Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm, and yeah), correct grammar (plural/singular, articles), and use one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I love seafood because it’s very versatile. For example, I enjoy paella, a Spanish rice dish with mixed shellfish, and fried prawns or calamari when I want something quick. In addition, seafood feels healthier than heavy red meat, so I choose it often.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and sentence structure: use correct words (e.g., 'mashed banana with powdered milk'), avoid repeating the same idea, and give a short reason linking childhood context. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: When I was young I loved mashed banana sprinkled with powdered milk. My stepfather jokingly called it a ‘secret’ treat, which made it special. I think I liked it because I grew up on a dairy farm and always enjoyed milk-based foods.

제안: Make the answer direct and organized: start with a clear yes/no or statement, then give one specific seasonal example using linking words (for example, in June during festivals). Correct awkward phrases like 'eat a diet every day' and 'types of seasons'.

예시: I mostly eat the same kinds of food throughout the year, but I do enjoy seasonal dishes during festivals. For example, in Brazil in June there are festas where vendors sell many corn-based treats, and I always look forward to those.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear comparison with reasons: explain what you liked before and what you prefer now, using linking words like 'however' or 'now'. Correct specific food names (brigadeiro) and use concise supporting detail.

예시: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I loved sweets like brigadeiro, a Brazilian chocolate truffle, but now I prefer savory dishes such as rice with beans and meat because they feel more satisfying and balanced.

× My favorite food is seafood because there is a variety things you can cook with seafood.

✓ My favorite food is seafood because there are a variety of things you can cook with seafood.

Use 'a variety of' to quantify countable nouns and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'variety' as a singular noun takes 'a' and the noun phrase 'a variety of things' requires plural verb 'are'. Use 'of' after 'variety'. Suggestion: say 'there are a variety of things' or 'there is a variety of dishes' depending on focus.

× As an example, you can do some paella, which is a Spanish food.

✓ As an example, you can make paella, which is a Spanish dish.

We use 'make' or 'cook' with dishes rather than 'do'. Also 'paella' is better described as a 'dish' not 'food'. Suggestion: use 'make paella' or 'cook paella' and 'dish' for clarity.

× Or you can just eat prawns and calamari, umm, fried.

✓ Or you can just eat prawns and calamari fried.

Placement of 'fried' after the items is acceptable but the comma before 'fried' is unnecessary. Removing filler 'umm' improves fluency. Suggestion: 'Or you can just eat fried prawns and calamari' is even clearer.

× And yeah, that's my favorite one.

✓ And yeah, that's my favorite.

'Favorite' does not need the pronoun 'one' when referring to a general category; 'my favorite' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'that's my favorite' or 'that's my favourite food'.

× My favorite food when I was young was definitely mesh banana with powder milk on top.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was definitely mashed banana with powdered milk on top.

Use 'mashed' (past participle adjective) to describe the banana and 'powdered milk' is the correct adjective-noun form. 'Mesh' and 'powder' are incorrect forms here. Suggestion: 'mashed banana with powdered milk'.

× And it's funny because my stepfather used to say that was a smashed banana beef, a secret on top.

✓ And it's funny because my stepfather used to call it 'smashed banana with a secret on top'.

Original sentence misuses 'say' and has unclear noun 'beef'. Use 'call it' to report a nickname and rephrase to 'with a secret on top' to convey meaning. Suggestion: use 'call it' and quote the nickname or explain it clearly.

× And the secret was the milk powder.

✓ And the secret was the powdered milk.

Use 'powdered milk' as the correct adjective-noun combination rather than 'milk powder' in this context for naturalness. Suggestion: 'the secret was the powdered milk'.

× And I really like milk because I grew up in a dairy farm, so I used to enjoy.

✓ And I really like milk because I grew up on a dairy farm, so I used to enjoy it.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'farm'. Also add the object 'it' after 'enjoy'. 'Used to enjoy' needs an object to be complete. Suggestion: 'I grew up on a dairy farm, so I used to enjoy it.'

× I normally tend to eat a diet every day for the whole year, but there is some typical food that I enjoy in different types of seasons of the year.

✓ I normally tend to eat the same diet every day throughout the year, but there are some typical foods that I enjoy in different seasons.

Use 'the same diet' rather than 'a diet'. 'Throughout the year' is more natural than 'for the whole year'. 'There are' matches plural 'foods'. 'Different types of seasons' is redundant; use 'different seasons'. Suggestion: 'I usually eat the same diet every day throughout the year, but there are some typical foods I enjoy in different seasons.'

× As an example, in Brazil in June they make a party where they sell all these food with corn and I really enjoy that.

✓ For example, in Brazil in June they hold a festival where they sell all these corn-based foods, and I really enjoy it.

Use 'for example' or 'as an example' consistently. 'Hold a festival' is better than 'make a party'. 'Food with corn' is better expressed as 'corn-based foods'. Use 'it' as the pronoun for 'that'. Suggestion: 'In Brazil in June they hold a festival where they sell corn-based foods.'

× Yes, it has changed.

✓ Yes, it has changed.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Kept for completeness. Suggestion: none.

× I used to enjoy desserts and a lot of sweetness as Brigadier, which was one of my favorite things when I was a kid, and these days I prefer more salty food, as example rice with beans and meat.

✓ I used to enjoy desserts and a lot of sweetness, like brigadeiro, which was one of my favourite treats when I was a kid, and these days I prefer saltier foods, for example rice with beans and meat.

Use the correct name 'brigadeiro' (a Brazilian sweet). 'Like' or 'such as' is better than 'as' here. 'Favourite treats' is natural. Use comparative 'saltier' and plural 'foods'. Use 'for example' to introduce examples. Adjust spelling consistency if needed. Suggestion: 'I used to enjoy sweets like brigadeiro... these days I prefer saltier foods such as rice with beans and meat.'