Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và mạch lạc. Tránh tiếng lắp và từ không chính xác (ví dụ “inquiry” sai từ). Mô tả cụ thể hơn về cách chế biến, hương vị hoặc lý do bạn thích, dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, for example, and). Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu.

예시: My favourite food is rice because it is a staple in my family. For example, we often cook steamed rice and serve it with grilled meat and stir-fried vegetables. This combination tastes comforting and gives us a balanced meal. I especially enjoy it when the rice is slightly sticky and warm.

제안: Cần dùng thì đúng (past tense) và từ vựng phù hợp. Tránh từ sai nghĩa (“passport”, “tasks”). Trả lời rõ ràng với ví dụ cụ thể về món ăn và lý do bạn thích (e.g., sweets, snacks, fast food), sử dụng liên từ như because hoặc when to làm rõ nguyên nhân hoặc hoàn cảnh.

예시: When I was young, I liked trying different snacks and sweets because they tasted exciting and varied. For example, I often ate candy, fried dough and small cakes at festivals. I was curious to try new flavors more than plain meals like rice and vegetables.

제안: Cần cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và dùng từ chính xác khi mô tả thay đổi theo mùa/ dịp (e.g., during festivals, in summer). Nên nêu ví dụ cụ thể về món ăn theo mùa hoặc dịp, và dùng liên từ (for example, during, sometimes) để liên kết ý. Tránh lặp từ và ums.

예시: Yes. During festivals and holidays, my family often eats special dishes or we go out to try international cuisine. For example, at Lunar New Year we prepare sticky rice and traditional soups, while in summer we prefer lighter foods like salads and cold noodles. On ordinary days, we usually eat plain rice with simple side dishes.

제안: Cần nêu rõ sự thay đổi bằng cách so sánh quá khứ và hiện tại, dùng thì đúng và cụ thể hóa những gì thay đổi (món ăn, hương vị, lý do). Tránh cấu trúc lủng củng và từ không rõ nghĩa. Dùng linking words như however, now, when I was a child để làm rõ mạch văn.

예시: Yes, my tastes have changed since childhood. When I was a child I mostly liked sweet snacks and fast food, but now I prefer healthier meals like rice with vegetables and grilled fish. This change happened because I became more health conscious and started cooking for myself.

× My favorite food is rice or rice is a staple food in our family's meals.

✓ My favorite food is rice because rice is a staple in my family's meals.

The sentence has awkward coordination with 'or' and unnecessary possessive form 'family's meals'. Replace 'or' with 'because' to show reason and use 'my family's meals' correctly; also omit extra 'food' after 'staple'. (Lỗi sử dụng liên từ và mạo từ, câu ban đầu thiếu rõ ràng và gây lặp từ.)

× we usually cook rice with some inquiry and like meat and vegetable to have, uh, to have uh, healthy meals to keep balance.

✓ we usually cook rice with ingredients like meat and vegetables to have healthy, balanced meals.

'Inquiry' is incorrect; use 'ingredients'. 'Like' should precede examples. Use plural 'vegetables' and adjectives 'healthy, balanced' before 'meals'. Remove duplicated 'to have'. (Sai giới từ/từ vựng và số nhiều; cần dùng danh từ đúng và sắp xếp từ hợp lý.)

× When I were a try, uh, I usually try to get some passport because uh, they are all have uh delicious tasks and when I will try I am feel curious about them umm, more than some uh normal food like rice, meat and vegetarian.

✓ When I was a child, I used to try different snacks because they all had delicious tastes, and when I tried them I felt more curious about them than about normal foods like rice, meat and vegetables.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'were' should be 'was' (past simple), 'a try' incorrect -> 'a child', 'usually try' -> 'used to try' for past habit, 'passport' wrong word -> 'snacks', 'are all have' -> 'all had' (past), 'tastes' not 'tasks', 'when I will try I am feel' -> 'when I tried I felt', 'vegetarian' -> 'vegetables'. (Lỗi thì quá khứ và từ vựng; cần dùng thì quá khứ đơn và từ đúng.)

× in some occasion, uh, we, my family usually, uh, go out to eat and enjoy a lot of a kind of food, uh, from other countries, umm, but in every, uh, every day we usually use rice with some spaghetti.

✓ On some occasions my family usually goes out to eat and enjoy different cuisines from other countries, but every day we usually eat rice with some pasta.

'In some occasion' -> 'On some occasions'. Subject-verb agreement: 'my family usually goes'. 'a kind of food from other countries' -> 'different cuisines from other countries'. 'Use rice with some spaghetti' -> 'eat rice with some pasta'. (Lỗi giới từ, số nhiều và đồng nhất chủ vị-động từ; hãy dùng 'occasions', chỉnh động từ và từ vựng.)

× Yes, of course, umm, when I were a try, uh, I am, I am untouched.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, I was inexperienced.

'When I were a try' incorrect: use 'When I was a child'. 'I am, I am untouched' mixes present and wrong adjective; use past 'I was inexperienced'. (Lỗi thì quá khứ và từ vựng; sửa sang quá khứ đơn và dùng tính từ phù hợp.)

× Uh, so I usually, uh, train, I transform my interest in food and it is, uh, provide me a lot of opportunity to enjoy a lot of.

✓ So I usually trained myself and developed my interest in food, and it provided me with many opportunities to enjoy different dishes.

Mix of tense, verb forms and prepositions: 'train' -> 'trained myself' or 'practiced', 'transform my interest' -> 'developed my interest', 'it is, uh, provide' -> 'it provided', 'opportunity to enjoy a lot of' -> 'many opportunities to enjoy different dishes'. Also add 'with' after 'provided me'. (Lỗi giới từ và thì; cần dùng quá khứ, dạng động từ đúng và giới từ 'with'.)