Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "tall buildings", "stories"). Avoid repetition. Also limit to under five sentences.

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small hometown where most houses are only two or three storeys high, so it’s rare to see high-rises. Because of that, the skyline looks very low and open.

제안: Make a clear, direct statement then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use correct verb forms (e.g., "I enjoy taking photos"), and avoid unclear phrases. Keep sentences short and coherent, with linking words like "because" or "when".

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings, especially tall or historic ones. When I travel, I often take pictures to remember the places I visited because buildings can capture a city’s character.

제안: Start with a clear answer and then give specific details: name, location, and a brief reason. Use correct names and prepositions (e.g., "on the banks of the Yamuna River"). Avoid repetition and limit to a few sentences.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit the Taj Mahal in Agra. It sits on the banks of the Yamuna River, and I want to see its architecture and learn about the history behind it.

제안: Answer directly and give one or two clear, specific reasons. Use correct grammar for preferences and conditional sentences. Improve coherence with linking words like "because" and "so"; avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy high-floor views. At night the city lights would be beautiful and it would make me feel relaxed and satisfied.

× Definitely no.

✓ Definitely not.

'No' alone is not a grammatically correct short answer here; use 'not' with an auxiliary or a full phrase. Better: 'Definitely not.' This fixes sentence structure rather than plurality.

× To be honest, I live in a small hometown where I where number of people have not told building.

✓ To be honest, I live in a small hometown where a lot of people do not have tall buildings.

The original sentence has word order and missing determiners and verbs. 'Where I where number of people have not told building' is ungrammatical. Correct structure: 'where a lot of people do not have tall buildings.' 'A lot of' expresses quantity (fixes plural), 'do not have' is correct negative verb form, and 'tall buildings' is plural and spelled correctly.

× They have two and three story building house.

✓ They have two- and three-story houses.

Use hyphenated compound adjectives 'two- and three-story' before plural noun 'houses.' 'Building house' is redundant; choose 'houses.' Also plural 'houses' matches 'two- and three-story.'

× So it is very challenging for me to see a tall building in my hometown.

✓ So it is very rare for me to see a tall building in my hometown.

'Challenging for me to see' is awkward meaning; 'rare for me to see' or 'uncommon to see' better conveys frequency. Grammatically the sentence was acceptable but word choice improves clarity.

× Definitely just being a four to five person, I love to capturing of tall building and when it's actually when I traveling, I love to click the photo about the toll premium because it was a good way to remember a place as well as a memory.

✓ Even though I am one of four or five people in my group, I love capturing tall buildings when I travel; I like taking photos because they are a good way to remember a place.

Original contains ungrammatical phrases ('just being a four to five person', 'love to capturing of', 'when it's actually when I traveling', 'click the photo about the toll premium'). Corrected version fixes subject-verb agreement, removes awkward clauses, uses gerund 'capturing' correctly after 'love,' uses 'when I travel' for time, and uses 'taking photos' and 'they are' for clarity.

× So I definitely like to take a photo withdrawal building.

✓ So I definitely like to take photos of buildings.

Incorrect phrase 'withdrawal building' likely mistaken for 'of buildings.' Use 'take photos of buildings.' Also use plural 'photos' for general habit and 'like to take' or 'like taking' both work; here 'like to take' is used.

× Of course yes there are number of building that I would like to visit in the my future.

✓ Of course, there are a number of buildings that I would like to visit in the future.

Need article 'a' before 'number,' plural 'buildings,' and remove extra 'the' before 'my future.' Also add comma after 'Of course' for clarity.

× But one is the special which is Taj Mahal located in Agra, the Bank of Jamna River.

✓ But one special building is the Taj Mahal, which is located in Agra on the banks of the Yamuna River.

Use 'one special building' or 'one of them is the Taj Mahal.' 'Bank of Jamna River' is incorrect; correct name 'Yamuna' and plural 'banks' with preposition 'on.' Also add comma and relative clause 'which is located...' for clarity.

× I would like to visit a Taj Mahal.

✓ I would like to visit the Taj Mahal.

Taj Mahal is a unique, specific landmark and takes the definite article 'the,' not the indefinite article 'a.'

× Of course, yes, I would like to live in a tall building, because the tall building I like to explore a tall floor.

✓ Of course I would like to live in a tall building, because I would like to explore the higher floors.

Original repeats 'tall building' and uses incorrect phrase 'the tall building I like to explore a tall floor.' Improve by making subject and verb clear: 'I would like to explore the higher floors.'

× The when the night all lights are on and I would like to see the view of the night, which give me a sense of fulfillment.

✓ When the lights are on at night, I would like to see the view, which gives me a sense of fulfillment.

Remove extraneous 'The when the night'; correct word order 'at night' and subject-verb agreement 'gives' for singular 'view.' Also 'all lights are on' simplified to 'the lights are on.' 'Sense of fulfillment' is fine.