Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more specific and expand slightly with a brief reason or example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one linked supporting detail. Avoid filler words.

예시: I don't have only one favourite food, but I especially enjoy spicy dishes. For example, I love Sichuan hotpot because the bold flavors and numbing spice make it exciting to eat.

제안: Use past tense consistently, reduce hesitation and filler words, and give one specific example and a brief reason. Use a linking phrase to connect idea and reason.

예시: When I was young, I liked fast food, especially burgers and fries. However, my parents rarely let me eat them because they thought such meals were unhealthy for children.

제안: Good structure and specific examples; reduce hesitations and repeat words, and improve linking words (use however/while). Use consistent terms and correct small grammar (e.g., 'cuisines' vs 'cuisine', 'because they make me feel warmer').

예시: Yes. For example, in summer I prefer Japanese cuisine because dishes like sashimi and cold noodles are light and refreshing. In contrast, in winter I enjoy Thai curries or Chinese hot pot since the spicy broths keep me warm.

제안: Use consistent tense (past for childhood), avoid filler words, and provide clearer, specific examples and a short reason. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and link ideas with 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, my tastes have changed. I used to enjoy fast food as a child, but now I find it too greasy and unhealthy, so I prefer healthier options like sandwiches or Japanese sashimi because they are lighter and fresher.

× When I was young, I like, uh, fast food.

✓ When I was young, I liked, uh, fast food.

Past context 'When I was young' requires past tense. Use 'liked' to match time reference. Suggestion: use past simple for habitual past actions (I liked).

× I think it's like pretty common amount, uh, children's,

✓ I think it's pretty common among children,

'Amount' is incorrect for countable people; 'among' is the correct preposition for groups. Use 'children' (plural noun) not possessive. Suggestion: say 'common among children' for generalization.

× but my parents usually don't let me eat that many fast foods because they think those are unhealthy.

✓ but my parents usually didn't let me eat that much fast food because they thought it was unhealthy.

Time mismatch: sentence refers to childhood so use past tense 'didn't let' and 'thought'. 'Fast food' is uncountable when talking generally, so use 'that much fast food' rather than 'that many fast foods'. Use singular 'it' to refer to the category.

× Yes uh for example in summer I prefer Japanese cuisine over other cuisines because they are very refreshing and easy to digest.

✓ Yes, for example in summer I prefer Japanese cuisine over other cuisines because it is very refreshing and easy to digest.

'Japanese cuisine' is a singular collective noun, so use 'it' not 'they'. Maintain present simple for habitual preference. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech pause.

× But in in winter I prefer Chinese food or Thai Thai cuisine such as Curry and hot pot cause those make me feel warmer.

✓ But in winter I prefer Chinese food or Thai cuisine such as curry and hot pot because those make me feel warmer.

Remove duplicated 'in'. 'Thai Thai' is redundant; use 'Thai cuisine'. 'Because' is more formal than 'cause'. 'Those' is acceptable referring to dishes (plural), and 'make' correctly agrees. Capitalization: 'curry' not necessarily capitalized. No third-person singular error here but corrected redundancies and conjunction.

× Yes, I like fast food when I was a child, but now I feel like they are very greasy and unhealthy and I prefer other healthier choice.

✓ Yes, I liked fast food when I was a child, but now I feel they are very greasy and unhealthy, and I prefer healthier choices.

Match past reference: 'liked' for childhood. 'They' can refer to 'fast foods' but better to say 'they are' or rephrase; plural 'choices' required after 'prefer'. Use 'healthier choices' plural or 'a healthier choice'. Add comma before 'and' for clarity.

× For example a sandwich or umm, Japanese sashimi, umm sushi etcetera.

✓ For example, a sandwich or Japanese sashimi or sushi, etc.

Add comma after 'For example'. Avoid filler 'umm' in written speech. Use consistent article use: 'a sandwich' but not 'a' before uncountable/plural 'sashimi' or 'sushi'—these can be used without 'a' or with 'some'. Suggestion: 'For example, a sandwich or Japanese sashimi or sushi.'