Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が矛盾していて流暢さと一貫性が欠けています。まず最初に質問に対して直接で明確なトピック文を述べ、その後で短い支持情報を一〜二文で付け加えてください。繋ぎ言葉（However, Actually, In fact, For example等）を使って文の論理を整え、不要な詰まり語（uh, umm, but. の乱用）を減らしましょう。また文は最大5文に収め、具体的な説明（どのくらい高いか、どの方向にあるかなど）を入れると良いです。

예시: Yes, there are some tall buildings near my home. They are mostly apartment blocks about 10 to 15 stories high, located two kilometers east of my neighborhood. However, the area around my house is still fairly low-rise, so the tall buildings are not very close.

제안: 答えの意図は伝わりますが、表現が不自然で文法も改善できます。まず簡潔な主文で直接答え、その後理由や対比を加える時は接続詞（because, because I prefer, rather than等）を使って論理をはっきりさせてください。具体例（どんな自然を撮るか、いつ撮るかなど）を一つ加えると内容が豊かになります。詰まり語を避け、語彙を少し広げると良いです。

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I am more interested in nature. For example, I often photograph trees and landscapes during my weekend hikes.

제안: 答えが曖昧で語彙の選択と文の構成に誤りがあります（"capital" の使い方が不適切）。まず具体的にどの建物を訪れたいのか明確に答え、理由や背景を続けてください。接続詞（because, so, however）や具体的な情報（都市名、建物の特徴）を使うと説得力が増します。文を簡潔に保ち、重複を避けましょう。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the national capitol building in the capital city because I am interested in its history and architecture. Unfortunately, the capital is far from my hometown, but I hope to visit next year.

제안: 理由は理解できますが、表現が断片的で非標準な口語表現（wanna）や冗長が目立ちます。まず直接の肯定文を述べ、その後に一つか二つの具体的な理由を接続詞でつなげてください。例や結果（view, safety, cleanlinessなど）を付けると説得力が増します。語彙を正確にして文を整えてください。

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I believe it would be cleaner and have fewer insects than low-rise housing. In addition, living higher up would give me a nice view of the city.

× No, there aren't, but.

✓ No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home.

The original sentence fragment is incomplete and uses 'but' incorrectly. Provide a full clause that responds to the question. Use 'there aren't any' for negation with plural countable noun 'tall buildings'. Suggestion: Complete the sentence and avoid dangling conjunctions.

× There are quite tall buildings near my home and also umm do buildings.

✓ There are quite tall buildings near my home and also some other buildings.

The phrase 'do buildings' is incorrect and the sentence is cluttered with filler. Use 'some other buildings' to express additional buildings. Remove filler words like 'umm' for clarity. Suggestion: Use clear nouns and connectors.

× No, I don't because I don't have curiosity about buildings, but I'm interested in viewing of nature and.

✓ No, I don't because I'm not curious about buildings, but I'm interested in viewing nature.

Use 'be curious' rather than 'have curiosity' for a natural expression and omit the incorrect preposition 'of' after 'viewing'. The sentence also ended abruptly; complete the thought without trailing conjunctions. Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'be curious about' and 'viewing nature'.

× Yes, I want to visit capital, but.

✓ Yes, I want to visit the capital, but I haven't yet.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'capital' when referring to a specific city seat. The original ends abruptly with 'but'; complete the clause to express the contrast. Suggestion: Use 'the capital' and finish the contrasting clause.

× There are no capital near my home.

✓ There is no capital near my home.

'Capital' is treated as a singular noun here, so use 'there is' not 'there are', and use 'no' appropriately. Subject-verb agreement with 'there is' is required. Suggestion: Match 'there is' for singular nouns.

× But I want to go.

✓ But I want to go there.

The verb 'go' typically requires a destination; add 'there' to specify where. The sentence fragment feels incomplete without an object or adverbial. Suggestion: Add a destination after 'go' when referring back to a place.

× Yes, I do, because I don't wanna see insect, but low, low building.

✓ Yes, I do, because I don't want to see insects in a low building.

Use 'want to' instead of informal 'wanna' in formal responses. 'Insect' should be plural 'insects' when speaking generally. Phrase the cause clearly: 'insects in a low building'. Suggestion: Avoid colloquial contractions and use correct plural forms.

× In a low building there are insects.

✓ In a low building, there are insects.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma for natural pause. No major grammatical error other than punctuation. Maintain word order; article usage 'a low building' is fine. Suggestion: Add a comma for clarity and natural rhythm.

× So I want to live in a tall building and also I want to watch.

✓ So I want to live in a tall building and also I want to enjoy the view.

The verb 'watch' is incomplete without an object; 'enjoy the view' expresses the intended meaning of observing surroundings from a tall building. Complete the idea with an appropriate noun phrase. Suggestion: Use a specific noun phrase ('the view') after verbs like 'enjoy' or 'watch'.