Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons, and avoid hesitations and unnecessary repetition. Use correct singular/plural forms (food is, beef not beefs), correct verb forms and collocations (provides energy, medium-rare). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word for the reason.

예시: My favourite food is beef fried rice. I like it because the rice provides a lot of energy, and I enjoy the beef when itontains medium-rare slices that are tender. Because of these qualities, I often choose it when I want a satisfying meal.

제안: Reduce filler words and repetition, and make sentences grammatically correct and coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence, list 2–3 items, then give a specific reason using a linking word (for example/because). Avoid vague phrases and provide a concise explanation.

예시: When I was young I mostly liked fast food, such as pizza, hamburgers and French fries. This was because cartoons and adverts often showed those foods, which made them look exciting and tasty to children. As a result, I often chose them as treats.

제안: Be more precise and reduce hesitations. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., roast pork, pork soup, traditional dishes) and organize: state yes/no, give two specific examples tied to seasons or festivals, and briefly explain. Use linking words like for example and during.

예시: Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, during Chinese New Year in February we eat traditional dishes such as roast pork and a pork-and-vegetable soup, which are special festive foods. In April we celebrate Kamiya, when we also prepare other traditional family dishes.

제안: Make your contrast clearer and correct grammar (e.g., I liked, I prefer). Start with a clear topic sentence stating change, then give specific reasons and examples. Use linking words such as however or now to signal the shift, and avoid trailing off.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I preferred fried fast foods like burgers and fries; however, now I prefer healthier options such as salads and vegetable-based dishes because I want to eat less oil and feel fitter.

× My favorite foods is simple it is a fried rice with beefs because rice can contains an energy to my bodies and also the beef I like umm the beef that is medium rare or somehow it's like a 75% cook because it contains a lot of umm.

✓ My favorite food is simple: it is fried rice with beef because rice can provide energy to my body, and I like beef that is medium rare or about 75% cooked because it contains a lot of flavor.

Multiple singular/plural errors: 'foods' should be singular 'food' when referring to a single favorite; 'fried rice' does not need an article 'a' in this context; 'beefs' should be 'beef' (uncountable when referring to meat in general); 'rice can contains' should be 'rice can provide/contain' but 'provide' is clearer; 'an energy to my bodies' is wrong — 'energy' is uncountable and 'my bodies' should be 'my body'. Also '75% cook' should be '75% cooked'. Suggestion: Use correct singular/plural forms and treat uncountable nouns appropriately, and choose verbs that collocate (e.g., 'provide energy').

× The kind of the, the kind of food that I like when I was young, mostly, uh, fast food.

✓ The kind of food that I liked when I was young was mostly fast food.

Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency with singular/plural: 'The kind of food' is singular, so use singular verb 'was' and past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was young'. Remove repeated phrase 'the kind of the'. Suggestion: Keep subject and verb number consistent and maintain past tense for past-time descriptions.

× You know, many of children, they really like fast food because as we watch cartoon, this kind of food are the food that serve for the character in the movie.

✓ You know, many children really like fast food because when we watch cartoons, this kind of food is served to the characters in the movie.

Pronoun and agreement issues: 'many of children' should be 'many children'; avoid redundant pronoun 'they' after the noun. 'As we watch cartoon' should be 'when we watch cartoons' and plural 'cartoons'. 'This kind of food are' — with 'kind' as singular use 'is'. 'Serve for the character' should be 'served to the characters'. Suggestion: Use correct noun phrases ('many children'), match singular/plural with 'kind', and use correct prepositions ('to' for serve to).

× So it's very inspire us and also the taste is very likely because.

✓ So it's very inspiring to us, and the taste is very appealing.

Incorrect word forms and agreement: 'inspire' should be the adjective 'inspiring' or the gerund 'inspiring to us'; 'very likely' is incorrect to describe taste — 'appealing' or 'pleasant' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms and choose collocating adjectives for 'taste'.

× Yeah, we do eat different kind of food during the time of the year such as umm, during February we will have like Chinese New Year.

✓ Yes, we do eat different kinds of food at different times of the year; for example, in February we have Chinese New Year.

Quantifier and number agreement: 'different kind of food' should be 'different kinds of food' or 'different kinds of foods'. 'During the time of the year' is unnatural; use 'at different times of the year'. Also 'we will have like Chinese New Year' — for habitual/event statements use present 'we have'. Suggestion: Use plural 'kinds' when speaking generally and present tense for recurring events.

× So most of the time during the month we spend eating like Chinese food such as umm, the fried pig and also umm, the soup that make from like pig skins and also all kind of vegetable together.

✓ So during that month we mostly eat Chinese food, such as fried pork and soup made from pork skin with various vegetables.

Article and word choice errors: 'the fried pig' is unnatural; use 'fried pork' or a specific dish name. 'The soup that make from like pig skins' should be 'soup made from pork skin'. 'All kind of vegetable' should be 'various vegetables' or 'all kinds of vegetables'. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms for meats (pork), use past participle 'made', and use plural 'vegetables' with appropriate quantifiers.

× And during April it's umm Kamiya, our traditional new year.

✓ And in April it's Kamiya, our traditional new year.

Preposition/pronoun choice: Use 'in April' rather than 'during April' when naming a month generally; the rest is acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'in' before months and capitalize proper nouns (Kamiya).

× Definitely yes. When I was young, I always likes, uh, every kind of fast food and mostly the fried kind of food.

✓ Definitely yes. When I was young, I always liked every kind of fast food, mostly fried foods.

Tense and agreement: 'always likes' is incorrect because the subject is first person singular past context 'When I was young' — use past tense 'liked'. 'The fried kind of food' should be 'fried foods' for general category. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame and use plural for food categories.

× But when I grow up as an adult now, I don't really like fried the food that are that contain to my oil, I don't like it.

✓ But now that I have grown up, I don't really like fried foods that contain a lot of oil; I don't like them.

Tense and article errors: 'When I grow up' should be 'now that I have grown up' or 'as an adult'. 'Fried the food' wrong article order — use 'fried foods'. 'That are that contain to my oil' is ungrammatical; use 'that contain a lot of oil'. Pronoun agreement: 'I don't like it' should be 'I don't like them' for plural 'foods'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for change over time and correct noun/pronoun agreement.

× Currently I prefer eating some kind of salad like healthy food and mostly the food that contain vegetables and.

✓ Currently I prefer eating salads and other healthy foods, mostly dishes that contain vegetables.

Quantifier and sentence completion: 'some kind of salad like healthy food' is awkward; use 'salads and other healthy foods'. 'the food that contain' should be 'foods that contain' and the sentence was incomplete—finish the thought. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general preferences and ensure complete sentence structure.