Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “My favourite food is meatballs.”), avoid filler words and unclear phrases like “protect something protein,” and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar and singular/plural forms.

예시: My favourite food is meatballs because I like their savory flavour and they are quick to cook. For example, I often eat beef meatballs with rice or tomato sauce for a simple, satisfying meal.

제안: Use correct grammar and link your ideas clearly. Begin with a topic sentence (e.g., “I used to love sweets when I was young.”), correct tense and expressions ("I had a sweet tooth"), and add one specific detail or memory. Use linking words like "for example" or "because" to connect ideas.

예시: I used to have a sweet tooth when I was young, and I loved lollipops and ice cream. For example, I would buy a cone from a street vendor as a special treat after school because it made the afternoons feel rewarding.

제안: Answer directly and avoid irrelevant or confusing sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence about seasonal changes (e.g., “Not really — my diet stays fairly constant.”), then give a specific example of a seasonal change if applicable, using linking words ("however", "in summer"). Remove unclear phrases like "The version is to clear sentence out."

예시: Not really — my diet stays fairly constant throughout the year. However, in summer I tend to eat more fresh fruit like watermelon and berries, while in winter I prefer warm soups and stews to feel more comfortable.

제안: This answer is good but can be tightened and made more natural. Begin with a concise topic sentence ("Yes, it has changed."), then give one or two specific comparisons and a reason, using linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid repeating similar words ("fresh foods" and "homemade meals" are fine but be specific).

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I loved sweets and candy, but now I prefer homemade meals and fresh salads because they help me feel healthier and give me more energy.

× My favorite food is meatball or any anything that related to protect something protein in it like fish, meat or beef.

✓ My favorite food is meatballs or anything that contains protein, like fish, chicken, or beef.

The sentence has multiple quantifier and word-choice errors. 'Meatball' should be plural 'meatballs' when speaking generally (quantifier/plural). 'Any anything' is redundant; use 'anything'. 'Related to protect something protein in it' is incorrect phrasing; use 'contains protein'. 'Meat' is a general category; use a specific example like 'chicken' or keep 'meat'—here 'chicken' is more parallel with fish and beef. Suggestion: use simple structures: 'X or anything that contains Y.'

× I was very sweet tooth when I was young.

✓ I had a very sweet tooth when I was young.

'Sweet tooth' is a noun phrase meaning a liking for sweet foods; it requires the verb 'have'. Using 'was' is incorrect here. Use 'had a sweet tooth' or 'I was very fond of sweets.'

× I love lollipops and ice cream.

✓ I loved lollipops and ice cream.

The question asks about when the student was young (past). The verb should be past tense 'loved' to match the time frame. Using present 'love' creates a tense mismatch.

× I enjoy the streets because they taste great and they were special reward after school.

✓ I enjoyed street snacks because they tasted great and were a special reward after school.

Several issues: tense must be past 'enjoyed' and 'tasted' to match 'when I was young'. 'The streets' is unnatural here; use 'street snacks' or 'street food'. 'They were special reward' needs an article: 'a special reward'. Also remove redundant 'they' before 'were'.

× Not really, my diet is mostly the same throughout the year.

✓ Not really. My diet is mostly the same throughout the year.

Minor punctuation: original is acceptable grammatically but better as two sentences. The tense is present and appropriate for current habits, so no tense change needed. Provide correct punctuation.

× As a child I had a sweet tooth and ate a lot of candies but now I prepare healthy foods like fruits or salad.

✓ As a child I had a sweet tooth and ate a lot of candy, but now I prepare healthier foods like fruit and salads.

'A lot of candies' is non-idiomatic; 'a lot of candy' or 'many candies' is correct. 'Fruits' is usually uncountable in this context: use 'fruit' or 'pieces of fruit'. 'Salad' as a general category is better plural 'salads' or 'salad' depending; 'salads' fits parallel structure. Also 'healthy foods' could be 'healthier foods' to show contrast with past.

× The version is to clear sentence out.

✓ This sentence is unclear and should be removed or rewritten.

The phrase 'The version is to clear sentence out' is ungrammatical and unclear in meaning. It appears to be an editing note rather than content for the answer. Suggest deleting it or replacing with a clear sentence, e.g. 'I meant to say that I now eat healthier.'

× Absolutely, When I was a child I used to eat a lot of sweets and other sugar snacks but now I prefer healthier, more nourishing foods like fresh foods and homemade meals because they make me feel better and give me more energy.

✓ Absolutely. When I was a child, I used to eat a lot of sweets and other sugary snacks, but now I prefer healthier, more nourishing foods like fresh produce and homemade meals because they make me feel better and give me more energy.

Multiple issues: capitalize correctly and separate clauses with periods/commas. 'Sugar snacks' is not idiomatic; use 'sugary snacks'. 'Fresh foods' is repetitive with 'homemade meals'—use 'fresh produce' for clarity. Commas are needed before 'but' connecting independent clauses and after introductory phrase 'When I was a child'. Verbs 'used to eat' (past) and 'prefer' (present) are appropriate for contrasting past and present.