Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct tense and pronoun use, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: I love ramen, a Japanese noodle soup. I started eating it as a child because my mother showed me how to enjoy it, and I still prefer it on cold days because the hot broth warms me up. For example, I often have a bowl of miso ramen after walking home in winter.

제안: Use past tense consistently and split into shorter sentences. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details with linking words. Avoid long run-on sentences and include one concrete example.

예시: As a child, my favourite foods were sweets, especially candies and chocolate. My mother rewarded me with them when I did well at school, and I also always had ice-cream cake for my birthday. For instance, I remember a chocolate bar I earned after winning a spelling contest.

제안: Answer directly and use linking words to explain reasons. Keep sentences short and correct phrasing (e.g., 'at different times of the year'). Give a specific contrast if applicable.

예시: Not really — I tend to eat the same kinds of food throughout the year. For example, I usually have noodles as comfort food, and sometimes my family and I eat spicy salads regardless of the season because we prefer to keep meals simple.

제안: Use correct tenses and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement about change (or not), then give a concise reason with one supporting detail. Remove filler phrases and correct grammar.

예시: No, my favourite food has not changed — I have loved noodles since childhood. My mother taught me how to eat them, and that early habit made me attached to them; for example, I still order noodle dishes whenever I go to a new restaurant.

× My favorite food is ramen, It is a Japanese dish that I really really love it.

✓ My favorite food is ramen. It is a Japanese dish that I really, really love.

The original sentence incorrectly combines two independent clauses with a comma and repeats the object 'it' unnecessarily. This is a sentence structure error and incorrect conjunction/connector use. Separate into two sentences and remove the redundant 'it'. Also add a comma between repeated adverbs 'really, really' for clarity.

× I ate ramen when I was young because my mom taught me how to eat it and I usually eat ramen when the weather is cold because the hot soup help me well.

✓ I ate ramen when I was young because my mom taught me how to eat it, and I usually eat ramen when the weather is cold because the hot soup helps me feel better.

Mixed tenses and subject-verb agreement: 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'soup'. Also 'help me well' is unnatural; use 'helps me feel better'. Use a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses.

× When I was a child, my favorite food and my comfort food is candies and chocolate my mom used to give me when I did well at school and I also like to eat ice cream cake when it's time for my birthday.

✓ When I was a child, my favorite food and comfort food were candies and chocolate that my mom used to give me when I did well at school, and I also liked to eat ice cream cake on my birthday.

Tense agreement and pronoun/connective issues: 'is' should be 'were' to match past reference 'When I was a child'. Add 'that' to introduce the relative clause. Change 'it's time for my birthday' to 'on my birthday' for natural expression and change 'like' to 'liked' for past tense consistency.

× I would say no, I don't eat different food at different time of the year because my comfort food is noodles and I also eat some spicy salads with my family because I don't really like to change so much and I keep it simple at every time.

✓ I would say no. I don't eat different foods at different times of the year because my comfort food is noodles, and I also eat some spicy salads with my family. I don't really like to change much and I keep things simple all the time.

Plural and count noun: 'food' should be 'foods' and 'time' should be 'times' for general repeated occasions. Sentence structure: split into shorter sentences for clarity. 'Change so much' is awkward; use 'change much'. 'Keep it simple at every time' is unidiomatic; use 'keep things simple all the time'.

× Since I was a child, my favorite food is noodles.

✓ Since I was a child, my favorite food has been noodles.

Tense issue: When describing a preference that started in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect 'has been' instead of simple present 'is'. This shows continuity from past to present.

× Until I was in high school, my favorite food is still noodles because I'd have said to you before my mom taught me how to eat noodle.

✓ Until I was in high school, my favorite food was still noodles because, as I said before, my mom taught me how to eat noodles.

Tense consistency: Use past tense 'was' for the period 'until I was in high school'. The phrase 'I'd have said to you before' is incorrect here; replace with 'as I said before' or 'as I mentioned before'. Also pluralize 'noodle' to 'noodles'.

× So I think this make me really really love to eat noodles.

✓ So I think this made me really, really love eating noodles.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form: 'make' should be 'made' to match past context. Use 'love eating noodles' or 'love to eat noodles'; 'love eating' is more natural. Add a comma between repeated adverbs 'really, really'.