Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は複数の食品を挙げていますが、表現の正確さや文法、論理のつながりが弱く、不自然な語彙や不完全な文が目立ちます。改善点：1) 一つの主題文で好きなものを明確に述べる（例：My favourite food is... または I like X, Y and Z.）。2) 理由は簡潔に一文ずつ述べ、具体例や頻度を示す（use linking words: because, so, for example）。3) 文法（articles, verb forms, collocations）を直す。4) 回答は3文以内にまとめ、冗長なフレーズを避ける。

예시: I like yakiniku, curry rice and sushi. I enjoy yakiniku because I love the charred flavor of grilled meat, and curry rice is comforting so I often eat it at home. For example, I usually order curry rice when I go to casual restaurants.

제안: 意味は伝わりますが、語彙の選択と文法（looked → liked / homemade hamburger → homemade hamburgers or homemade hamburgers with rice）が改善必要です。改善点：1) トピック文で過去の好みをはっきり述べる。2) 理由を簡潔に述べ、具体的なエピソードを1つ入れる。3) 過去形を正しく使う。

예시: When I was a child, I liked homemade hamburgers with rice because they were warm and comforting. For example, my mother often made them for us after school, and we always ate together as a family.

제안: 基本的な意図は明確ですが、表現が散らばり、発音しにくい語（osichi → osechi）や冗長な語（uh）があります。改善点：1) 直接答えてから例外を述べる（linking: but, however）。2) 文化的な語は正しい表記と簡単な説明を付ける。3) 不必要なフィラーを避ける。

예시: No, I usually don't change what I eat with the seasons, but there is an exception at New Year. For example, we eat osechi, a traditional Japanese assortment of dishes, which I only have on New Year’s Day.

제안: 文法と語順に多くの問題があり、意味が取りにくいです。改善点：1) 現在完了を使って変化の有無を述べる（has/have + not + past participle）。2) 子供の頃の具体的な例と現在の状況を比較して簡潔に表現する。3) 冗長な繰り返しや誤った語句を避ける。

예시: No, my favourite food hasn't changed since I was a child because I still love the curry my mother used to make. When I was little she often cooked it for me, and I still enjoy it now.

× My favorite foods are yakiniku, Curry rice, and sushi because I love grilled meat and rich several sources.

✓ My favorite foods are yakiniku, curry rice, and sushi because I love grilled meat and rich sauces.

'Several' is an incorrect quantifier here; the intended word is 'sauces' to describe rich flavors. Use the noun 'sauces' instead of 'sources' and do not use 'several' before 'sauces' in this context. Also use lowercase for 'curry rice' as it is not a proper noun. Suggestion: Replace 'rich several sources' with 'rich sauces' or 'a variety of rich sauces.'

× I often need Curry rice at home and at restaurants.

✓ I often eat curry rice at home and at restaurants.

The verb 'need' is incorrect in this context; 'eat' or 'have' is appropriate to express consuming food. Also 'Curry rice' should be 'curry rice' in lowercase. Suggestion: Use 'eat' to indicate consumption: 'I often eat curry rice at home and at restaurants.'

× Well, I usually go out for.

✓ Well, I usually go out to eat.

The fragment 'go out for' is incomplete; the full expression is 'go out to eat' or 'go out for dinner/lunch.' The sentence lacks the object and verb required. Suggestion: Complete the phrase: 'I usually go out to eat.'

× When I was a child, I looked homemade hamburger and rice because it was so warm and comforting.

✓ When I was a child, I liked homemade hamburgers and rice because they were so warm and comforting.

'Looked' is the wrong verb; 'liked' expresses preference. 'Hamburger' should be plural if referring to the dish in general. 'It' is incorrect for two items; use 'they.' Suggestion: Use 'liked' and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct pronoun: 'I liked homemade hamburgers and rice because they were so warm and comforting.'

× For example, my mother often made a hamburger for us and we ate it.

✓ For example, my mother often made hamburgers for us and we ate them.

If 'hamburgers' is plural, the pronoun must be plural ('them') rather than 'it.' Ensure consistency between noun number and pronoun. Suggestion: Use plural nouns and pronouns when referring to multiple items.

× No, I usually don't eat different foods in different seasons, but at New Year's Day it's a special food I eat, for example, uh, osichi in Japanese.

✓ No, I usually don't eat different foods in different seasons, but on New Year's Day I eat a special food, for example, osechi in Japanese.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'New Year's Day.' 'It's a special food I eat' is awkward; 'I eat a special food' is clearer. 'osichi' is misspelled; the correct term is 'osechi.' Suggestion: Say 'on New Year's Day I eat a special food, for example, osechi.'

× No, I has not changed my favorite food since I am a child because I I when I was a child I liked a career race that made that was made by my mother and now it's same.

✓ No, my favorite food has not changed since I was a child because when I was a child I liked curry rice that was made by my mother and now it's the same.

Multiple errors: 'has' with 'I' is incorrect auxiliary; 'my favorite food has not changed' is correct subject-verb order. Use past tense 'was' with 'since I was a child.' Remove duplicate 'I.' 'career race' is a misspelling of 'curry rice.' 'that made that was made by my mother' is redundant; use 'that was made by my mother.' 'it's same' should be 'it's the same.' Suggestion: Use correct auxiliary placement, past tense for 'was a child,' fix misspellings, and simplify redundancy: 'My favorite food has not changed since I was a child because I liked the curry rice my mother made, and it's the same now.'