Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and small hesitations, and add one or two specific reasons or a short example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence (for example, “because” or “so”).

예시: My favourite food is a cheeseburger because it’s a tasty and convenient meal after studying. For instance, I often treat myself to one from McDonald’s or KFC when I finish my evening revision, and it helps me relax and recharge.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: give a direct topic sentence, correct tense and plurality errors, reduce filler words, and add a concise reason or example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas logically.

예시: When I was young I especially liked fast food because my mother rarely allowed me to have it, which made it seem like a special treat. Even now I still enjoy takeaway food occasionally because it’s convenient and satisfying.

제안: Good structure and specific content—make it slightly more concise and use smoother linking phrases. Avoid conversational fillers (“you know”) and use precise linking words such as “in summer” and “in winter” or “because” for clarity.

예시: Yes. In summer we often eat tropical fruits like watermelon and pineapple because they are refreshing and hydrating. In winter, we prefer warm, filling dishes such as noodles and rice because they’re comforting and easier to digest.

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition: start with a clear statement, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “so”). Correct small grammar issues and avoid repeating the same point.

예시: No, my favourite food hasn’t changed because I still prefer fast food for its convenience. For example, I can order takeaway from anywhere when I’m busy, which saves time and makes meal planning easier.

× Well, my favorite food is cheeseburger.

✓ Well, my favorite food is a cheeseburger.

The noun 'cheeseburger' is a countable singular noun and requires an article. Use the indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun. Suggestion: 'a cheeseburger' or 'cheeseburgers' if speaking generally.

× I usually enjoy having a cheeseburger after I complete my study of the day, just like going to the McDonald's or KFC.

✓ I usually enjoy having a cheeseburger after I finish my studies for the day, like going to McDonald's or KFC.

Phrases were awkward: 'complete my study of the day' should be 'finish my studies for the day' to sound natural. Use plural 'studies' for general studying and omit 'the' before brand names like McDonald's. 'Just like' is replaced by simpler 'like' for clarity.

× And I think that is the best part of my life.

✓ And I think that's the best part of my day.

Context refers to daily routine, not entire life. 'Part of my life' is not consistent with previous sentence; changing to 'part of my day' matches meaning and is more natural.

× I I'm really keen to enjoy the break of the day.

✓ I'm really keen to enjoy the break of the day.

There is a repeated pronoun 'I' producing a duplication. Remove the extra 'I'. Also 'keen to enjoy the break of the day' is slightly awkward but grammatical; you can say 'keen to enjoy my break of the day' to be clearer.

× What when I was young, I especially like the junk uh, fast fit because my mom doesn't always allow me to eat that kind of food.

✓ When I was young, I especially liked junk food and fast food because my mom didn't always allow me to eat that kind of food.

The original had disfluent filler 'What' and tense mismatch: question asks past, so use past tense 'liked' and 'didn't' for negative. 'Fast fit' is likely 'fast food'; combine 'junk food and fast food' for clarity.

× So I am tempted by the fast food when I was younger but the situation haven't changed yet uh, since I grow older because umm I still enjoy eating fast food and take away food currently.

✓ So I was tempted by fast food when I was younger, but the situation hasn't changed yet since I've grown older because I still enjoy eating fast food and takeaway food now.

Tense consistency: refer to past 'was tempted' for younger. Use present perfect 'hasn't changed' to describe a situation from past to present. 'Since I grow older' should be 'since I've grown older' (present perfect). 'Take away' should be 'takeaway' (compound) and 'currently' better as 'now'.

× We usually have the watermelon or pineapples, this kind of tropical food when it is summer, but we tend to have some noodles and rice because it is really easy to digest and keep us warm in the winter.

✓ We usually have watermelon or pineapple, these kinds of tropical food, when it is summer, but we tend to have noodles and rice because they are easy to digest and keep us warm in winter.

Article and plurality issues: don't use 'the' before general fruits; 'watermelon or pineapples' mismatch singular/plural — use 'watermelon or pineapple' or 'watermelons or pineapples'. 'This kind of' should match plural 'these kinds of' for multiple items. 'It is really easy to digest' should agree with plural subject 'noodles and rice' so use 'they are' and 'in winter' is more natural than 'in the winter' though both acceptable.

× No, because I'm really a big fan of the fast food and I think for one reason is that it is really convenient.

✓ No, because I'm really a big fan of fast food, and I think one reason is that it is really convenient.

Article 'the fast food' is unnecessary when speaking generally; use 'fast food'. Remove extraneous 'for' in 'for one reason' and adjust punctuation. Tense is present and appropriate.

× I can order take away food at anywhere and any place.

✓ I can order takeaway food from anywhere or any place.

Preposition 'at' is incorrect with 'anywhere' — use 'from anywhere'. Also 'take away' should be 'takeaway' (one word) in this context. Use 'or' for alternatives.

× So I think it always helped me to save time when I was busy.

✓ So I think it always helps me save time when I am busy.

Tense mismatch: 'always' indicates a habitual present action, so use present tense 'helps' and 'am busy'. If referring to past, keep 'helped' and 'was busy' consistently. Also 'to save time' can be 'save time' for natural phrasing.

× So I think the fast food really works for me.

✓ So I think fast food really works for me.

Article 'the' is unnecessary when speaking generally about a category. 'Fast food' as a general noun does not need 'the'.