Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct repetition/grammar, add a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct article usage and repetition (‘a popular tropical fruit’), remove hesitations. Aim for 3–4 sentences.

예시: My favourite food is mango. It’s a popular tropical fruit in Taiwan and I love it for its sweet flavor and soft texture. In summer I often eat fresh mango as a refreshing snack because it’s juicy and energizing.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and fix grammar (tense and subject agreement). Use linking word to contrast past and present (e.g., ‘however’). Provide a specific example or brief reason for the change.

예시: When I was young, I loved eating ice cream because it was sweet and helped me cool down in summer. However, now my teeth are sensitive, so I rarely eat very cold desserts anymore.

제안: Keep answers fluent and reduce fillers (uh, umm). Use linking words (for example, in contrast) and be specific with seasons and examples. Correct capitalization and plurality (peaches, pears). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. In Taiwan people prefer seasonal foods because they are fresher and more plentiful. For example, in summer we eat mangoes, bananas and pineapples, while in winter we often eat peaches and pears.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two concise reasons with linking words (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘so’). Correct grammar (tense: ‘as I’ve grown up’) and avoid repetition (‘I want to get fit’ twice).

예시: Yes. I used to eat a lot of sweet foods, but as I’ve grown up I’m less attracted to them because I want to stay fit and be healthier. Therefore I choose more balanced meals and limit sugary snacks.

× Mango is popular fruit popular tropical fruit in Taiwan, and its sweet taste and the soft texture makes it especially delightful for me.

✓ Mango is a popular tropical fruit in Taiwan, and its sweet taste and soft texture make it especially delightful for me.

The sentence omits the article 'a' before 'popular tropical fruit' (article error and singular/plural agreement). 'Taste and soft texture' are two subjects joined by 'and', so the verb should be plural 'make' not 'makes'. Suggestion: add the article 'a' and use 'make' for plural subjects. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I really like to eat them in summer as a as a refreshment.

✓ I really like to eat them in summer as a refreshment.

There is a duplicated phrase 'as a'. Remove the extra 'as a' to make the sentence grammatically correct. Also 'them' referring to mango (singular) is inconsistent; use 'mangoes' or 'them' must match plural. Suggest changing 'mango' earlier to 'mangoes' if plural is intended. Grammar problem type ID:10

× When I was young I really enjoyed eating ice creams because they are sweet and can cool me down in the in the hot summer.

✓ When I was young I really enjoyed eating ice cream because it is sweet and can cool me down in the hot summer.

'Ice cream' is usually uncountable, so use singular form 'ice cream' and refer to it with 'it' rather than 'they'. Also remove the duplicate 'the in the'. Suggest using uncountable noun with singular pronoun. Grammar problem type ID:1

× But nowadays my teeth are so sensitive that don't that they don't allow me to eat icy food that much.

✓ But nowadays my teeth are so sensitive that they don't allow me to eat icy foods very much.

The original has extra words and incorrect word order ('that don't that they don't'). Also 'icy food' is better as plural 'icy foods' or uncountable 'icy food' with adjusted wording; 'very much' is more natural than 'that much' here. Suggest removing duplicate words and putting 'they don't allow me' in correct order. Grammar problem type ID:26

× People in Taiwan enjoy eating foods of the seasons because they are, at the time, uh, the most delicious and abundant.

✓ People in Taiwan enjoy eating seasonal foods because they are, at that time, the most delicious and abundant.

Use 'seasonal foods' or 'foods of the season' instead of 'foods of the seasons'. 'At the time' is vague; 'at that time' or 'then' is clearer. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggest using 'seasonal foods' and 'then' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11

× For example, in summer we eat mango, banana, umm, pineapple, and while in winter we eat Peach and pears a lot.

✓ For example, in summer we eat mangoes, bananas and pineapples, while in winter we eat peaches and pears a lot.

Fruit names should be plural when speaking generally. Capitalization: 'peach' should not be capitalized. Remove filler 'umm' and fix list punctuation. Suggest using plural forms for general statements. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yes, when I was younger I used to enjoy sweet foods a lot, but as I grow up I I feel like I'm less attracted by those sweet stuff because I need to.

✓ Yes, when I was younger I used to enjoy sweet foods a lot, but as I grew up I feel like I'm less attracted to those sweet things because I need to.

Tense inconsistency: 'as I grow up' should be past 'as I grew up' if referring to change over time; or 'as I have grown up'. 'Less attracted by' is less natural than 'less attracted to'. 'Sweet stuff' is informal; use 'sweet things' or 'sweets'. Remove duplicated 'I'. Suggest consistent past reference and correct preposition 'to'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I want to get fit, I want to stay fit and I also want to stay healthy.

✓ I want to get fit, stay fit, and stay healthy.

This is more a style issue: sentence can be tightened by parallel structure and removing repetition. Ensure commas and conjunctions create parallelism: 'get fit, stay fit, and stay healthy.' Suggest combining verbs for fluency. Grammar problem type ID:26