Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は明確で内容も正しいですが、文法と語彙の選択、流暢さを改善できます。具体的には:①「Japanese traditional food」は自然な表現では“traditional Japanese food”にする。②“fishes”は不可算名詞として“fish”を使う。③理由をもう一つ付け加えて具体性を高め、接続詞（for example / also）でつなぐとより論理的になります。文は最大5文に抑え、冗長を避けてください。

예시: My favorite food is sushi because it is a traditional Japanese dish. I also like it because it is healthy — fish is rich in omega-3 fatty acids and protein. For example, salmon nigiri is both tasty and nutritious.

제안: 内容は伝わりますが、時制と文法、語彙の一貫性を改善しましょう。具体的には:①過去の話なので現在形の表現（do not want）を過去形（did not want）に直す。②“they contained a lot of sugar”は正しいが、より自然に“they were full of sugar”や“they had a lot of sugar”と言える。③理由を付け足す際は接続詞（because / although）を使い、簡潔に2〜3文でまとめてください。

예시: When I was a child, I loved sweets because they tasted amazing and were easy to get. My parents did not want me to eat too many sweets because they were full of sugar and unhealthy. Although I liked them a lot, I learned to limit my intake as I grew older.

제안: 良い応答ですが、文法の一致と語彙の自然さを改善しましょう。具体的には:①“which help me”は主語に合わせて“which helps me”にする。②“forget the hot temperature”は不自然なので“cool down in the heat”などに言い換える。③“which is very delicious”は冗長なので“which I find very comforting”など具体的な理由を添えると良いです。接続語（in summer / in winter / also）で流れを整えてください。

예시: Yes, I do. In summer I often eat ice cream because it helps me cool down in the heat. In winter I prefer hot dishes like ramen, which I find very comforting and warming.

제안: 意味は伝わりますが、多くの文法ミスと語法の誤りがあります。改善点は:①“when I was a childhood”は誤りで“when I was a child”にする。②過去の習慣は過去形（I liked）を使う。③“which contains lots of sugar”は“which contained a lot of sugar”または“that contained a lot of sugar”が自然。④対比をはっきりさせるために接続詞（but / however）を使い、理由を一つ追加してください。文は2〜3文で簡潔に。

예시: Yes, it has. When I was a child, I liked sweets that contained a lot of sugar. However, now I prefer healthier options like sushi because I pay more attention to nutrition.

× It's very healthy because fishes have lots of nutrients.

✓ It's very healthy because fish have a lot of nutrients.

'Fish' as an uncountable noun referring to the food in general should not be pluralized as 'fishes'; use 'fish'. Also use 'a lot of' (singular quantifier) rather than 'lots of' for style consistency; both are acceptable but 'a lot of nutrients' is more natural here.

× They contained a lot of sugar, so my parents do not want me to eat them, but I liked it very much.

✓ They contained a lot of sugar, so my parents did not want me to eat them, but I liked them very much.

The speaker is describing past events, so the negative form should be in the past tense: 'did not want' rather than 'do not want'. Also pronoun agreement: 'sweets' is plural, so use 'them' rather than 'it'.

× In summer I often eat ice cream which help me forget the hot temperature.

✓ In summer I often eat ice cream which helps me forget the hot weather.

The relative clause subject is 'ice cream' (treated as singular), so the verb should be 'helps' (third person singular). Also 'hot weather' is the natural collocation rather than 'hot temperature'.

× Yes, I have. When I was a childhood I like to eat sweets which contains lots of sugar, but now I like healthy food like sushi.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was a child I liked to eat sweets which contained a lot of sugar, but now I like healthy foods like sushi.

Use 'a child' not 'a childhood' (article/error). The time reference is past, so use past tense 'liked' and 'contained'. 'Sweets' is plural so 'contained' matches. 'A lot of' is more natural than 'lots of' here; 'foods' plural is acceptable when referring to types of healthy food.