Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구성과 표현을 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 다듬으세요. 주제문을 먼저 제시한 뒤, 구체적 이유를 2~3개로 좁혀서 연결어로 매끄럽게 이어주세요. 예를 들어 'because' 대신 다양한 연결사(so, also, and, moreover)를 적절히 사용하고 중복 표현(‘so many diversity’, 반복된 문장)을 제거하세요. 발음·문법 오류(‘sources’→‘sauces’, ‘for it's spicy’→‘for its spicy’)도 교정하면 점수가 상승합니다.

예시: My favourite foods are Korean and Italian dishes. I particularly enjoy Italian food because the sauces are very flavorful and the ingredients are usually fresh. I also love Korean cuisine for its spicy and savory flavors, and there is a great variety of dishes to try.

제안: 말을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 불필요한 말버릇('umm')을 줄이고 문장 흐름을 단순화하면 좋습니다. 과거와 현재를 비교할 때는 명확한 연결어(‘but’, ‘however’, ‘now’)를 사용하고, 설명은 1~2개의 구체적 예로 제한하세요.

예시: When I was young, I preferred a limited range of foods and often ate kimchi jjigae, a spicy Korean stew. However, now I enjoy trying new dishes from other countries and experimenting with different flavours.

제안: 답변을 더 직접적으로 시작하고 불필요한 말(‘umm, kind of’)을 제거하세요. 전통 음식을 설명할 때는 간단한 이유와 개인적 느낌을 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 또한 문장 연결을 위해 ‘for example’ 대신 ‘for instance’나 ‘for special occasions’ 같은 표현을 자연스럽게 사용하세요.

예시: I don't usually change my everyday diet, but I do eat special traditional foods for certain occasions. For instance, I eat rice cake soup on New Year's Day because it is a Korean tradition and symbolizes growing a year older.

제안: 대답은 잘 구성되어 있지만 어휘와 철자에 주의하세요(‘complimentary’→‘complementary’). 더 자연스러운 연결을 위해 간단한 이유를 하나 추가하거나 개인적 기억을 넣으면 인상적입니다. 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

예시: No, it hasn't changed; my favourite dish is still pork stew from Busan. I love its rich, savoury broth and tender pork, and pairing it with spicy kimchi creates complementary flavours.

× I love pizza and pasta because the sources are very flavorful and the ingredients that are used in Italian dishes are very fresh.

✓ I love pizza and pasta because the sauces are very flavorful and the ingredients used in Italian dishes are very fresh.

'Sources' is a misspelling; the correct noun is 'sauces'. Also, 'that are used' is wordy; 'used' is more natural. Keep articles consistent — none needed before 'Italian dishes' here. Suggestion: use 'sauces' and prefer concise relative clauses such as 'ingredients used'.

× And I also enjoy Korean food for it's spicy and savory side.

✓ And I also enjoy Korean food for its spicy and savory side.

'It's' is a contraction of 'it is' or 'it has', while the possessive pronoun needed here is 'its'. Use 'its' to indicate possession. Suggestion: remember that 'its' (possessive) has no apostrophe.

× And there are so many diversity, so much diversity in Korean cuisine.

✓ And there is so much diversity in Korean cuisine.

'Diversity' is an uncountable noun, so use 'much' rather than 'many' and pair with singular verb 'is'. Also delete repeated phrase. Suggestion: use 'there is much diversity' or 'there is a lot of diversity'.

× Actually, when I was young, I didn't quite enjoy, umm, this much variety of food as today I used to eat the food that I only like, such as kimchi jjigae, which is.

✓ Actually, when I was young, I didn't enjoy as much variety of food as I do today; I used to eat only the foods I liked, such as kimchi jjigae.

Original sentence has incorrect comparison structure and word order. Use 'didn't enjoy as much variety ... as I do today' for comparison. 'I used to eat the food that I only like' is tense and word-order incorrect; change to 'I used to eat only the foods I liked'. Remove trailing fragment 'which is.' Suggestion: keep comparative clauses parallel and match tense in each clause.

× A Korean spicy kimchi Stew.

✓ It is a Korean spicy kimchi stew.

This fragment lacks a subject and verb; add 'It is' to make a complete sentence. Also 'stew' should not be capitalized. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by including subject and verb.

× But now that I'm older, I really like experiencing new foods that I haven't tried from other countries.

✓ But now that I'm older, I really like trying new foods from other countries that I haven't tried before.

'Like experiencing new foods that I haven't tried from other countries' is awkward. Use 'trying new foods from other countries that I haven't tried before' to clarify. Maintain present tense preference 'I really like trying'. Suggestion: prefer 'trying' when referring to tasting food.

× Well, I don't usually eat different foods throughout the year, but when the time comes, I do have traditional dishes for some special occasions.

✓ Well, I don't usually eat different foods throughout the year, but on special occasions I do have traditional dishes.

'When the time comes' is wordy and slightly unnatural here; 'on special occasions' is clearer. Tense is fine. Suggestion: prefer concise time expressions.

× For example, I enjoy eating rice cake soup on New Year's Day because it's, umm, kind of Korean tradition.

✓ For example, I enjoy eating rice cake soup on New Year's Day because it's kind of a Korean tradition.

Use the article 'a' before 'Korean tradition' to indicate one tradition among others. Also remove filler commas. Suggestion: use 'a Korean tradition' for countable concept.

× It means that you are getting another year.

✓ It means that you are getting another year older.

The phrase 'getting another year' is incomplete; English speakers say 'getting another year older' or 'you are a year older'. Suggestion: add 'older' or rephrase to 'you become a year older'.

× No, it hasn't changed. My favorite food has always been pork Stew, a local dish from Busan.

✓ No, it hasn't changed. My favorite food has always been pork stew, a local dish from Busan.

'Stew' should not be capitalized. Tense and articles are correct. Suggestion: use lowercase for common nouns.

× I love its rich, savory broth and tender pork, and eating with spicy kimchi brings many complimentary flavors.

✓ I love its rich, savory broth and tender pork, and eating it with spicy kimchi brings many complementary flavors.

'Complimentary' means free or expressing praise; the intended word is 'complementary', meaning flavors that enhance each other. Also add 'it' after 'eating' to clarify the object. Suggestion: remember the difference between 'complimentary' and 'complementary'.