Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: avoid hesitations, remove repeated fillers (uh, um), and finish sentences fully. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (taste, aroma, special ingredients or occasions) using linking words (for example, because, and). Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: My favourite food is chicken biryani. I especially love it because of its rich spices and fragrant aroma, which make it very appetizing. For example, the combination of saffron and slow-cooked spices gives it a unique flavour that I rarely find in other dishes.

제안: Reduce repetition and add a clear link between past preference and reason. Use one topic sentence, then add specific examples and a linking word (because, so) to explain why you preferred them. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

예시: When I was young, I preferred mild and sweet foods because my palate was sensitive to strong flavours. For example, I often ate plain noodles and sweet porridge, and these meals still remind me of family mornings.

제안: Clarify the answer and correct mistakes (e.g., "with the ear" → "with the year"). Use a direct topic sentence then support with one specific example of seasonal change (or lack of it). Eliminate fillers and keep sentences coherent with linking words like 'however' or 'because'.

예시: Not really — I do not change my food much throughout the year because I focus on a balanced diet. However, I might eat more soups and warm dishes in winter and lighter salads in summer to feel comfortable.

제안: Be specific and organised: start with a clear statement (Yes/No and why), then give concise reasons and a contrast between past and present with linking words (for example, whereas, now). Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'allowed to have' → 'I mainly eat').

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. Whereas I preferred sweet and plain foods as a child, I now choose more nutritious options; for example, I usually eat balanced meals and enjoy chicken biryani occasionally because of its flavour.

× One of my favorite foods is biryani, uh, mainly the chicken biryani, which is the, uh, famous food in my part of country.

✓ One of my favorite foods is biryani, mainly chicken biryani, which is a famous food in my part of the country.

Use of articles: 'the chicken biryani' is unnecessary when speaking generally; 'chicken biryani' is sufficient. Also 'the famous food' should be 'a famous food' because it is one of many famous foods, and 'my part of country' needs the definite article 'the' before 'country'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'the' and use 'a' for non-specific nouns and 'the' before 'country'.

× What makes biryani the most, uh, uh, interesting is the taste and the, uh, smell coming out of it.

✓ What makes biryani most interesting are its taste and the smell that comes from it.

Sentence structure and subject-verb agreement: 'What makes biryani most interesting' is fine, but the verb should agree with the plural subject 'taste and smell', so use 'are'. Use possessive 'its taste' and a clearer relative clause 'that comes from it'. Suggestion: match verb number to the actual subject and use concise phrasing.

× This will make my taste buds active and keeps me.

✓ This will make my taste buds active and keep me alert.

Subject-verb agreement and parallel structure: after 'will', use the base form 'keep' not 'keeps'. Also 'keeps me' is incomplete—add an adjective like 'alert' for clarity. Suggestion: use parallel verb forms after modal verbs and complete the idea with an adjective.

× During my childhood, I was a picky eater and I used to have foods which which are less spicy and more sugary.

✓ During my childhood, I was a picky eater and I used to eat foods that were less spicy and sweeter.

Word choice and comparatives: 'have foods' is less natural than 'eat foods'. Use 'that were' to match past habit. 'More sugary' is better as 'sweeter'. Removed duplicate 'which'. Suggestion: use 'eat' for consuming food, remove duplicate words, and use standard comparative forms.

× These foods are always a memory for me because this has a strong impact in my childhood.

✓ These foods are always a memory for me because they had a strong impact on my childhood.

Pronoun agreement and tense: 'These foods' is plural so use 'they'. 'Has' should be past 'had' to match 'childhood' (past). Use 'impact on' not 'impact in'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches and preposition 'on' is used with 'impact'.

× Personally, I I'm not a person who will change the foods with the ear.

✓ Personally, I'm not a person who will change my foods with the year.

Pronoun and word choice errors: remove duplicate 'I'. 'the ear' is a typo for 'the year'. 'Change the foods' is awkward; 'change my foods' is more natural. Suggestion: remove duplicates and correct typos; use 'year' to refer to time.

× Usually I prefer healthy food with a balanced diet and I include almost, uh, different healthy meals so that I can manage my diet well.

✓ Usually I prefer healthy food and a balanced diet, and I include a variety of healthy meals so that I can manage my diet well.

Prepositions and word choice: 'with a balanced diet' is awkward—prefer 'and a balanced diet'. 'Include almost different healthy meals' is unclear; use 'include a variety of healthy meals'. Suggestion: use 'a variety of' to express different types and coordinate nouns properly.

× Yes, I do think my favorite food has uh changed compared to my childhood days because as already mentioned, I was a big eater in my childhood days.

✓ Yes, I do think my favorite food has changed since my childhood because, as I already mentioned, I used to be a big eater.

Tense and wordiness: 'has changed compared to my childhood days' is wordy; use 'has changed since my childhood'. 'I was a big eater in my childhood days' is better as 'I used to be a big eater' to show past habit. Suggestion: use 'since' for change from past to present and 'used to' for past habits.

× Now currently I'm focused on more nutritious and balanced meal and umm in presently I allowed to have uh chicken biryani the most where what I had during my childhood.

✓ Now I am focused on more nutritious and balanced meals, and at present I am allowed to have chicken biryani most often, which is different from what I had during my childhood.

Article and tense errors: use plural 'meals' with 'more nutritious and balanced'. 'Now currently' and 'in presently' are redundant—use 'now' or 'at present'. 'I allowed to have' is incorrect; use 'I am allowed to have' or better 'I allow myself to have' depending on meaning. Clarified comparison with 'which is different from what I had during my childhood.' Suggestion: avoid redundant time markers, fix verb forms for passive/active meaning, and use plurals appropriately.