Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify vocabulary and sentence structure; give a clear topic sentence, then 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct and consistent names (e.g. 'som tam' or 'somtum'), and avoid repetition. Use precise adjectives and short, correct sentences to improve coherence.

예시: My favourite food is som tam, a Thai green papaya salad. For example, it combines spicy chilies, sour lime juice and sweet palm sugar, which creates a lively mix of flavours. In addition, the shredded papaya, roasted peanuts and dried shrimp remind me of home because my family often ate it together. Therefore I often choose som tam when I want a refreshing, flavorful meal.

제안: Provide a clear contrast between past and present with linking words (e.g., 'when I was young', 'but now'). Fix grammar (past tense) and avoid fragments. Give one specific example of a childhood favourite and one specific current favourite with brief reasons.

예시: When I was young, I loved sweet foods, especially cakes and candy, because they made me happy. However, now I prefer spicy dishes such as spicy noodles and hot pot, because I enjoy bold flavours and the warmth they give me.

제안: Be more specific and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'meatballs' not 'balls', remove unclear words like 'Kyle'). Use linking words ('for example', 'because', 'so') and give one or two clear seasonal examples with concise reasons. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

예시: Yes. For example, in winter I eat spicy noodle soup with meatballs because the hot broth warms me and lifts my mood. In summer, I prefer cold dishes or salads because they are refreshing and light.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to show change ('when', 'as', 'now'). Correct tense and word choice ('preferences have changed', 'I enjoy spicy food'). Provide a short reason explaining why the change happened.

예시: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. When I was a child I preferred sweets like cakes, but as I grew up I began to enjoy spicy foods such as spicy noodles and salads because I like stronger flavours and the heat feels satisfying.

× My favorite food is somedan. One reason is that sometime is a traditional tidy and it's combinations of spicy sours and sweet favourites makes it enjoyable.

✓ My favorite food is som tam. One reason is that som tam is a traditional dish, and its combinations of spicy, sour, and sweet flavors make it enjoyable.

Adjectives and nouns were used incorrectly (tidy -> dish; sours/sweet favourites -> sour and sweet flavors). Also possessive pronoun and plural agreement needed: 'its combinations' and plural verb 'make' to agree with plural noun 'combinations'. Use correct food name 'som tam'. Use commas between adjectives.

× And I like fish. The fish ingredients such as shedded green papaya, chili and. Peanut sometime always reminds me home and bring memories.

✓ I also like fish. The fish ingredients, such as shredded green papaya, chili, and peanuts, sometimes always remind me of home and bring back memories.

Subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'ingredients' requires plural verb 'remind'. 'Peanut' should be plural 'peanuts'. Missing preposition 'of' after 'remind me'. 'Bring back memories' is the natural phrase. 'Shedded' is incorrect form; use past participle 'shredded'.

× I often eat sometime when I want.

✓ I often eat som tam whenever I want.

Tense and word choice: 'sometime' is incorrect here; use the dish name 'som tam' or 'it'. Use 'whenever' to indicate anytime desire. Maintain simple present for habitual action.

× When I was a child, I preferred eating sweet foods, especially cakes and desserts because they made me happy with sweet taste.

✓ When I was a child, I preferred eating sweet foods, especially cakes and desserts, because they made me happy with their sweet taste.

Missing possessive determiner 'their' before 'sweet taste' to refer to the foods. Comma needed before 'because' for clarity. Tense 'preferred' and 'made' are correct past simple.

× After I grew up, I began enjoy.

✓ After I grew up, I began to enjoy them.

Verb pattern error: 'begin' is followed by 'to' + base verb or verb+ -ing. 'Enjoy' needs an object; use 'them' to refer to foods. Maintain past perspective with 'began'.

× See text such as spicy noodle and sometime and I also enjoy hot pot with spicy broth.

✓ I started to try foods such as spicy noodles and som tam, and I also enjoy hot pot with spicy broth.

Word choice and sentence structure: 'See text' is incorrect; likely 'started to try' or 'tried'. 'Spicy noodle' should be plural 'spicy noodles'. 'Sometime' should be 'som tam' (dish). Add conjunction and commas for clarity.

× Of course, I prefer different food depending on the weather.

✓ Of course, I prefer different foods depending on the weather.

Count noun agreement and preposition use: 'food' as a general category is acceptable, but 'different foods' better matches plural contexts. 'Depending on' is correct; change noun number for agreement.

× For example, in winter I like to eat spicy food because they make me feel warmer.

✓ For example, in winter I like to eat spicy food because it makes me feel warmer.

Pronoun agreement: 'spicy food' is singular/non-count, so use singular pronoun 'it' and singular verb 'makes'. Alternatively use 'spicy foods' with 'they make'.

× Especially I enjoy a hot bowl of noodle soup with rich spicy balls.

✓ I especially enjoy a hot bowl of noodle soup with rich, spicy broth.

Word choice: 'spicy balls' is unclear; likely meant 'broth'. Add comma between adjectives. Article placement: 'I especially enjoy a hot bowl of noodle soup' flows better.

× Eating that Kyle food is comforting which makes me feel whole, body warmer and can lift my mood.

✓ Eating that kind of food is comforting, which makes my whole body warmer and can lift my mood.

Sentence structure: 'Kyle' is incorrect; use 'kind of'. Word order corrected: 'whole body warmer' -> 'my whole body warmer'. Add comma before 'which'.

× Yes, I think my states had changed quite a lot over time.

✓ Yes, I think my tastes have changed quite a lot over time.

Word choice and tense: 'states' is wrong; 'tastes' fits context. Present perfect 'have changed' is appropriate for changes up to now. Past perfect 'had changed' is not needed.

× And started eating something spicy such as a spicy noodle or a spicy salad because this makes me feel enjoy it eating.

✓ I started eating spicy foods such as spicy noodles or spicy salads because they make me enjoy eating them.

Sentence was a fragment; add subject 'I'. Verb tense 'started' is past. Pronoun and agreement: use plural 'foods' and 'they make me enjoy eating them' for clarity. 'Make me enjoy it' was ungrammatical.