Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, độ rõ ràng và tính phù hợp của thông tin; tránh mâu thuẫn (ví dụ bạn nói cake nhưng sau đó nói cake được làm từ trái cây). Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng liên từ để nối ý, và giới hạn dài không quá 4–5 câu. Sửa lỗi chia động từ và dùng gerund/infinitive đúng (eating → eat).

예시: My favourite food is cake because I have a sweet tooth. I particularly enjoy tiramisu and cupcakes. I often choose cakes with fruit layers, like strawberry or mango, because they taste fresher. Eating them helps me relax after a long day.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp (tense, articles, cấu trúc câu) và làm rõ ý. Tránh lặp từ và thiếu hoàn chỉnh câu. Thêm liên từ để giải thích kết quả (so, because) và hoàn thành cảm xúc cuối câu. Giữ câu ngắn gọn, logic.

예시: When I was young, I loved fried foods such as pizza, hamburgers and fried chicken. However, my parents limited how often I could eat them because they worried about my health. I felt disappointed at the time, but I understand their concern now.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (subject-verb agreement), chọn từ vựng chính xác (availability, seasonal), và sửa lỗi từ lạ (London không phải trái cây). Nên nêu rõ ví dụ theo mùa, dùng liên từ để nối ý và tránh câu dài lủng củng.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year because many fruits are seasonal. For example, I usually eat lychees and mangoes in the summer when they are ripe and much cheaper. In autumn I prefer apples and pears.

제안: Sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng (So I am healthier → show result). Loại bỏ tiếng ậm ừ (UH) và diễn đạt kết quả hợp lý. Dùng linking words để nối lí do và kết quả (because, so, therefore). Giữ tối đa 4 câu.

예시: My favourite foods haven't really changed; I still enjoy cakes and fruit. However, now that I'm older I try to eat more healthily because diet affects my energy and mood. As a result, I feel healthier and more confident in daily life.

× I especially like tiramisu or cupcake.

✓ I especially like tiramisu and cupcakes.

'Cupcake' should be plural to match the general statement about liking a type of food; also use 'and' not 'or' when giving examples. Use of 'especially' with a list is fine; change singular count noun to plural for natural expression.

× I feel relaxed and take it easy when I eating.

✓ I feel relaxed and take it easy when I am eating.

After 'when' we need a full verb phrase with appropriate auxiliary: 'I am eating' (present continuous) is correct to describe an action happening at that time. The original missed the auxiliary 'am' and so lacked correct progressive form.

× When I was a young my favorite foods were fried foods like pizza, hamburgers and chicken.

✓ When I was young my favorite foods were fried foods like pizza, hamburgers and chicken.

The phrase 'a young' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'young' without the article. Use of past tense 'were' is appropriate for a past habitual state.

× But my parents don't like me to eat though so they usually limit buying it because it not good for health and I so sad when I.

✓ But my parents didn't like me to eat them, so they usually limited buying them because they are not good for my health, and I was so sad then.

Multiple issues: tense consistency requires past tense ('didn't like', 'limited'); pronoun/number agreement: 'them' for plural foods; 'it not good' should be 'they are not good' or 'it's not good' depending on singular/plural; 'I so sad when I' incomplete — needs verb 'was' and an adverb 'then' for time. Corrections align verb tenses and pronouns.

× At different time of year I usually eat different fruit because it availability depend on the season.

✓ At different times of the year I usually eat different fruits because their availability depends on the season.

Use plural 'times' and 'fruits' for variety. 'It availability' is incorrect; use plural possessive 'their availability' to match 'fruits'. Verb 'depend' must agree with singular subject 'availability', so use 'depends'.

× For example lychee, London and mango concentrate on summer especially is cost less when it's in seasonal.

✓ For example, lychees, longans and mangoes are concentrated in summer; they especially cost less when they are in season.

Several issues: fruit names should be plural when speaking generally. 'London' seems to be a mistaken word; likely 'longan' (a fruit). Use 'are concentrated in summer' or better 'are in season in summer'. 'Is cost less' is ungrammatical; correct forms: 'they especially cost less' or 'they cost less'. 'In seasonal' should be 'in season'.

× My favorite foods haven't changed since I was a child because I still like cake and fruit.

✓ My favorite foods haven't changed since I was a child because I still like cake and fruit.

This sentence is correct. Present perfect 'haven't changed' with 'since I was a child' is appropriate; no grammar change needed.

× So UH is be healthier and more confident in my life.

✓ So I should be healthier and more confident in my life.

Original has filler 'UH' and incorrect verb phrase 'is be'. Replace with 'I should be' to express intention/advice. This fixes subject placement and verb form for clear meaning.