Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the dish, then give 1–2 concise supporting details (why you like it, when you eat it) using linking words. Correct nouns (e.g. dal, curry) and simple past/present forms will help. Avoid fragmented phrases and repetition.

예시: My favourite food is a traditional Nepalese dish called dal bhat, which is steamed rice served with dal (lentils) and curry. I love it because it is comforting and reminds me of my childhood. Also, my whole family cooks it at home, so eating it makes me feel at home.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and stay factual. Begin with a clear topic sentence describing the kinds of food you liked as a child, then contrast with current preferences using linking words (e.g. but, however, now). Avoid unclear or incorrect words ("dog and BA" is unintelligible) and long vague phrases.

예시: When I was young, I often ate traditional home-cooked meals like rice and curry. However, as I grew older I started to eat more packaged and fast foods. Now, my favourite is a burger, which I usually buy when I am out.

제안: Organise your answer: start with a direct yes/no and then explain with specific examples. Use linking words (for example, whereas, during) correctly. Use correct food names and concise phrases rather than hesitations. Give one festival example and one party example to be specific.

예시: Yes. I eat different foods depending on the season and occasion. For example, during festivals we prepare special dishes such as rice, curry and sweet tea, while at parties we often serve fast food because it is convenient and easy to prepare.

제안: Give a clear statement about change, then provide reasons and an example. Use linking words like before/now/because to show contrast and cause. Avoid repetition and complete the sentence (finish the reason). Use correct collocations (e.g. "homemade food" or "fresh fruits").

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed as I have grown. Before, I preferred processed and packaged foods, but now I try to eat more homemade meals and fresh fruits because they are healthier and make me feel better.

× Expelled natural food for of Nepalese.

✓ Traditional Nepali food.

The original phrase uses incorrect words and word order. 'Expelled' is the wrong adjective and 'natural' and 'for of Nepalese' are ungrammatical. Use the adjective 'Traditional' to describe cuisine and the noun 'Nepali' (or 'Nepalese') to indicate origin. Keep phrase concise: 'Traditional Nepali food.' Suggestion: Use correct adjective-noun collocation and proper noun form (Nepali/Nepalese).

× It's a steamed rice, Clary and lentils.

✓ It is steamed rice, dal, and curry.

The original has incorrect nouns and capitalization and awkward commas. Use correct food terms and coordinate them with commas and 'and'. 'Dal' (lentils) and 'curry' are the usual terms. Ensure parallel structure: 'rice, dal, and curry.'

× It's my comfort go to whenever I did a child.

✓ It's my comfort food and go-to whenever I was a child.

The phrase mixes idioms and tenses incorrectly. 'Comfort go to' should be 'comfort food' or 'go-to'. Past time reference requires 'was a child' rather than 'did a child'. Keep idioms intact: 'comfort food' or 'my go-to when I was a child.' Suggestion: Use one idiom rather than combining both.

× I prefer this food for home my whole family.

✓ My whole family prefers this food at home.

Word order is incorrect and subject-verb agreement needed with 'family' as singular collective noun. Reorder to 'My whole family prefers this food at home.' Use 'at home' rather than 'for home.'

× The.

✓ (Remove fragment)

A single 'The.' is a sentence fragment with no verb or object. Remove it or complete the sentence, for example: 'That's it.' or omit.

× When I was young I often used to eat dog and BA and Curry, but as I have gone I prefer more packaged food.

✓ When I was young I often used to eat dal and rice and curry, but as I have grown I prefer more packaged food.

'Dog and BA' are likely misspellings of 'dal and rice' or similar; 'as I have gone' is incorrect phrase: correct is 'as I have grown' meaning 'as I grew up' or 'as I have gotten older.' Ensure correct nouns and verb forms. Suggest: 'When I was young, I often used to eat dal, rice, and curry, but as I have grown I prefer packaged food.'

× These days my favorite is burger.

✓ These days my favorite is a burger.

Missing indefinite article before a singular countable noun. Use 'a burger.' Also could say 'my favorite food is the burger' depending on context.

× It's a processed burger which I have in a whatever I'll get.

✓ It's a processed burger that I eat whenever I can get one.

Original mixes words and has incorrect clause: 'which I have in a whatever I'll get' is ungrammatical. Use 'that I eat whenever I can get one' to express frequency and availability. Replace 'have' with 'eat' for clarity.

× It is absolutely a repeated food, uh, based on the occasions like during the festivals we prepare the very small food like a celery tea and the rice and Curry, the necklace society.

✓ We usually eat the same traditional foods on special occasions; for example, during festivals we prepare items like sel roti, tea, rice, and curry.

Original sentence is confused with wrong words ('repeated food', 'celery tea', 'the necklace society'). Use 'usually' or 'on special occasions' and correct food names (e.g., 'sel roti' if intended). Provide clearer list and punctuation. Maintain parallel structure when listing items.

× Whereas during the parties we prepare more fast food, uh, because they are convenient and easy quick.

✓ At parties we prepare more fast food because it is convenient and quick.

Word order and modifiers wrong: 'easy quick' should be 'quick' or 'easy and quick.' 'They are' refers to 'food' singular/plural issue; 'fast food' is treated as uncountable so use 'it is convenient and quick.' Simplify to 'it is convenient and quick.'

× I absolutely my best food has changed as I have grown before I used to like more processed packaged foods but nowadays I try to eat homemade fruits rather than the fast foods because it's more healthy and.

✓ My favorite food has definitely changed as I have grown. Before I used to like processed, packaged foods, but nowadays I try to eat homemade meals and fresh fruit rather than fast food because it is healthier.

Original contains run-on structure, tense and word choice issues, and incomplete ending. Break into two sentences. Use 'definitely' instead of 'absolutely' for collocation. 'More healthy' should be 'healthier' (comparative). 'Homemade fruits' is odd; use 'homemade meals and fresh fruit.' End sentence properly. Use consistent tense: present perfect 'has changed' and past 'used to.'