Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and fluid: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a brief explanation using a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases like “so” and reduce hesitation to sound more natural.

예시: I love chicken wings. When I was a child my mother always bought them for birthdays and other celebrations, so they remind me of happy family moments. Because of those memories, chicken wings are especially meaningful to me.

제안: Use correct tense and be more specific: give a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific example and a reason with a linking word. Remove filler phrases like “just like every single kid” and avoid repetition.

예시: When I was young I liked sweet foods, especially candies and chocolate. For example, my parents often rewarded me with sweets when I did well at school, so I associated them with treats and rewards.

제안: Improve coherence and fluency: give a direct topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, in winter, in summer) and specific details. Avoid hesitations and filler words, and keep sentences concise (max 5).

예시: Yes, I do. In winter we often eat hot pot because the weather is cold; we usually include beef, sausages and vegetables. In warmer seasons I prefer lighter dishes like pasta or salads.

제안: Fix grammar and reduce repetition: start with a clear comparison using past and present tense, give a brief reason for the change, and provide a specific example. Avoid vague praise and long general statements.

예시: Yes, it has. As a child my favourite was honey-glazed chicken wings because I liked sweet flavours. Now I prefer sushi and other Japanese dishes because I enjoy lighter, fresher tastes and more subtle flavours.

× My favorite food is chicken wings because when I was young my mom always bought that for special occasions like my birthday.

✓ My favorite food is chicken wings because when I was young my mom always bought them for special occasions like my birthday.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrect for referring to a plural noun 'chicken wings'. Use the plural pronoun 'them'. Additionally this fixes agreement between the noun and pronoun. Suggestion: Use 'them' to refer to plural nouns.

× So I kind of relate chicken wings with special memories, so it's really important to me.

✓ So I kind of associate chicken wings with special memories, so they are really important to me.

The verb 'relate' is awkward here; 'associate' is the appropriate verb. Also 'chicken wings' is plural so the pronoun and verb should be plural ('they are'). Suggestion: Use 'associate' and match plural noun with plural pronoun and verb.

× When I was young, just like every single kid out there, I like sweet food like candies and chocolates because there are some of the gifts that parents would give to children when they did something good like, so that's why I like candies and chocolate.

✓ When I was young, just like every single kid out there, I liked sweet foods like candies and chocolates because they were some of the gifts that parents would give to children when they did something good, so that's why I liked candies and chocolate.

The sentence describes past habits, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'like' -> 'liked'. 'There are some of the gifts' is awkward; replace with 'they were some of the gifts' to refer to candies. Also use plural 'sweet foods' or simply 'sweets'. Suggestion: Keep verbs in past tense when talking about past habits; ensure pronouns agree with antecedents.

× When I was young, just like every single kid out there, I like sweet food like candies and chocolates because there are some of the gifts that parents would give to children when they did something good like, so that's why I like candies and chocolate.

✓ When I was young, just like every single kid out there, I liked sweet foods like candies and chocolates because they were some of the gifts that parents would give to children when they did something good, so that's why I liked candies and chocolate.

Subject-verb agreement: 'I like' with past time frame should be 'I liked'. Also 'there are some of the gifts' incorrectly equates existence; using 'they were some of the gifts' makes subject and verb agree. Suggestion: Match verb forms to the time frame and ensure pronouns refer clearly to nouns.

× Yes, definitely. So for winter we because the weather is very cold, so you usually have hot pot where we'll we'll eat beef or sausages etcetera.

✓ Yes, definitely. In winter, because the weather is very cold, people usually have hot pot where we eat beef or sausages, etc.

The original sentence has repetition ('we because') and awkward structure. Use 'In winter' for time phrase, remove duplicate 'we'll', and change 'you usually have' to 'people usually have' or keep 'we eat' consistently. Suggestion: Simplify structure, avoid repetitions, and keep subject consistent.

× And on other occasions or other seasons we usually have pasta.

✓ In other seasons we usually have pasta.

Use 'In other seasons' rather than 'on other occasions or other seasons' for natural phrasing. The present tense 'have' is acceptable for habitual actions. Suggestion: Use concise time prepositions 'in' for seasons.

× So when I was young, my favorite food was honey chicken wings because it is because they are. They were sweet so and delicious.

✓ So when I was young, my favorite food was honey chicken wings because they were sweet and delicious.

The original has fragmented clauses and tense mismatches. Use past tense 'were' to describe past qualities. Remove redundant words 'it is because they are' and correct word order 'sweet and delicious'. Suggestion: Combine fragments into a single clear past-tense sentence and use correct adjective order.

× But when I grow older I prefer something that's not as sweet as that.

✓ But as I grew older I preferred something that wasn't as sweet as that.

The speaker refers to a change over time; verbs should be in the past: 'grow' -> 'grew', 'prefer' -> 'preferred', and use 'wasn't' for past negation. Suggestion: Use past tense when describing changes that occurred in the past.

× I usually eat sushi. Japanese foods are some of the best food that I have ever tasted.

✓ I usually eat sushi. Japanese food is some of the best food that I have ever tasted.

'Japanese foods' is acceptable but when speaking generally about the cuisine, use uncountable 'Japanese food'. Also 'some of the best food' pairs better with singular 'food' or use 'dishes' for plural. Suggestion: Use 'Japanese food' when referring generally to the cuisine, or 'Japanese dishes' if referring to specific items.