Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and specific: start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary and spelling (e.g., 'sushi', 'Omar's' unclear), avoid redundancy and limit to 2–3 supporting sentences. Use a linking phrase to add a reason or example. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., 'shellfish', 'seafood dishes') and correct singular/plural forms.

예시: I really enjoy seafood, especially dishes with shrimp. For example, I often order sushi rolls with shrimp and grilled prawns because I like their sweet, slightly briny flavor. I also appreciate caviar occasionally as a special treat.

제안: Be clearer and more accurate: begin with a topic sentence naming the dish correctly, give a brief description and explain why you liked it. Avoid filler sounds and correct grammar (e.g., 'everyone liked it'). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'and' to connect ideas and provide a concrete detail about taste or ingredients.

예시: As a child I loved a Russian dish called blini topped with sweet curd or jam. I liked it because the thin pancakes were soft and the sweet topping made them feel like a treat. I used to have them every weekend with my family.

제안: Be concise and natural: open with a direct answer, then add one or two supporting sentences with a reason or an exception. Remove repetitions and correct phrasing (e.g., 'I can eat the same food all year and still enjoy it'). Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' if mentioning exceptions.

예시: Not really — I tend to eat similar meals year-round because I enjoy routine. However, I do sometimes choose lighter dishes in summer, such as salads, when the weather is hot.

제안: Structure your answer: start with a clear yes/no and a brief reason, then give a specific example of how your eating changed. Avoid repetition and filler words; correct tense and phrasing ('when I was a child I ate mainly sweets'). Use linking words like 'because', 'now' and 'for example'.

예시: Yes, it has. Nowadays I try to eat more vegetables and fruit because I'm more health-conscious. For example, I used to eat mostly sweets and candy as a child, but now I prefer fruit as a snack.

× Omar's, caviar, sushis are the best food for me.

✓ Oysters, caviar, sushi are the best foods for me.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'Omar's' seems incorrect likely intended 'oysters' (plural noun), 'sushis' is incorrect because 'sushi' is an uncountable or invariant plural noun in English, and 'food' as a countable/uncountable mismatch—when listing items you can use 'foods' or keep 'food' uncountable. Use plural nouns for individual items and 'foods' to refer to types. Also corrected spelling and plurality for clarity.

× When I was young, I liked bling cheeky.

✓ When I was young, I liked blini with caviar.

The original contains mis-spelled or incorrect food names. 'Blini' (plural of 'blin') is the Russian pancake often eaten with caviar. Use 'liked' (past tense) correctly. Proper nouns and food names must be accurate; choose 'blini with caviar' for a natural expression.

× It's a Russian meal, uh, and eating it with Guishong, it's a topping, sweet topping and it's really, really delicious.

✓ It's a Russian dish, and eating it with gushong, a sweet topping, is really, really delicious.

'It's a Russian meal' is acceptable but 'dish' is more natural. Use consistent noun phrase structure: 'eating it with gushong, a sweet topping, is...' avoids awkward commas and repeats. 'Gushong' should be lowercased unless a proper noun. Use '-ing' clause as subject with helping verb 'is' to form a correct sentence.

× Everyone like this.

✓ Everyone likes it.

The subject 'everyone' is singular and requires the singular verb 'likes'. Also replace vague 'this' with 'it' referring to the food, making the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× Not really. I I eat the same thing like every day and I'm this kind of person that can eat the same food for the whole year and still love it and I will continue to eat it.

✓ Not really. I eat the same thing almost every day. I'm the kind of person who can eat the same food all year and still love it, and I will continue to do so.

Remove the duplicated 'I'. Use 'almost every day' instead of 'like every day' for standard English. 'I'm this kind of person that' is awkward; use 'I'm the kind of person who'. 'For the whole year' is more naturally 'all year'. 'Continue to eat it' can be streamlined to 'continue to do so' to avoid repetition.

× Yes, it has changed because now I eat healthier and more veggies and fruits than I was a child.

✓ Yes, it has changed because now I eat healthier and more vegetables and fruits than when I was a child.

Compare present habits with past using 'when I was a child'. Use 'vegetables' instead of 'veggies' in formal correction. 'Than I was a child' is ungrammatical; insert 'when'.

× Because when it was I was a child, I ate only candies and sweet things.

✓ When I was a child, I ate only candy and sweet things.

Remove redundant words 'because when it was'. Use 'When I was a child' to introduce the clause. Use 'candy' as an uncountable noun for general sweets rather than plural 'candies' in this context, though 'candies' can be used when referring to individual pieces. Keep past tense 'ate' consistent.

× I eat them now too, but in the last, uh, way.

✓ I eat them now too, but much less than before.

Original 'in the last, uh, way' is unclear. Use 'much less than before' to indicate reduced frequency. Keep present simple 'I eat' for current habit and correct adverb placement for clarity.