Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and give specific reasons. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. "comfort tickets") and incorrect verb forms.

예시: My favourite food is Japanese cuisine. I particularly enjoy sushi and ramen because sushi is light and fresh, while ramen has rich, savory broth that makes me feel comforted. Also, eating them reminds me of a trip I took to Japan, which brings back happy memories.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give a specific example. Use correct verb tense and simple connectors (because, so). Avoid unclear words and repetition.

예시: When I was young, I preferred mild foods and avoided spicy dishes because I couldn't tolerate chili. For example, I often ate plain rice, steamed vegetables and sweet pancakes because they were gentle on my stomach.

제안: Be more organized: state the general answer, then give two clear seasonal examples with correct vocabulary. Avoid hesitations and incorrect collocations (e.g. "ramen with ice"). Use linking words (For example, In summer).

예시: Yes, I eat different foods throughout the year. For example, at New Year I enjoy hot soups and stews because the weather is cold. In summer, I prefer cold dishes like salads or chilled noodles to stay cool.

제안: Give a clear statement about change, then explain reasons with specific examples. Use correct tense and avoid confusing phrases ("snow flavor", "wash out"). Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum and use linking words (because, since, now).

예시: Yes, my taste has changed since childhood. I now enjoy spicier foods, such as spicy curries and hot peppers, because I have gradually built up a tolerance and like stronger flavours.

× My favorite food is Japanese food. I love to eat sushi and ramen because it's contain a lot of flavor and comfort tickets so it's made me feel happy when it tastes and also is being me back to Japan all the time.

✓ My favorite food is Japanese food. I love to eat sushi and ramen because they contain a lot of flavor and comfort, so they make me feel happy when I taste them and always remind me of Japan.

Multiple pronoun and reference errors: 'it's contain' uses singular 'it' with plural verb and incorrect contraction; should be 'they contain' because sushi and ramen are plural. 'comfort tickets' is incorrect word choice; 'comfort' alone or 'comfort food' fits. 'it's made me feel' mixes tense and subject; use present simple 'they make me feel' to match general statement. 'when it tastes' lacks clear subject and tense; use 'when I taste them'. 'is being me back to Japan' is incorrect structure; use 'remind me of Japan'. Suggest using consistent plural pronouns and correct verb forms and clearer nouns.

× When I was young I really love to eat anything without spicy because those I don't like chili and hot smell hot pictures like it.

✓ When I was young I really loved to eat anything that was not spicy because I didn't like chili or strong hot smells.

Tense inconsistency and incorrect constructions: 'When I was young I really love' mixes past time marker with present tense; change 'love' to past 'loved'. 'anything without spicy' is unnatural; use 'anything that was not spicy'. 'those I don't like chili' is ungrammatical pronoun use; clarify to 'I didn't like chili'. 'hot smell hot pictures like it' is nonsensical; interpret as 'strong hot smells'. Use past tense consistently and clearer noun phrases.

× Yes, I do eat different food in at different time of the years. Like at the new year, the beginning of the year I really like to eat umm hot soup because it's cold. But after that during the summer I like to eat ramen with ice like I call ramming.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, at New Year, at the beginning of the year, I like to eat hot soup because it is cold. But in the summer I like to eat chilled noodles (ramen with ice), which I jokingly call 'ramming'.

Article and count errors: 'different food' should be plural 'different foods'. 'in at different time of the years' has wrong prepositions and pluralization; correct to 'at different times of the year'. 'the new year' can be 'New Year' or 'the New Year'—use 'New Year'. 'it's cold' must refer to weather; keep 'it is cold'. 'ramen with ice' is odd but acceptable; clarify as 'chilled noodles'. Also corrected punctuation and wording for clarity. Maintain present habitual tense.

× Yes it's was changed especially when I go up I really love to eat more spicy and snow flavor than when I wash out so I don't know why my tongue has changed differently but I think because of I have the stronger tongue to taste.

✓ Yes, it has changed, especially as I grew up. I began to enjoy spicier and bolder flavors than when I was a child, so I don't know why my taste preferences changed, but I think my palate became stronger.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'Yes it's was changed' mixes contractions and past tense; use present perfect 'it has changed' to indicate change since childhood. 'when I go up' should be 'as I grew up'. 'more spicy and snow flavor' likely means 'spicier and bolder flavors' or 'stronger flavors'; corrected accordingly. 'when I wash out' is incorrect; changed to 'when I was a child'. 'my tongue has changed differently' is awkward; use 'my taste preferences changed' or 'my palate became stronger'. Improved verb forms and idiomatic expressions.