Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và tiếng ồn (umm, uh). Nên có câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó thêm 1–2 câu giải thích cụ thể (ví dụ loại chocolate yêu thích, khi nào ăn). Dùng các liên từ đơn giản để mạch lạc (because, so, when).

예시: My favourite food is chocolate. I especially enjoy dark chocolate because it has a rich, slightly bitter taste that balances the sweetness. I often eat a square after dinner to relax and unwind.

제안: Cần ngữ pháp cơ bản chính xác (e.g., past tense: 'when I was young'), tránh lặp và nói lộn xộn. Trình bày câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó mô tả cụ thể loại kẹo, lý do và một kỷ niệm ngắn để tạo chiều sâu. Hạn chế tiếng ậm ừ và sửa lỗi từ vựng (e.g., 'gummy candy', 'cheap chips').

예시: When I was young, I loved gummy candy. I liked them because they were colorful and chewy, and my parents often bought them as a treat after school. I remember sharing them with my friends during playtime.

제안: Trả lời cần rõ: có/nếu có thì diễn giải cách thay đổi theo mùa. Tránh đưa ví dụ không liên quan (last week không phải 'times of the year'). Dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, so) và cung cấp 1–2 ví dụ cụ thể theo mùa (mùa hè, Tết...).

예시: Yes, I do. My diet changes with the seasons; for example, in summer I eat more fruits and cold desserts, while in winter I enjoy hot soups and stews. Also, during festivals I often eat traditional dishes and snacks.

제안: Cần câu trả lời rõ ràng (Yes/No) và giải thích lý do ngắn gọn. Sửa ngữ pháp (past: 'when I was young') và tránh lặp ý. Thêm so sánh ngắn nếu có thay đổi (taste, health considerations) để tăng điểm nội dung.

예시: No, my favourite foods haven't changed much since childhood. I still enjoy chocolate and gummy sweets, although now I try to choose higher-quality chocolate and eat them less often for health reasons.

× To be honest, my favorite food is umm chocolate. Umm, the reason why I'm very umm prefer chocolate because umm it is so sweet and I feel very relaxed when I eat this chocolate.

✓ To be honest, my favorite food is chocolate. The reason I very much prefer chocolate is that it is so sweet and I feel very relaxed when I eat it.

Student used incorrect pronoun forms and redundant phrasing. 'I'm very prefer' is ungrammatical; use 'I prefer' or 'I very much prefer'. 'When I eat this chocolate' is wordy; 'eat it' is natural. Suggestion: use subject + verb without auxiliary for preference (I prefer), move intensifier before or after 'prefer' ('very much prefer'), and use appropriate pronoun (it).

× My favorite food when I were young is the the gummy gummy candy because you know, uh, the gummy gave me a candy is the hairy bowl or cheap chips.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was gummy candy because the gummy candy was cheap and tasty.

Multiple issues: 'when I were young' should be 'when I was young' (subject-verb agreement and past tense). The sentence mixes present and past; the clause referring to the past should use past tense ('was'). The original also had incoherent phrases; simplify to a clear past statement. Suggestion: match tense with time expressions and use 'was' with 'I'.

× I very like it because it's go good.

✓ I liked it very much because it tasted good.

'I very like it' is incorrect; use 'I liked it very much' in past context. 'It's go good' is ungrammatical; use past or base form 'tasted good' or 'tastes good' depending on context. Suggestion: choose tense consistent with 'when I was young' and use adverb placement 'very much'.

× Yes, of course, umm, I change uh, food every years like umm, the last week I eat the snack uh, like Lays or Oster because you know uh, when I watch movie I prefer eating snacks or uh, candy.

✓ Yes, of course. I change my food every year. Like last week, I ate snacks such as Lays or Oreos because when I watch a movie I prefer eating snacks or candy.

'Every years' should be 'every year' (incorrect quantifier). 'I change food' needs possessive 'my food' or better 'I change what I eat'. 'The last week' should be 'last week'; tense must be past 'I ate'. 'Oster' likely intended 'Oreos'. Also 'watch movie' needs article 'a movie'. Suggestion: use 'every year' and match past tense for specific past events, include articles where necessary.

× Uh, probably. I think no, because umm, when I were young I like to eat chocolate and gummy candy and now I like umm, I also like eating chocolate and gummy candy because I think it is very good for me.

✓ Probably not. When I was young, I liked to eat chocolate and gummy candy, and now I also like eating chocolate and gummy candy because I think it is very good for me.

Tense and agreement problems: 'when I were young' should be 'when I was young' (subject-verb agreement/past tense). 'I like to eat' describing past preference should be 'I liked to eat'. 'I think no' is awkward; use 'probably not'. Suggestion: use past tense for past habits and correct 'was' for singular subject.