Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition and hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small errors (e.g., "the the", "Sona saag" -> "sarson ka saag").

예시: My favourite food is Indian cuisine. I especially enjoy Punjabi dishes; for example, in winter I love sarson ka saag with makki di roti because it is warm and flavorful.

제안: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect reasons and give a concise, specific example of behaviour. Correct grammar: use past simple/continuous and clearer vocabulary ("influenced" -> "influenced by ads", "stubborn" -> "throw a tantrum").

예시: When I was young, I used to prefer fast food such as burgers and pizza. Because I was influenced by advertisements and social media, I often threw a tantrum in front of my parents when I wanted to try a new dish.

제안: Be specific and correct names of dishes and avoid fillers. Use linking words ('for example', 'in contrast') and provide one clear example per season with accurate vocabulary (e.g., "dal sabzi", "lassi", "sarson ka saag", "makki di roti").

예시: Yes. For example, in summer I prefer light dishes like dal sabzi and chilled lassi, whereas in winter I enjoy heartier meals such as sarson ka saag with makki di roti and roasted carrots and beans.

제안: Answer directly and use contrasting linking words ('formerly'/'now' or 'in the past'/'now'). Correct tense and reduce repetition. Give a brief reason for the change to add content (health, taste).

예시: Yes. In the past I preferred fast food, but now I prefer healthier options such as vegetables and salads because I am more aware of nutrition and want to stay fit.

× Indian food is my favorite because as I live in India Punjab, I love to eat the Indian food like the the roti uh, but in the winters I would like to eat the Sona saag with the makki di roti.

✓ Indian food is my favorite because I live in Punjab, India. I love to eat Indian food like roti, and in winter I like to eat sarson saag with makki di roti.

The original sentence misorders the place name ('India Punjab' should be 'Punjab, India'), uses an unnecessary 'as' before 'I live', repeats 'the', and uses inconsistent articles and verb forms. Use simple present for general preference ('is', 'love', 'like'). Remove extra articles before food names and use correct season noun ('winter' singular for a general statement). Also correct 'Sona saag' to 'sarson saag' for standard transliteration and remove filler sounds. ID:11

× When I was young, I would like to eat the fast food like the burger, pizza because I influenced by the social media and whenever I see the new dishes, I eat a stubborn for in front of my parents and start crying for the fast food.

✓ When I was young, I used to like eating fast food like burgers and pizza because I was influenced by social media. Whenever I saw new dishes, I shouted and cried in front of my parents to get fast food.

The context is past habitual, so use 'used to' or past simple, not 'would like' which is present. 'Influenced' needs past auxiliary 'was influenced'. 'Whenever I see' should be past 'saw'. 'I eat a stubborn for' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is likely 'I shouted and cried' or 'I made a fuss'. Also pluralize countable nouns ('burgers'). ID:5

× As I said earlier, I eat different food in different season.

✓ As I said earlier, I eat different foods in different seasons.

Use plural 'foods' when referring to different kinds, and plural 'seasons' for general recurring times of year. 'In different season' is incorrect prepositional/number use. ID:11

× For example in summer I like to eat the Dal sabji uh with the lassi and in the winters I would like to eat the sarathasa maki roti and sometime the cats, carrots and the beans.

✓ For example, in summer I like to eat dal sabzi with lassi, and in winter I like to eat sarson ka makki di roti and sometimes cauliflower, carrots, and beans.

Remove unnecessary definite articles before uncountable or general food names ('the Dal sabji' -> 'dal sabzi'). Use 'in summer' and 'in winter' (singular) for general habits. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'Cats' is likely a misrecognition for 'cauliflower' or 'cabbage' — corrected to 'cauliflower' based on context; ensure plurals for vegetables. Also standardize transliteration: 'sarson ka makki di roti'. ID:22

× As I said, I say earlier, in the past I like to eat the fast food, but at present I like to eat the healthy foods, the vegetables and the salad.

✓ As I said earlier, in the past I liked to eat fast food, but at present I like to eat healthy foods, such as vegetables and salad.

The sentence mixes tenses and repeats phrases ('I say earlier'). Use past simple 'liked' for past habits and present simple 'like' for current preferences. Remove unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns ('fast food', 'salad') and avoid repetition. Use 'such as' to introduce examples. ID:6