Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حسّن الاستخدام النحوي وتجنب التكرار وزِد الدقة في التعبير. قلل الجمل المتكررة واصغِر عدد الأفكار المكررة. استخدم جملة موضوعية واضحة تليها تفاصيل محددة (سبب أو مثال) مع رابط منطقي. انتبه لصياغة الأفعال والضمائر (مثلاً "it make" → "they make" أو "they make me feel better").

예시: My favourite food is fruit because it is healthy and tasty. For example, I usually eat apples and bananas as snacks since they are inexpensive and give me a quick boost of energy. They also help me feel refreshed during the day.

제안: صحّح الأزمنة والصياغة النحوية وقلل التكرار. استخدم زمن الماضي بشكل صحيح ("I was" بدلاً من "I were") واذكر أمثلة محددة منظمة باستخدام روابط مثل "for example" أو "such as". تجنب قول نفس الشيء مرتين.

예시: When I was young, I liked eating junk food. For example, I often ate burgers, noodles and chicken nuggets because they tasted good and were easy to get.

제안: اجعل الإجابة أكثر تركيزاً وقلّل التكرار. ابدأ بجملة مباشرة ثم أعقِبها بتفاصيل موسمية محددة (مثلاً أطعمة صيفية أو شتوية) واستخدم رابط مثل "for example" أو "in summer" لتوضيح الفكرة.

예시: Yes, I do. I prefer lighter, cooling foods in summer, such as salads and fruits, and heartier meals in winter, like stews and rice dishes. For example, I eat more watermelon and cold drinks in July, but I prefer soups in December.

제안: صحّح أخطاء الأزمنة والتركيب وعبّر بشكل أوضح عن السبب. ابدأ بجملة موضوعية تُجيب عن السؤال ثم اعطِ سبباً أو مثالاً يدعم التغيير. تجنّب الكلمات المكررة والعبارات الغامضة مثل "more is give me more like energy" واستبدلها بعبارات دقيقة وواضحة.

예시: Yes, it has changed. As a child I preferred junk food, but now I choose healthier options because they give me more sustained energy and make me feel better. For instance, I now eat more vegetables, grilled chicken and fresh fruit instead of fast food.

× My favorite food is fruits because fruits are very healthy and delicious and I enjoy when I eat fruits because it's cheap, it gives me energy and it make me feel so better.

✓ My favorite foods are fruit because fruit is very healthy and delicious, and I enjoy eating fruit because it's inexpensive, it gives me energy, and it makes me feel much better.

Use plural/singular nouns and pronouns correctly and verb agreement. 'Food' countability: 'fruits' can be plural but when speaking generally use 'fruit' or 'fruits' consistently; 'favorite foods' or 'my favorite food is fruit'. Use gerund 'enjoy eating' rather than 'enjoy when I eat'. 'Cheap' in this context is better as 'inexpensive'. Verb agreement: 'it make' should be 'it makes'. 'so better' is incorrect; use 'much better'. Suggestions: decide whether you mean the general category (use 'fruit') or specific types (use 'fruits') and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct gerund use.

× When I were young my favorite food was junk food and I ate a lot of types of junk food when I were young such as burger, noodles, Nuggets and other and I really like them since I was young.

✓ When I was young my favorite food was junk food, and I ate many kinds of junk food when I was young, such as burgers, noodles, nuggets, and others, and I really liked them when I was young.

Use correct past tense of 'to be': 'was' not 'were' with singular subject 'I'. Use plural nouns for countable items: 'burgers' and 'nuggets'. Use 'many kinds' instead of 'a lot of types'. Maintain past tense consistently: 'I really liked' and 'when I was young'. Suggestions: use 'was' with I in past, pluralize countable nouns, and keep tense consistent.

× Yes, I like to eat different foods at different time of the year and I like to change my food every day because I feel bored if I eat the same food everyday, so I like to change.

✓ Yes, I like to eat different foods at different times of the year, and I like to change my food every day because I feel bored if I eat the same food every day, so I like variety.

Preposition and noun number: use 'different times of the year' (plural). 'Everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverb phrase): here use 'every day'. The sentence also benefits from clearer ending: 'so I like variety' or 'so I like to change' is acceptable but 'so I like variety' is clearer. Suggestions: use 'times' for repeated occasions, and 'every day' as two words when meaning each day.

× Yes, my favorite food has changed since I were young. When I were young my favorite food was junk food. But now I like more healthy food because I know that the healthy food is more is give me more like energy and it's more better than junk food.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was young. When I was young my favorite food was junk food. But now I prefer healthier food because I know that healthy food gives me more energy and it's better than junk food.

Use 'was' not 'were' with 'I' in past. Use comparative forms correctly: 'healthier' instead of 'more healthy', 'gives' for subject-verb agreement with 'food', and avoid double words like 'more is give me more like'. Use 'better' not 'more better'. Suggestions: use 'since I was young' with present perfect, use 'prefer healthier food' and 'gives me more energy' for natural, grammatical phrasing.