Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise: give a clear topic sentence naming your favourite food, then add one specific reason or detail. Avoid repetition and unnecessary phrases. Use linking words if adding a detail (for example, because, especially, for instance). Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

예시: My favourite food is Italian cuisine, especially linguine with a light tomato sauce. I like it because the flavours are simple but rich, and the texture of the pasta is comforting. For example, I often order linguine when I eat out because it reminds me of relaxed family meals.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the foods, then link to a reason or memory using a connector (because, since, as). Avoid repeating the same phrase at the end. Keep details specific and concise.

예시: When I was young, I loved fried chicken, barbecue and spaghetti. I especially liked spaghetti because it was a staple at my sisters’ birthday parties, so it brings back happy memories. Because of those celebrations, those dishes felt special to me.

제안: Be precise and grammatical: give a direct answer (yes/no or brief statement) then support with clear examples and linking words. Avoid filler words and fragmented sentences. Use accurate descriptions and explain availability or reasons concisely.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods seasonally because some fruits are only available at certain times. For example, rambutan, a lychee-like tropical fruit, is only sold for a few months in the Philippines, and papaya is also more plentiful in certain seasons. Therefore I enjoy them when they are in season.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hesitation. State clearly whether your preference changed, then give specific contrasts and reasons using linking words (for example, however, now, because). Remove fillers and repeated words.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I loved pizza, but now I rarely eat it because I find it too heavy. Instead, I enjoy shawarma for its fresh vegetables and spicy sauce, which suit my current tastes better.

× I resonate well with different kinds of cuisine, but Italian is one that that I gravitate towards.

✓ I resonate with different kinds of cuisine, but Italian is the one I gravitate towards.

The sentence has redundancy and awkward adverb use. 'Resonate well with' is wordy; 'resonate with' is sufficient. 'One that that I gravitate towards' repeats 'that' and is awkward; use 'the one I gravitate towards' to be concise and grammatical. Suggestion: remove extra 'that' and unnecessary 'well'.

× Specifically linguine and a little bit of pasta.

✓ Specifically, linguine and a little bit of pasta.

This fragment lacks a verb, making it incomplete. Adding a comma helps integration into the previous sentence, or include a verb: 'I especially like linguine and a little bit of pasta.' The problem relates to sentence structure and missing verb; provide a complete clause.

× When I was little, I was fond of fried chicken and barbecue and spaghetti because it reminds me of the birthday parties I usually attended with my sisters.

✓ When I was little, I was fond of fried chicken, barbecue, and spaghetti because they reminded me of the birthday parties I usually attended with my sisters.

Tense inconsistency: main clause is past ('was fond'), but 'reminds' is present. Change 'reminds' to past 'reminded' to match past context. Also use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to multiple foods and include commas for list clarity.

× Of course there are seasonal food and I can't consume them as much as I wanted.

✓ Of course there are seasonal foods and I can't consume them as much as I want.

'Food' should be plural 'foods' (singular/plural issue) and tense mismatch: 'wanted' is past while context is present capability; use 'want'. The sentence combines two errors: change to 'seasonal foods' and 'I want'.

× For example, I live in the Philippines and we don't have rambutan.

✓ For example, I live in the Philippines and we don't have rambutan locally.

Technically grammatical, but adding 'locally' clarifies meaning. If intended meaning is that rambutan is unavailable in the Philippines, that would be incorrect factually; likely they mean 'we don't have rambutan where I live' so add 'locally' for clarity.

× It's like a lychee.

✓ It's similar to a lychee.

'Like' used alone is colloquial; 'similar to' is more formal and precise in this context. The original is acceptable informally, but for grammatical clarity 'similar to' is better.

× So it's a tropical fruit and it's not available year round.

✓ So it's a tropical fruit and it's not available year-round.

'Year round' should be hyphenated when used as an adjective or adverb in this compound form: 'year-round'. This fixes a punctuation/compound-word usage.

× And there goes, uh, papaya, for instance.

✓ And then there's papaya, for instance.

'And there goes' is incorrect here; use 'there's' or 'there is' to introduce another example. Also 'uh' is a filler; in corrected speech remove fillers. 'Then' improves flow: 'And then there's papaya, for instance.'

× It's something I really love, but I couldn't have it every day so.

✓ It's something I really love, but I couldn't have it every day then.

Mix of present 'It's' and past 'couldn't' with vague 'so' ending. If referring to past limited availability, use 'then' instead of 'so' to indicate time. Alternatively, to express present inability: 'I can't have it every day.' Choose tense to match meaning. Here corrected to past context 'then'.

× When I was little, I used to like pizza a lot, but now I I don't eat it.

✓ When I was little, I used to like pizza a lot, but now I don't eat it.

Typo: duplicated 'I'. Remove the extra 'I'. Tense usage is correct: 'used to like' (past) vs 'now I don't eat it' (present).

× I don't like it even a little bit.

✓ I don't like it at all.

'Even a little bit' is acceptable but wordy. 'At all' is a more natural negative intensifier in this context. This is stylistic improvement rather than strict grammatical error.

× But I do love shawarma now compared to when I was little.

✓ But I do love shawarma now, unlike when I was little.

The phrase 'compared to when I was little' is understandable but slightly awkward. 'Unlike when I was little' is clearer for contrasting past and present. Tenses are correct; this improves clarity.