Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article errors (e.g., 'the smell attracts me', 'the pieces of mutton and fried potato are tender and juicy'). Avoid repetition.

예시: My favourite food is Hyderabadi biryani. I love it because the fragrant spices and saffron-infused rice create a rich aroma, and the tender pieces of mutton and crisp fried potatoes add contrasting textures.

제안: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Give one clear topic sentence in past tense, then add a specific supporting detail (who cooked it, how often) using linking words. Reduce hesitation and redundant phrases.

예시: When I was young, I really liked my grandmother’s chicken. She used to cook it for me every week, and I ate it three or four times because it was simple, tender and full of flavour.

제안: Organise the answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words (for example, 'in summer' / 'in winter'). Be specific about examples and reasons, and use present simple or present habitual (I eat) rather than 'used to' unless referring to past. Eliminate fillers and complete sentences.

예시: Yes. In summer I usually eat lots of fruits such as watermelon and mango because they keep me hydrated. In winter I tend to eat more warm vegetable dishes, like lentil curry and roasted greens, to stay warm and nourished.

제안: Answer directly with a clear contrast using linking words (for example, 'When I was a child... but now...'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'when I was a child' and 'nowadays I like biryani'). Add one specific reason for the change to make the response richer.

예시: Yes. When I was a child I preferred simple chicken dishes, but now I prefer Hyderabadi biryani because I enjoy its complex flavours and the special memories of eating it at family gatherings.

× The smell of Hyderabadi biryani that attracts me to eat it.

✓ The smell of Hyderabadi biryani attracts me to eat it.

The original sentence uses an unnecessary relative pronoun 'that' which creates an ungrammatical clause. Remove 'that' to form a simple subject-verb-object sentence: 'The smell ... attracts me to eat it.' Suggestion: use a clear subject and verb without an extraneous relative pronoun when stating a fact.

× Especially the piece of mutton and the fried potato was is very tender and juicy that attracts me to eat it.

✓ Especially the pieces of mutton and the fried potatoes are very tender and juicy, which attracts me to eat them.

The subject lists two items (mutton pieces and fried potatoes) so the verb must be plural ('are'). Also 'was is' is incorrect; choose one verb and the present tense 'are' fits a general preference. Use plural nouns 'pieces' and 'potatoes' to match. Use 'which' to introduce the relative clause referring to the whole idea, and use plural pronoun 'them.' Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and keep relative clauses clear.

× When I was young, I like chicken very much.

✓ When I was young, I liked chicken very much.

The time expression 'When I was young' places the action in the past, so the verb should be in past tense ('liked') rather than present ('like'). Suggestion: match verb tense to time adverbials indicating past.

× Uh, my grandmother make the dish, make the dish for me and I like that.

✓ My grandmother made the dish for me and I liked it.

Use past tense 'made' to match the past context and replace vague 'that' with the pronoun 'it.' Also avoid repetition 'make the dish' twice. Suggestion: use the correct past form of the verb and a clear pronoun for the object.

× I love that very much.

✓ I loved it very much.

Context is past ('when I was young'), so change 'love' to past 'loved' and 'that' to 'it' for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use clear pronouns.

× Umm, I, you, I used to like that very much.

✓ I used to like it very much.

Remove speaking disfluency 'I, you, I' and use 'it' to refer back to the dish. 'Used to' already indicates past habitual action. Suggestion: avoid filler words and repeaters in written corrections.

× And I eat the dish, uh, three or four times in a week.

✓ And I ate the dish three or four times a week.

The time reference is past habitual, so use past simple 'ate' or 'used to eat.' Remove 'in' before 'a week'—the correct phrase is 'a week.' Suggestion: use 'ate' or 'used to eat' and the phrase 'three or four times a week.'

× Uh, at the time of summer, I used to eat uh, maximum time, maximum times of fruit like, uh, watermelon or mango that makes our body very hydrated.

✓ In summer, I used to eat mainly fruits like watermelon or mango because they keep our bodies hydrated.

Use 'In summer' rather than 'at the time of summer.' 'Used to' correctly marks past habit. 'Maximum time' is incorrect; use 'mainly' or 'mostly.' 'Fruits' should be plural and the clause should use 'they keep our bodies hydrated' (plural subject agreement and natural phrasing). Suggestion: simplify awkward phrases and ensure subject-verb agreement and natural collocations ('keep hydrated' → 'keep our bodies hydrated').

× Uh, at the time of winter, we, I used to eat, uh, most, most of the time we uh, eat vegetables like, uh.

✓ In winter, I used to eat vegetables most of the time.

Streamline the sentence: 'In winter' fits seasonal reference; use 'I used to' for past habit. Remove repeated fragments and the extra 'we' unless the speaker means 'we' (choose one). Put 'most of the time' after the verb for natural word order. Suggestion: avoid repetition and keep subject consistent.

× Uh, yes. When I was child I used to like chicken, but, uh, nowadays I like biryani very much, uh.

✓ Yes. When I was a child I used to like chicken, but nowadays I like biryani very much.

Insert the article 'a' before 'child' ('a child'). 'Used to like' correctly shows past habit. Keep 'nowadays I like' in present to show current preference. Remove extra fillers and commas. Suggestion: use the article 'a' with singular nouns like 'child' and maintain clear tense contrast between past and present.