Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear words (e.g., 'saloon') and verb errors. Also correct tense/subject-verb agreement and pronunciation of key words.

예시: My favourite food is biryani. I especially enjoy my grandmother’s biryani because she uses fresh spices and cooks it slowly, which makes it very fragrant and flavorful. Sometimes I also order it at a restaurant when we celebrate special occasions.

제안: Provide a clear past-focused sentence and use specific details with improved fluency. Reduce fillers (uh) and use linking words to connect ideas. Mention why you liked it with concrete descriptions.

예시: When I was young, I loved McDonald’s. I especially enjoyed their French fries because they were crispy and salty, and I liked the Big Mac sauce for its tangy flavour.

제안: Be more specific and use correct vocabulary for traditional dishes; avoid repetition and fillers. Use linking words (for example, ‘during’, ‘in contrast’) and give one clear example of a seasonal dish and explain why it is eaten then.

예시: Yes. During the festival of Ramban we eat a special meal: steamed rice served with ghee, grilled meat and a sweet drink called vinto, because these foods are traditional for celebrations. At other times of the year we eat simpler meals like rice, vegetables and lentils.

제안: Use the present perfect or simple past correctly and be concise. State the change clearly and give one or two reasons for the change using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Avoid repetition and correct phrasing (e.g., 'Big Macs and French fries').

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was a child I used to eat McDonald’s—mainly Big Macs and fries—because I liked the taste. Now I prefer biryani because I enjoy its complex spices and it reminds me of family meals.

× My favorite food is biryani that comes with a saloon and especially when my grandmother do it because it is very delicious or when I go to the restaurant and eat.

✓ My favorite food is biryani that comes with salad, especially when my grandmother makes it because it is very delicious, or when I go to a restaurant and eat it.

Errors: incorrect noun 'saloon' should be 'salad' (vocabulary) and pronoun/verb agreement: 'my grandmother do it' uses incorrect verb form and pronoun usage; also missing object pronoun after 'eat'. Correction uses 'makes' for third person singular and adds 'it' after 'eat'. Suggestion: use 'my grandmother makes it' for correct subject-verb agreement and add the object 'it' after 'eat'.

× My favorite food when I was young was McDonald's. I love that, uh, French fries of McDonald's and the Big Mac sauce with the Big Mac burger.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was McDonald's. I loved, uh, the French fries from McDonald's and the Big Mac sauce with the Big Mac burger.

Error: tense inconsistency. The speaker refers to childhood (past) but uses present 'I love'. Change to past 'I loved' to match time frame. Also use preposition 'from' instead of 'of'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when talking about past preferences and use 'French fries from McDonald's'. Use 'loved' to match 'when I was young'.

× Yes, we eat different food at different times of the year, especially on Ramban. We usually eat rice with guillermat and some butter and, uh, with vinto. But uh, the rest of the year we usually eat the same, the same lunch and dinner and the breakfast.

✓ Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year, especially on Ramban. We usually eat rice with guillermat, some butter, and vinto. But for the rest of the year we usually eat the same lunch, dinner, and breakfast.

Errors: 'different food' should be plural 'different foods' (singular/plural); 'on Ramban' may be correct if Ramban is an event but 'on' is acceptable; 'with vinto' awkward—removed extra 'with'; series punctuation and article use: 'the same, the same lunch and dinner and the breakfast' is redundant and uses incorrect articles. Also use 'for the rest of the year' to indicate remainder. Suggestion: use plural for general countable items, simplify the list, and use 'for the rest of the year' for clarity.

× Yes, my favorite food had changed because when I was a child it was a McDonald's, the Big Macs lost and the the French fries.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed because when I was a child it was McDonald's: Big Macs and the French fries.

Errors: wrong past perfect 'had changed' is unnecessary; present perfect 'has changed' fits the question 'Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?'. Also 'the Big Macs lost' is incorrect wording; use 'Big Macs' or 'the Big Mac' and remove duplicate 'the'. Suggestion: use present perfect for change over time up to now and clean up noun phrases.

× But now my favorite food is the biryani rice and the cola.

✓ But now my favorite food is biryani and cola.

Errors: redundant article 'the' before uncountable foods and redundant word 'rice' after 'biryani' (biryani already implies rice). Suggestion: drop 'the' and redundant noun: say 'biryani and cola' to sound natural.