Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence naming the food, then give specific sensory details and one reason. Avoid vague phrases like “feeling” and incomplete sentences. Use linking words for clarity.

예시: My favourite food is book pie, a Filipino sweet bread filled with creamy coconut custard. It has a soft, slightly chewy texture and a rich, sweet coconut flavour, which makes it perfect as a comforting snack. Because of its sweetness and creamy filling, I often enjoy it with coffee in the afternoon.

제안: Begin with a clear statement naming the food and then add specific details (ingredients, texture, occasion) and a concise reason. Avoid filler words and vague descriptions like “feeling.” Use linking words such as ‘because’ or ‘so’ to connect ideas.

예시: When I was young, I loved la chafron, a Filipino dessert made from eggs and sugar with a light, custardy texture. Because it was usually served at family gatherings, it reminds me of happy times and comfort. As a result, I associate its sweet, delicate flavour with childhood happiness.

제안: Answer directly (Yes/No) then briefly explain with specific examples and use linking words. Avoid repeating words and improve grammar (e.g., “crave” instead of “crave on,” “comfort” as noun). Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: No, I don't usually eat different foods by season. If I crave a particular Filipino dessert, I try to buy or make it year-round because it gives me comfort, especially during stressful times. For example, I often have book pie or la chafron whenever I want a nostalgic treat.

제안: State clearly whether it has changed and give specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar and complete phrases (e.g., “it could give me toothache” or “it could make me feel unwell”). Use linking words like ‘however’ and ‘because’ correctly and keep answers concise.

예시: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. As a child I preferred very sweet desserts, but as I grew older I started avoiding overly sugary foods because they make me feel sluggish and can affect my teeth. Now I prefer moderately sweet or savory dishes, such as grilled fish or lightly sweetened pastries.

× I actually have a lot of favorite foods, but one of them is the Book of pie.

✓ I actually have a lot of favorite foods, but one of them is the book of pie.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before a general food name; use lowercase for common noun 'book of pie' unless it's a proper name. Use 'the' only for specific known items.

× Book of pie is a Filipino delicacy wherein there's a coconut and a creamy feeling inside the bread.

✓ Book of pie is a Filipino delicacy that has coconut and a creamy filling inside the bread.

Use 'that has' or 'which has' instead of 'wherein there's' for natural English; 'creamy feeling' is incorrect — use 'creamy filling'. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× It is a sweet food which gives.

✓ It is a sweet food that gives a comforting taste.

The verb 'gives' needs a direct object; adding 'a comforting taste' completes the idea and makes the sentence grammatically correct and meaningful.

× When I was young, I loved eating La chafron.

✓ When I was young, I loved eating la chafron.

The dish name should be lowercased unless it's a proper noun; grammatically the sentence is correct in past tense. This correction is cosmetic, not tense-related.

× It is also a sweet Filipino dessert which is made of egg and sugar.

✓ It is also a sweet Filipino dessert that is made of egg and sugar.

Use 'that' rather than 'which' in restrictive clauses in modern usage. This improves clarity; article use is otherwise fine.

× It's has a feeling.

✓ It has a unique texture.

'It's has' is incorrect because 'it's' (it is) cannot combine with 'has'. Choose either 'It has' or 'It's' plus adjective. Replacing vague 'a feeling' with 'a unique texture' clarifies meaning.

× It imposes a feeling of umm, happiness.

✓ It evokes a feeling of happiness.

Use 'evokes' or 'gives' rather than 'imposes' when describing emotions triggered by food; remove filler 'umm' for clarity.

× That's why I love it.

✓ That's why I love it.

Sentence is correct; third person singular agreement is fine. No correction needed.

× I feel like no because whenever I try to crave on this certain food, I always find time or resources for me to be able to eat it at any time of the year because it gives me a feeling of comfort and I love being comfort.

✓ I would say no, because whenever I crave this food, I always find the time or resources to eat it at any time of the year; it gives me a feeling of comfort and I love being comforted.

Multiple issues: 'I feel like no' is informal—use 'I would say no'; 'crave on' is incorrect—use 'crave' plus object; 'find time or resources for me to be able to eat' is wordy—use 'find the time or resources to eat'; 'it gives me a feeling of comfort and I love being comfort' uses wrong form—use 'comforted' (past participle/adjective). This correction fixes verb usage, prepositions, and adjective form.

× My favorite food has changed since I was a child because back then I used to like very sweet desserts and delicacies.

✓ My favorite food has changed since I was a child, because back then I used to like very sweet desserts and delicacies.

Sentence is correct; punctuation (comma) improves readability. Tenses are appropriate: present perfect for change since childhood and 'used to' for past habit.

× However, as time goes by and I grew older, I have avoided too sweet foods because it gives it could give me.

✓ However, as time went by and I grew older, I avoided very sweet foods because they could make me feel unwell.

Tense consistency: use past tense 'went by'/'grew older' with 'avoided' or use present perfect with 'have grown older'. Original 'it gives it could give me' is ungrammatical; replace with 'they could make me feel unwell' or specify the effect. This corrects tense, pronoun reference, and clarity.