Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'my favourite food is noodles', 'they are soft', 'they keep my stomach warm'). Avoid redundancy.

예시: My favourite food is noodles. I like them because they are soft and easy to eat, and when served in a hot broth they make me feel warm and comforted, especially on cold days.

제안: Use past tense and be specific. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, and give one or two concrete examples with linking words. Fix grammar and expression (e.g., 'I liked desserts', 'they made me happy').

예시: When I was young, I liked desserts such as cakes and ice cream because they tasted sweet and made me feel happy, especially during family celebrations.

제안: Answer directly and use clear examples. Correct word choice ('foods' not 'views') and tense consistency. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'also', and be specific about seasonal foods or traditions.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, I usually have birthday cake on my birthday, and during Chinese New Year I eat traditional dishes like dumplings with my family.

제안: Be concise and use correct tense. Start with a clear statement about change or no change, then briefly explain why with specific detail. Avoid hesitation fillers and incomplete sentences.

예시: No, my favourite food hasn't changed since childhood. I still enjoy desserts because they cheer me up when I'm feeling down, such as a slice of cake or some chocolate.

× For me my favorite food is noodles because I think this kind of food is very soft and easy to eat.

✓ For me, my favorite food is noodles because I think this kind of food is very soft and easy to eat.

Add a comma after introductory phrase 'For me' to improve sentence flow. This is punctuation rather than grammar type list 22 (Article errors) partially; however the main issues here are punctuation and natural phrasing. Suggestion: include the comma and you may also say 'this food' instead of 'this kind of food' for conciseness.

× Also when you add it with soup it will keep your stomach feel very warm.

✓ Also when you add it to soup, it will keep your stomach feeling very warm.

Use the correct preposition 'to' after 'add', and use the continuous participle 'feeling' after 'keep' to form 'keep ... feeling'. The original 'keep your stomach feel' mixes verb forms and is ungrammatical. Add a comma after the subordinate clause for clarity.

× When I was little I like to eat some desserts because this is very sweet and this can make me feel glad.

✓ When I was little, I liked to eat desserts because they were very sweet and they made me feel happy.

The timeframe 'When I was little' requires past tense. Change present 'like' to 'liked' and 'is'/'can make' to past 'were'/'made'. Use 'desserts' plural with pronoun 'they' for clarity and 'happy' is a more natural adjective than 'glad' here. Add a comma after the introductory clause.

× Also have a great emotions at that day.

✓ I also had strong emotions that day.

Original lacks a subject and uses incorrect article agreement ('a great emotions'). Use past tense 'had' to match timeframe, singular/plural agreement 'strong emotions' and the natural time expression 'that day'.

× For me, I will eat different views at different times of the year.

✓ For me, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

The word 'views' is incorrect here; 'foods' is intended. Also use simple present 'eat' to express habitual action rather than 'will eat'. This fits the question about general habits. Remove 'will' to sound natural.

× Also when I had Chinese student year, I will eat with my family members.

✓ Also during the Chinese New Year, I ate with my family.

Use the proper event name 'Chinese New Year'. Match past tense 'ate' with 'during' for a past habitual or recurring event; do not mix past 'had' with future 'will'. 'Family members' can be simplified to 'family'.

× Uh, actually I think this may not change because since I was little, I like to eat desserts from now, I still like to eat desserts when I have some negative emotions and this can make me feel.

✓ Actually, I don't think it has changed because since I was little I have liked desserts; even now I still like to eat desserts when I feel down because they make me feel better.

Mixing tenses is the main problem. Use present perfect 'has changed' and 'have liked' to connect past to present. Replace 'from now' with 'even now' and 'negative emotions' with 'feel down' for natural phrasing. Complete the final clause with 'they make me feel better' to finish the idea. Add commas and semicolon to separate clauses properly.