Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp, phát triển câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lỗi từ (ví dụ "Welfare" có thể là tên món sai) và câu thừa, dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc. Cụ thể: 1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn nêu tên món và vì sao. 2) Sửa thì và danh từ (is/are, delicious, affordable). 3) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về thành phần hoặc cách ăn và thói quen ăn uống. 4) Giữ không quá 4-5 câu.

예시: My favourite food is bánh mì because it is both tasty and affordable. It’s a traditional Vietnamese sandwich made with crusty bread, pâté, pickled vegetables and grilled pork. I usually eat it in the morning before school as it’s convenient and filling, and I like the contrast of crunchy bread and savory fillings.

제안: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu quá khứ, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ vựng chính xác (e.g., "candy"/"sweets"). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề đơn giản ở quá khứ, rồi nêu lý do và ví dụ cụ thể (loại kẹo, tần suất, người chia sẻ). Dùng liên từ để nối ý và giữ tối đa 4 câu.

예시: When I was young, I loved sweets, especially fruit-flavoured candies. I used to eat them almost every day after school because they were cheap and very sweet. I often shared my candies with my best friend while we played in the neighborhood.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (thì, danh từ số ít/đếm được), sử dụng liên từ để so sánh mùa và nêu ví dụ cụ thể hơn (loại kem, loại súp). Trình bày rõ ràng: câu chủ đề + hai câu minh họa cho mùa khác nhau + lý do thích thay đổi thực phẩm.

예시: Yes, I usually eat different foods depending on the season because I prefer lighter foods in hot weather and warmer dishes in cold weather. For example, in summer I often eat mango and ice cream to cool down, while in winter I like hot chicken soup or pho to keep warm. This seasonal variety helps me enjoy different flavors throughout the year.

제안: Làm rõ ý bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No), sửa ngữ pháp và tham chiếu (singular/plural, thì), cung cấp lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ kỷ niệm ngắn gọn. Dùng liên từ để kết nối ký ức và lý do vẫn thích món đó.

예시: No, my favourite food hasn’t changed much since I was a child; I still enjoy the same sweet treats. They remind me of happy times playing with friends in the park after school, so eating them brings back good memories. That nostalgic feeling is the main reason I still like them today.

× Welfare is my favorite food because they very delicious and it is a one of the most traditional dish in Vietnam.

✓ Welfare is my favorite food because it is very delicious and it is one of the most traditional dishes in Vietnam.

The pronoun 'they' is plural but refers to a singular noun; use 'it'. 'A one of the most traditional dish' is ungrammatical; use 'one of the most traditional dishes' (no 'a' and plural 'dishes'). Ensure pronoun number agreement and correct article and noun number usage.

× Not only basic material but also is very affordable risk.

✓ Not only are the basic ingredients inexpensive, but it is also very affordable.

The original sentence has wrong word choices and word order. Use 'basic ingredients' for materials, 'inexpensive' or 'affordable' for cost, and correct subject-verb agreement with 'are' for plural 'ingredients'. Use parallel structure: 'Not only... but also...'.

× I often eat for in several morning before I go school.

✓ I often eat it in the mornings before I go to school.

Prepositions are incorrect: use 'in the mornings' for habitual time, and 'go to school' requires 'to'. Also include the object 'it' for the food and use plural 'mornings' for habitual action.

× Well, when I was when I was young, king of food I like is candy.

✓ Well, when I was young, the kind of food I liked was candy.

Redundant phrase 'when I was' repeated and wrong word order. Use past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was young', and 'the kind of food' is the correct phrase. Maintain subject-verb word order.

× I often eat eaten candy very much because it's very sweet and delicious.

✓ I often ate candy because it was very sweet and delicious.

The verb form 'eat eaten' is incorrect. Use simple past 'ate' to describe habitual past actions. Also use 'it was' to match past tense.

× I love candies and I often share with my best friend.

✓ I love candy and I often share it with my best friend.

'Candies' is acceptable but 'candy' as uncountable is more natural here. More importantly, include the object 'it' after 'share' or specify what is shared: 'share it with my best friend'.

× Well, I love eat different food at different times of the years because I think it's very interesting and I can try to vary this.

✓ Well, I love eating different foods at different times of the year because I think it's very interesting and I can try different varieties.

After 'love' use gerund 'eating'. Use plural 'foods' for variety and idiomatic 'at different times of the year' (singular 'year'). 'Try to vary this' is awkward; 'try different varieties' is clearer.

× For example, in summer I care I eat a lot of ice cream, or also winter I eat a lot of warm soup.

✓ For example, in summer I eat a lot of ice cream, and in winter I eat a lot of warm soup.

Remove 'I care' which is incorrect here. Maintain parallel structure and use 'in winter' with 'in summer'. Use 'and' for coordination.

× So when I was a child I love it carry and now I also love it can eat because it's very sweet and they remind me of happy moment from my childhood when I play together with my friends in the parks near my house after school.

✓ When I was a child I loved candy, and now I also love eating it because it's very sweet and it reminds me of happy moments from my childhood when I played with my friends in the park near my house after school.

Mix of tenses and many pronoun/number errors: use past tense 'loved' for childhood, 'love eating' for present habit. Use 'it' for singular candy, 'it reminds' not 'they remind', pluralize 'moments' and use past tense 'played' for past actions. Use 'park' singular for the specific location.