Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は簡潔で伝わりますが、繰り返しや曖昧さ（"I feel like"の重複、形容詞の選択）があり、語彙や理由の具体性が不足しています。改善点：①言いたいことを1文で明確に述べる（topic sentence）。②Supporting detailで具体的な理由（味、出汁、麺の食感、思い出など）を一つか二つ挙げ、接続詞（because, for example, and）でつなぐ。③不要な繰り返しやフィラー（uh, I feel like）を減らす。例文長は3〜4文以内に収める。

예시: My favourite food is ramen because I love the rich broth and springy noodles. For example, a good pork-bone broth has a deep, savory flavor that makes each bite satisfying. Eating ramen also reminds me of cozy evenings with friends, which makes it even more enjoyable.

제안: 時制の誤り（現在形と過去形の混同）と語彙の不明確さ（"it is so high high"）があります。改善点：①過去の好みについては過去形で始める。②"because"以下で理由を明確に（例えば、calorie, unhealthy, expensive, convenientなど）。③補足として現在との比較を短く加えると良い。

예시: When I was young, I liked fast food because it tasted good and was convenient. However, now I only eat it occasionally because it is high in calories and not very healthy.

제안: 文法と語順の問題、語彙の選択（"season food"など）や具体例不足が目立ちます。改善点：①季節の変化について述べるときは"seasonal"という語を使う。②季節ごとの具体的な食材（例：summer: tomatoes, cucumber; winter: root vegetables, hot soups）を挙げ、接続詞（for example, in summer）でつなぐ。③文を短く分けて明瞭に。

예시: Yes, I do. I usually eat more seasonal foods. For example, in summer I eat fresh vegetables like tomatoes and cucumbers, while in winter I prefer root vegetables and warm soups.

제안: 文法（時制と過去習慣の表現）、語彙の不自然さ（"I was. Eat a lot"）と説明の不十分さが問題です。改善点：①過去の嗜好は過去形で明確に述べ、変化の理由を簡潔に説明する。②理由は具体的に（例えば、ate too many, allergy, dislike textureなど）。③不要な語句の省略と文の統合で流暢さを高める。

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was a child, I liked eggs because my family served them often. Now I dislike eggs because I used to eat them every day and got tired of them.

× I like ramen the best because each noodle is so delicious and good.

✓ I like ramen the best because each noodle is so delicious.

The phrase 'delicious and good' is redundant; both are adjectives modifying 'noodle'. Use one strong adjective 'delicious' for clarity and naturalness. Keep vocabulary precise and avoid repeating similar adjectives. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I feel like, I feel like uh, it makes me happy to eat.

✓ I feel like it makes me happy to eat.

The repetition 'I feel like, I feel like' is unnecessary and interrupts sentence flow. Use present simple 'makes' to describe a general feeling. Remove filler words for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I like fast food when I was young, but now I sometimes eat it because it is so high high.

✓ I liked fast food when I was young, but now I sometimes eat it because it is so high in calories.

Tense mismatch: 'when I was young' requires past tense 'liked'. Also 'so high high' is incorrect; you can say 'high in calories' to explain why you rarely eat it now. Ensure adjective phrases are complete. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Yes I do because season food is different so summer is example summer has vegetable fresh or vegetable but winter is.

✓ Yes, I do because seasonal foods are different; for example, in summer there are fresh vegetables, but in winter there are not as many.

Multiple issues: use 'seasonal' (adjective) not 'season'; plural 'foods' needed; add commas and 'for example' to introduce examples; use preposition 'in summer' and 'in winter'; say 'there are' to indicate existence. Also 'fresh vegetables' is correct word order. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Yes, I like egg when I was young, but now I don't like I hate eggs because I was. Eat a lot of eggs so I don't like.

✓ Yes, I liked eggs when I was young, but now I don't like them because I used to eat a lot of eggs.

Tense consistency: 'when I was young' requires past 'liked'. Use plural 'eggs' when speaking generally. Replace fragmented sentence 'I was. Eat a lot' with 'I used to eat a lot of eggs' to express past habitual action. Use the pronoun 'them' to refer back to eggs. Grammar problem type ID: 5