Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and relevant, but could be improved by using a clear topic sentence, avoiding redundancy, and adding a specific detail about what you like in the ramen (e.g., broth type or toppings). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use a linking phrase when adding details.

예시: I really enjoy ramen, especially as a comfort food. In particular, miso ramen with tender pork and a soft-boiled egg is my favorite because the rich broth is very warming. Also, I tend to eat it in winter when I want something hearty.

제안: This response is clear and well-structured with a topic sentence and supporting detail. To improve further, vary vocabulary (avoid repeating 'loved') and add a brief specific memory or reason to enrich the answer using a linking word.

예시: When I was young I was picky, but I always liked chicken porridge. For example, my mother would make it whenever I had a cold because the soft rice and mild chicken broth soothed me, so it was my go-to meal.

제안: The answer addresses the question and gives cultural context, which is good. Improve coherence by starting with a direct topic sentence about seasonal variation, then linking to the festival example. Also correct small accuracy/detail phrasing (Eid al-Adha is the festival after Hajj; Eid al-Fitr follows Ramadan) and add a brief reason or contrast to make the answer more informative.

예시: Yes, I do eat different foods at certain times of the year. For instance, during Eid al-Adha my family traditionally prepares goat meat, although I prefer milder flavours and am not a big fan of it. However, the dish is popular in my hometown and we still eat it for the celebrations.

제안: Your answer is brief and relevant but too short and vague. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating whether your favourite changed, then give a specific comparison (what was favourite then vs now) and a reason using a linking word. Add one concrete example to illustrate the similarity.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed somewhat. Although I used to prefer chicken porridge as a child, I still like brothy dishes; for example, now I enjoy ramen and clear soups because I appreciate complex flavours and different toppings more than I did before.

× I absolutely love ramen, it is one of my favorite comfort foods.

✓ I absolutely love ramen. It is one of my favorite comfort foods.

This sentence is a run-on (comma splice) joining two independent clauses with only a comma. Use a period or a conjunction to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: split into two sentences or use 'and' or a semicolon.

× I especially like it during cold seasons because the hot pot slowly warms up my body.

✓ I especially like it during cold seasons because the hot broth slowly warms my body.

The noun 'hot pot' can be confusing; 'broth' is more appropriate for soup. 'Warms up my body' is wordy; 'warms my body' is more natural. Also 'cold seasons' is acceptable but 'in cold weather' is more common.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young?

✓ What kind of food did you like when you were young?

This sentence is correct; no change necessary. It correctly uses past tense 'did you like' to ask about past preferences.

× I was very picky with my food when I was a child, but I loved chicken porridge.

✓ I was very picky about my food when I was a child, but I loved chicken porridge.

The preposition 'with' is less natural here; use 'about' after 'picky'. The tense and structure are otherwise correct.

× I loved how warm and comforting it was and it would always be my go to meal for whenever I was sick.

✓ I loved how warm and comforting it was, and it was always my go-to meal whenever I was sick.

Use 'was' rather than 'would' to state a habitual past preference; 'would' can be used but sounds conditional. 'Go to' as adjective should be hyphenated 'go-to'. Remove redundant 'for' before 'whenever'.

× Yes, I am Muslim so there is a festival that we celebrate after Ramadan, it is called Eid UL Adha.

✓ Yes, I am Muslim, so there is a festival that we celebrate after Ramadan. It is called Eid ul-Adha.

This is a run-on sentence (comma splice). Separate into two sentences. Also use the conventional capitalization and hyphenation 'Eid ul-Adha' and lowercase 'ul'.

× We eat goat meat during this time and I'm not really a big fan of goat meat but it is quite popular in my hometown.

✓ We eat goat meat during this time, and I'm not really a big fan of it, but it is quite popular in my hometown.

Repeating 'goat meat' is redundant; replace the second instance with 'it'. Also fix comma splice by adding a comma before 'and' and commas around the clause 'I'm not really a big fan of it'.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?

✓ Has your favorite food changed since you were a child?

The sentence is grammatically correct. Only spelling adjusted to American 'favorite' if consistency desired; tense and structure correct using present perfect to ask about change from past to present.

× Yes, although there are a few slight similarities to my favorite meal when I was a child.

✓ Yes, although there are a few slight similarities to my favorite meal from when I was a child.

Use 'from when I was a child' or 'to my favorite childhood meal' for clearer phrasing. 'Slight similarities to' is acceptable but 'to' followed by 'from when' improves clarity.

× I love brothy and soup meals.

✓ I like brothy soups and other soup-based meals.

'Brothy and soup meals' is awkward. Use 'brothy soups' or 'soup-based meals'. Also align verb tense and intensity: 'like' fits general preference; 'love' may be kept if stronger. Suggest: 'I love brothy soups and other soup-based meals.'