Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid colloquialisms like "I'm a sweet tooth" (use "I have a sweet tooth"). Limit to 2–3 short sentences and use linking phrase if giving two reasons.

예시: I usually prefer sweet foods because I have a sweet tooth. I also enjoy fried chicken for its crispy texture, so I often choose it as a treat.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and one specific detail or example. Avoid repetition. Use past tense consistently and a linking word if adding detail.

예시: When I was young, I often ate junk food and drank sodas. For example, my typical snack was potato chips and cola after school.

제안: Stay on topic: the question asks about seasonal variation, so respond about seasons or occasions first. Keep sentences complete and correct grammar (e.g., "their cuisine"). Use a linking word to connect the idea of trying new cuisines to specific seasons or events.

예시: Yes, I do. In winter I prefer hearty soups and stews, while in summer I eat lighter salads and fresh fruit. Also, I try different international cuisines when I travel because I enjoy tasting new dishes.

제안: Use clear past vs present contrast and avoid fragmented sentences. Begin with a topic sentence stating the change, then give one reason and a brief example. Avoid awkward or unclear comments ("I'm going to finish all the bag of chips").

예시: Yes, it has changed. As a child I loved junk food and sodas, but now I rarely drink soda and prefer healthier options like grilled chicken or salads because I'm more health-conscious.

× My favorite food is anything sweet because I'm a sweet tooth and also fried chicken.

✓ My favorite foods are anything sweet because I'm a sweet tooth, and fried chicken.

The sentence has a pluralization issue for 'food' when referring generally to multiple items: use 'foods' or rephrase. Also 'I'm a sweet tooth' is informal and better as 'I have a sweet tooth' but since only listed types from the provided list are to be corrected, pluralization and phrasing were adjusted. Use a comma before 'and' to join items in a list for clarity.

× Yeah, I like junk foods and sodas. That is my snack. That was my snack when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, I liked junk food and soda. That was my snack when I was a child.

The context asks about past preference 'when you were young', so use past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. Also 'junk food' and 'soda' are uncountable in general; use singular forms. 'That is my snack' conflicts with past context, so change to 'That was my snack' to match past tense.

× I do I want to try different kinds of food or cuisines. That's why I want to become a flight attendant, because. I want to try the food of another country and I want to taste there cuisine.

✓ I do; I want to try different kinds of food and cuisines. That's why I want to become a flight attendant: I want to try the food of other countries and taste their cuisine.

The original has sentence fragments and awkward punctuation. 'I do I want...' is a run-on; separate clauses with punctuation. Use 'and' rather than 'or' to list both 'food and cuisines'. Remove the unnecessary 'because.' and combine into one clear reason. Use plural 'countries' and correct pronoun 'their' (not 'there') to modify 'cuisine'.

× Yes, when I was a child my favorite food is junk food and sodas, but right now I don't. Drink soda anymore and junk food. I will taste it but I'm. I'm going to finish all the bag of chips.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my favorite food was junk food and soda, but right now I don't drink soda or eat junk food anymore. I will taste them occasionally, but I won't finish a whole bag of chips.

Match past tense for childhood preference: 'was' instead of 'is'. Fix sentence fragments and punctuation: 'I don't. Drink...' is incorrect; combine into 'I don't drink...'. Use 'soda or eat junk food' for correct coordination. 'I will taste it' is vague; use 'taste them occasionally' to refer to junk food and soda. 'I'm going to finish all the bag of chips' is incorrect article and phrasing; use 'finish a whole bag of chips' or better 'won't finish a whole bag of chips' depending on intended meaning; adjusted to 'I won't finish a whole bag of chips' to reflect moderation.