Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give specific details (ingredients, how it's prepared, why you like it) using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid inaccuracies (e.g., "sandwich" and "cowboy") and unnecessary repetition. Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: My favourite food is pho, a Vietnamese noodle soup. It usually has rice noodles, thinly sliced beef and a clear broth simmered for hours to develop flavor. I love it because the broth is fragrant and comforting, and I often add lime and herbs for freshness.

제안: Use past tense and precise vocabulary, and give a short reason or example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific example and linking phrase. Avoid vague phrases like "squeeze foods"; use correct terms such as "sweets" or "desserts."

예시: When I was young, I loved sweets and desserts. For example, I often bought candies and pastries from a stall opposite my school because they were cheap and tasty, so I asked my parents for a little money every day.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting detail using linking words. Be specific about which seasonal foods you eat and why. Use smoother phrasing and correct grammar (e.g., "appear a few times a year").

예시: Not really — because I'm often busy, I tend to eat the same meals year-round. However, I do enjoy seasonal fruits like mangoes in summer and persimmons in autumn when they become available.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence then briefly explain with a reason or example. Clarify meaning (do you mean your favourite food stayed the same?) and avoid unclear phrases like "I'm busy in eating." Use linking words like "because" to explain.

예시: No, my favourite food hasn't changed since childhood because I still enjoy the same flavours. For instance, I still prefer pho and often choose it over other dishes when I go out to eat.

× My favorite food is pho. It's a traditional food with noodles and sandwich boiled for hours by cowboy, Cowboys and beef and some flavors. And it's more delicious if we use it with savory.

✓ My favorite food is pho. It's a traditional dish with noodles and beef simmered for hours by cowboys and served with various seasonings. It is more delicious when eaten with savory condiments.

Errors: incorrect article 'a traditional food' should be 'a traditional dish' (word choice) and inconsistent use of 'cowboy, Cowboys'; missing articles before nouns and awkward phrasing. Suggestion: use 'dish' for prepared meals, pluralize 'cowboys', use 'beef simmered' instead of 'sandwich boiled', and 'served with various seasonings' for clarity. Use 'when eaten' rather than 'if we use it' for natural phrasing.

× When I was young I really love squeeze foods or desserts.

✓ When I was young I really loved snacks or desserts.

Error: tense mismatch—main clause is past ('When I was young') so verb should be past 'loved' not present 'love'. Also 'squeeze foods' is incorrect word choice; use 'snacks'. Suggestion: match past tense and use correct noun.

× I often ask my parents for money so I could buy them from grocery or a counter food opposite the school.

✓ I often asked my parents for money so I could buy them from the grocery store or from a food stall opposite the school.

Errors: tense (past) should be used with 'often' in past context; missing article 'the' before 'grocery store'; 'counter food' is unnatural—use 'food stall'; preposition 'opposite' is fine but include 'the'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently and common collocations 'grocery store' and 'food stall'.

× It's not important to me, I can eat the same food for a year because of busy life, but I even eat some certain food which appear few times for of the year like seasonal fruits.

✓ It's not important to me; I can eat the same food for a year because of a busy life, but I also eat certain foods that appear a few times a year, like seasonal fruits.

Errors: tense and agreement—'eat' present OK but 'appear' should be 'appear' referring to 'foods' so keep plural; missing articles 'a busy life' and 'a few times a year'; word choice 'even' should be 'also'; 'some certain food' -> 'certain foods'. Suggestion: add articles, match plural forms, and use natural connectors.

× No, I'm busy in eating. I can eat various foods and it doesn't change when I grow up.

✓ No, it hasn't changed; I am able to eat various foods and my preference did not change as I grew up.

Errors: tense and idiom—'I'm busy in eating' is unnatural; question asked 'Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?' so respond in present perfect 'it hasn't changed' or 'no, it hasn't changed'. 'It doesn't change when I grow up' mixes tenses; use past reference 'did not change as I grew up' or present perfect. Suggestion: use 'hasn't changed' and match tense to the question.