Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and small hesitations like “and yeah.” Use accurate grammar (e.g., “kinds of,” “bring out”).

예시: My favourite food is dumplings. I love them because they are filled with various meats and spices that bring out a rich flavour and pleasant texture. For example, pork and chive dumplings have a juicy filling and a slightly chewy wrapper, which makes them very satisfying.

제안: Improve clarity and reduce fillers: open with a direct statement, avoid vague phrases like “their, you know,” and replace imprecise words with specific descriptions (e.g., “dark meat,” “crispy skin”). Use one linking word to add a reason or example.

예시: When I was young I loved eating chicken, especially the dark meat and crispy skin. The dark meat was juicy and full of flavour, and the crispy skin had a pleasant aroma, so it was my favourite choice for family meals.

제안: Be slightly more precise and concise: give a direct topic sentence then one specific example of seasonal food, using a linking word like “for example” or “for instance.” This makes your answer more informative and natural.

예시: Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year because many dishes are linked to festivals. For example, during the Lunar New Year we eat sticky rice cakes and dumplings, while in autumn we often prepare mooncakes for the Mid-Autumn Festival.

제안: Make the response direct and grammatical: start with a clear statement, then briefly explain how your tastes expanded with one concrete example. Avoid contradictory phrases like “does not make any changes.”

예시: No, my favourite food hasn't changed, but I have added more favourites as I grew up. For instance, I still love dumplings, but I also began to appreciate sushi and grilled vegetables over the years.

× There are many kind of dishes that I really love, but among them my favorite food would be dumplings because they are filled with different kind of meat and spices that brings out their flavor and texture.

✓ There are many kinds of dishes that I really love, but among them my favorite food would be dumplings because they are filled with different kinds of meat and spices that bring out their flavor and texture.

'Many' requires a plural noun, so 'kind' should be 'kinds' (plural). Similarly, 'different kind of meat' should be 'different kinds of meat'. Also, the verb 'brings' must agree with the plural subject 'meat and spices', so use 'bring'. Suggestion: make nouns and verbs agree in number by identifying singular vs plural subjects and matching verbs accordingly.

× And yeah, and that's why I really love to enjoy it.

✓ And yeah, that's why I really enjoy them.

The phrase 'love to enjoy it' is awkward and 'enjoy' is a stative verb here; use simple present 'enjoy'. Also 'dumplings' is plural, so use 'them' instead of 'it'. Use direct verb form 'really enjoy' rather than 'love to enjoy'.

× When I was younger, I really loved having chicken very much, especially their, you know, fat meats because it used to be very flavorful and filled with aroma and it was a burst of their new flavors and I really loved.

✓ When I was younger, I really loved eating chicken, especially the fatty parts, because they used to be very flavorful and aromatic, and they were a burst of new flavors that I loved.

Pronouns 'their' and 'it' are incorrectly used for 'chicken'. Use 'they' or refer to 'parts' and match verbs: 'used to be' should agree with plural 'parts' so 'they used to be'. 'Fat meats' is unnatural; use 'fatty parts'. Also avoid repeating 'really loved'—combine into a clear final clause. Suggestion: refer explicitly to 'parts' and ensure pronoun and verb number agreement.

× When I was younger, I really loved having chicken very much, especially their, you know, fat meats because it used to be very flavorful and filled with aroma and it was a burst of their new flavors and I really loved.

✓ When I was younger, I really loved eating chicken very much, especially the fatty parts, because they used to be very flavorful and full of aroma, and they were a burst of new flavors that I really loved.

Repeat: 'fat meats' -> 'fatty parts' and 'it used to be' -> 'they used to be' to match plural. Ensure consistency: 'full of aroma' is more natural than 'filled with aroma'. This keeps plurality consistent across nouns and verbs.

× Yeah, we do have different foods at different time in our year due to our festivals and our culture and everything we have is part of our culture.

✓ Yeah, we do have different foods at different times of the year due to our festivals and culture; everything we have is part of our culture.

Use plural 'times' and the phrase 'of the year' to indicate repetition across the year: 'different times of the year'. 'Due to our festivals and our culture' is fine but can be streamlined to 'festivals and culture'. Suggestion: use standard prepositional phrase 'at different times of the year'.

× That's why we enjoy different foods throughout the year.

✓ That's why we enjoy different foods throughout the year.

Sentence is correct; present simple 'enjoy' appropriately describes habitual action. No change needed.

× If I have to be honest, I don't think I have changed my favorite food, but I have added more favorite food on my list when I was growing up.

✓ If I have to be honest, I don't think I have changed my favorite food, but I added more favorite foods to my list as I was growing up.

Tense consistency: 'have added' with 'when I was growing up' is inconsistent. Use simple past 'added' to match 'when I was growing up' or rephrase to 'I have added... since I was growing up'. Also use plural 'foods' and 'to my list' (preposition 'to'). Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use plural where appropriate.

× So yeah, it does not make any changes.

✓ So yeah, it has not changed.

'It does not make any changes' is unnatural. To say the favorite food remained the same, use present perfect 'has not changed' or simple past 'did not change'. Suggestion: use 'has not changed' to indicate no change up to now.