Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and give a bit more detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a short reason or description using a linking word. Avoid very short one-line answers.

예시: My favourite food is hamburgers because I love the combination of juicy beef and fresh toppings. For example, I usually prefer them with cheddar cheese and crispy lettuce, which makes them very satisfying.

제안: Improve grammar and organisation: use a past tense topic sentence and fewer fillers. Add one or two specific supporting details with linking words (e.g. "because", "for example"). Keep it within 3–5 sentences.

예시: When I was young, I liked chicken nuggets because they were crispy and easy to eat. For example, my siblings and I often shared nuggets at the mall, which made them feel like a special treat.

제안: Clarify the idea and explain with correct vocabulary and structure. Use a clear topic sentence and then explain seasonal or occasion-based changes with specific examples. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, we eat different foods at certain times of the year. For example, during festivals we usually eat a special dish of grilled meat with rice because it is part of our celebration and family gatherings.

제안: Use a concise topic sentence in correct grammar and then give one clear supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing.

예시: My favourite food hasn't really changed since childhood because I still enjoy meat and chicken. However, my taste has developed a bit; for example, I now prefer milder sauces instead of the very strong sauces I used to add.

× My favorite food is hamburger.

✓ My favorite food is the hamburger.

The noun 'hamburger' when referring to a specific favorite food requires a definite article 'the' or the plural form 'hamburgers'. Use 'the hamburger' to indicate a specific item as your favorite, or 'hamburgers' to speak generally. Suggestion: 'My favorite food is hamburgers.' or 'My favorite food is the hamburger.'

× I actually, when I was young, I like, uh, chicken Nuggets because, uh, chicken Nuggets is the best food.

✓ I actually, when I was young, liked chicken nuggets because chicken nuggets were the best food.

Tense consistency is required. The clause 'when I was young' sets the past tense, so the verbs should be past tense: 'liked' not 'like'. Also use lowercase for common nouns and plural agreement 'chicken nuggets were' not 'is'. Suggestion: use past tense and plural nouns: 'liked chicken nuggets because chicken nuggets were the best.'

× When I was a child, umm, eating with my, uh, sister and brother, uh, and with my cousin sometimes, or even we go to the mall.

✓ When I was a child, I ate with my sister and brother and sometimes with my cousin, or we even went to the mall.

Sentence structure and subject-verb agreement: 'eating with my sister' is a fragment; use full clause 'I ate'. Match past tense 'went' with 'was'. Place adverbs appropriately and remove filler words. Suggestion: 'I ate with my sister and brother and sometimes with my cousin, or we even went to the mall.'

× Yeah, we eat different food, like, uh, we eat a meat with rice.

✓ Yeah, we eat different foods, like we eat meat with rice.

Countability and plurality: 'food' can be pluralized to 'foods' when referring to different kinds. 'A meat' is incorrect; 'meat' is uncountable so do not use 'a'. Suggestion: 'we eat different foods' and 'we eat meat with rice.'

× Uh, if umm, uh, like, uh, the. Occasion like I eat, we eat meat and rice because we killed.

✓ On special occasions, we eat meat and rice because we slaughter an animal for the meal.

Original is fragmented and unclear. 'The. Occasion' is broken; use 'On special occasions'. The verb 'killed' is awkward and needs a clearer, appropriate phrasing in present or past depending on context. If describing cultural practice generally, use present: 'we slaughter an animal' or past: 'we slaughtered an animal'. Suggestion: 'On special occasions, we eat meat and rice because we slaughter an animal for the meal.'

× Not really change, but not really change because I like meat and I like chicken.

✓ Not really; it hasn't changed because I like meat and chicken.

Tense and sentence formation: use present perfect 'hasn't changed' to indicate that favorite hasn't changed from past to present. Also remove repetition and use concise phrasing. Suggestion: 'It hasn't really changed because I like meat and chicken.'

× Maybe the sauce became more, uh, incredible because I used to make really too much sauce.

✓ Maybe the sauce has become better because I used to add too much sauce when I cooked it.

Verb tense and collocation: 'became more incredible' is awkward; use 'has become better' for present result. 'Used to make really too much sauce' is incorrect collocation: you 'add too much sauce' or 'used too much sauce'. Also 'really too much' is redundant. Suggestion: 'Maybe the sauce has become better because I used to add too much sauce when I cooked.'