Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “do it” and reduce repetition.

예시: I love sushi because it’s fresh and healthy. For example, I usually buy sushi for lunch at work since it’s quick and fills me up, and at weekends I sometimes make simple rolls at home when I have time.

제안: Use correct tense and organize the story logically. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then briefly tell the anecdote with linking words and correct vocabulary. Keep it concise and coherent.

예시: When I was young I enjoyed Western foods like pizza and bread. In fact, I once confused the words “cheese” and “pizza,” so I kept asking my mother for “pizza” when I actually meant cheese, which led to a funny mix-up at the shop.

제안: Be slightly more cohesive and use linking words to compare seasons. Replace vague phrases like “that gives me calories” with clearer explanations about comfort or energy. Keep answers within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer cold dishes like cold noodles, ice cream and chilled sushi because they help me stay cool, whereas in winter I choose hot meals such as hot pot and baked pizza to keep warm and get more energy.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and one specific supporting reason or example. Avoid double negatives and long convoluted phrases. Be concise and specific about what hasn’t changed and what you still enjoy.

예시: No, my favourite food hasn’t changed; I still love sushi as much as when I was a child. However, I have also developed a taste for many other cuisines, like Italian and Korean, so I enjoy a wide variety of foods now.

× It makes me full and healthy.

✓ It makes me feel full and healthy.

The verb 'make' followed by an adjective typically requires a complement like 'feel' when referring to a person's state. Without 'feel' the sentence is awkward. Use 'feel' to show the effect on the person: 'It makes me feel full and healthy.'

× I always buy sushi for lunch and when I have time I also do it.

✓ I always buy sushi for lunch, and when I have time I also eat it.

The phrase 'do it' is inappropriate for eating; use the verb 'eat'. Also add a comma before the conjunction for clarity. Use parallel verb usage: 'I also eat it.'

× When I was young I enjoy eating western food such as pizza and bread.

✓ When I was young I enjoyed eating Western food such as pizza and bread.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'When I was young' with present tense 'enjoy'. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match the time frame. Also capitalize 'Western' as a proper adjective.

× I remember when I was very young I mixed up the word cheese and pizza.

✓ I remember that when I was very young I mixed up the words 'cheese' and 'pizza'.

Include 'that' for clarity in the reported memory. Use plural 'words' because two items are being referred to, and punctuate the words with quotes. This makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× So I kept it saying I want to eat pizza and my mom put me a pizza place but I said oh I still want pizza but actually.

✓ So I kept saying 'I want to eat pizza', and my mom took me to a pizza place, but I still wanted cheese actually.

Multiple errors: 'kept it saying' is incorrect — use 'kept saying'. 'Put me a pizza place' is wrong; use 'took me to a pizza place'. Tense should be past ('wanted'). The final contrast 'but actually' is unclear; context implies the child meant cheese, so clarify as 'but I still wanted cheese actually.' Ensure commas separate clauses and verbs agree in past tense.

× Yes. When it is summer, I like to eat something that is cold, such as cold noodles and ice cream and sushi.

✓ Yes. In summer, I like to eat cold foods such as cold noodles, ice cream, and sushi.

Use 'in summer' (more natural) and plural 'foods' when listing multiple items. Use commas to separate list items and avoid repeating 'cold'. This improves fluency and parallel structure.

× When it is winter, then I like to eat something that keeps me warm, such as hot pot and pizza.

✓ In winter, I like to eat foods that keep me warm, such as hot pot and pizza.

Use 'in winter' and plural 'foods' for general statements. Remove 'then' which is unnecessary. Match plural noun with plural verb form and maintain parallel structure.

× That gives me calories.

✓ Those give me calories.

The demonstrative 'that' is singular but refers to multiple foods listed; use plural 'those'. Also 'give me calories' is acceptable, but ensure agreement: 'Those foods give me calories.'

× No, it hasn't since my childhood until now I haven't changed my taste, but I still enjoy eating western food, Asian food, all kind of food.

✓ No, it hasn't changed; from my childhood until now my tastes haven't changed, and I still enjoy Western food, Asian food— all kinds of food.

The original mixes contractions and tenses incorrectly. 'No, it hasn't' needs an object ('changed'). Use 'my tastes haven't changed' to match plural 'tastes'. Use 'from...until now' to indicate duration. Capitalize 'Western' and use 'all kinds of food' for correct quantifier and pluralization. Use punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.