Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct tense and articles, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g. “personally speaking” twice). Use correct grammar for countable nouns and past events (e.g. “one of my favorite foods” and “I tried”).

예시: My favourite food is Mexican tacos. I tried them recently with my best friend at a new restaurant in my city; they had grilled vegetables, cheese and beans, and a good balance of spice. I enjoy them because the flavours are fresh and not too heavy.

제안: Use simple clear past tense and avoid filler phrases. Give a direct topic sentence about childhood preferences, then one specific example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. “Italian and Mexican foods”, “pasta”, “pizza”), and avoid vague phrases like “tasting food”.

예시: When I was young I liked Italian and Mexican food. For example, I often ate pasta and pizza at home, and I loved street tacos because they were cheap and full of flavour.

제안: Answer directly and use linking words (e.g. “Yes. When I travel, I try local specialties because…”). Be specific about seasons or occasions and avoid wordiness. Correct grammar: “we prefer to try a destination’s famous dishes” and avoid repeating words.

예시: Yes. When I travel I try the local specialties at each destination because it helps me learn about the culture. For example, in winter I prefer hearty stews, but in summer I choose lighter salads and grilled fish.

제안: Use consistent tense (past for childhood, present for now) and clear contrast language (“When I was a child... Now I...”). Give one clear reason for the change and one specific example. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases like “package packets.”

예시: Yes, my favourites have changed. When I was a child I mostly ate homemade snacks like bread and pakoras, but now I prefer street food and new dishes from cafes because I enjoy trying new flavours and trends.

× Mad about personally speaking.

✓ Personally speaking, I am very enthusiastic about food.

The original phrase 'Mad about personally speaking' misorders adverbs and adjectives and lacks a subject-verb structure. Use 'Personally speaking' as a discourse marker followed by a complete clause 'I am very enthusiastic about food' to express the meaning clearly. Suggestion: place adverbial phrase at start, include subject and appropriate adjective (enthusiastic).

× Personally speaking I enjoy trying different kind of meals whenever I get the chance.

✓ Personally speaking, I enjoy trying different kinds of meals whenever I get the chance.

The noun 'kind' must agree in number with 'different'. Use plural 'kinds' when referring to more than one type. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase for clarity.

× But my one of my favorite food was Mexican tacos I try with my best friend.

✓ One of my favorite foods was Mexican tacos that I tried with my best friend.

Redundant 'my' and incorrect singular 'food' for 'one of my favorite' should be plural 'foods'. Use past tense 'tried' to match 'was'. Add relative pronoun 'that' for clarity. Remove extra 'But' if continuing sentence; start with 'One of my favorite foods...'. Also separate clauses with proper punctuation.

× It was newly opened restaurant in my city so it was made with the grilled vegetables and cheese and beans and it was a balance of spice.

✓ It was a newly opened restaurant in my city, and the tacos were made with grilled vegetables, cheese, and beans, with a balanced spice level.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'newly opened restaurant'. 'It was made' is incorrect because 'it' refers to the restaurant but the tacos were made; change to 'the tacos were made'. Use commas to separate list items and simplify 'it was a balance of spice' to 'with a balanced spice level'.

× When I was like when I was a youngster or as turning to a teenager, I generally prefer to either Italian ex Mexican foods like Mexican tacos and the food like uh, pastas, pizzas and street food, which was very tasty and tasting food and have a balance of spice.

✓ When I was a youngster or a teenager, I generally preferred Italian or Mexican foods, such as tacos, pastas, pizzas, and street food, which were very tasty and had a balanced spice.

Change 'prefer' to past tense 'preferred' to agree with the past time frame 'When I was...'. Remove redundant wording 'like when I was' and 'as turning to'. Use 'Italian or Mexican' (not 'ex'). Use plural forms 'pastas' and 'pizzas' consistently. Change 'was very tasty and tasting food and have' to 'were very tasty and had' to correct subject-verb agreement and use appropriate verbs for past descriptions.

× Yes, I usually prefer to eat different food at different times of the year whenever we went for a travel.

✓ Yes, I usually prefer to eat different foods at different times of the year when we travel.

Consistent present tense 'prefer' matches 'usually'. Use plural 'foods' for different types. 'Whenever we went for a travel' mixes past tense and unnecessary wording; use 'when we travel' for habitual present. Also 'travel' doesn't need 'a' in this context.

× So at the particular destination, we usually prefer to eat its famous food.

✓ So at a particular destination, we usually try its famous foods.

'The particular destination' is awkward; 'a particular destination' is natural. Use 'try' instead of 'prefer to eat' to convey sampling local cuisine. Use plural 'foods' for variety. This corrects article usage and verb choice.

× So we can also grab the knowledge about that particular culture and tradition also.

✓ This way we can also learn about the local culture and traditions.

'Grab the knowledge about' is non-idiomatic. Use 'learn about' and plural 'traditions'. Avoid repeating 'also' twice; restructure sentence for clarity and natural flow.

× And trying our different different cuisines can make us more tasty, uh, make us more preference in taste.

✓ Trying different cuisines can broaden our taste preferences.

Original has repetition 'different different' and awkward phrasing 'make us more tasty' and 'make us more preference in taste'. Use concise, natural expression 'broaden our taste preferences'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× So when I was a child I have different cuisines but now I was a teenagers.

✓ When I was a child I ate different kinds of food, but now I am a teenager.

Mix of past and present tenses: use past 'ate' for childhood, present 'am' for current age. 'have different cuisines' is incorrect; say 'ate different kinds of food'. 'was a teenagers' is ungrammatical: use 'am a teenager'.

× Now we usually prefer to eat street foods or the foods which are launched recently by the restaurants and cafes.

✓ Now I usually prefer to eat street food or dishes recently introduced by restaurants and cafés.

Change plural 'we' to 'I' to match speaker. Use 'prefer to eat street food' (uncountable) and 'dishes recently introduced' for clarity. 'Launched recently' is acceptable but 'recently introduced' is more natural.

× But when when we was a child we usually prefer to eat such kind of bread, pakoras and the things which are came in the package packets.

✓ But when I was a child we usually preferred to eat breads, pakoras, and items that came in packets.

Correct double 'when'. Use past tense 'was' for 'I was a child' and past 'preferred' to match. 'Such kind of bread' should be pluralized 'breads' or 'types of bread'. 'Which are came' is incorrect; use past 'that came'. 'Package packets' is redundant; use 'packets'.