'. Sentence restructured for clarity and grammar. Suggestion: simplify and use correct collocations: 'its beautiful buildings', 'by a famous architect', 'still under construction'.

× Uh, it is uh, good when you, uh, have a great sightseeing, uh, especially if you live near a lake or maybe some beautiful forest.

✓ It's nice when you have great views, especially if you live near a lake or maybe a beautiful forest.

'Have a great sightseeing' is incorrect collocation. Use 'have great views' or 'have great sightseeing opportunities'. 'Some beautiful forest' should be 'a beautiful forest' or 'some beautiful forests'. Suggestion: use 'views' or 'sightseeing' appropriately and correct article use.

× Uh, but uh, more, more I would like uh, to live in my own house, Uh, so not in a.

✓ But actually, I would prefer to live in my own house, so not in a tall building.

Sentence is fragmented and missing object after 'in a'. 'More, more' redundant. Use 'prefer' for preference. Add 'tall building' to complete thought. Suggestion: complete the sentence and remove filler words.