Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ cho phù hợp. Tránh câu dài không mạch lạc và từ ngữ sai nghĩa (ví dụ "enjoy a lot of steam" không đúng). Nên có câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu 1-2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ (because, so, and). Ví dụ chỉnh sửa cấu trúc, dùng từ phù hợp và mạch lạc.

예시: My favourite food is chocolate. I like it because it’s convenient to carry and eat while I’m studying or working in a coffee shop, and it gives me a quick energy boost when I need to concentrate.

제안: Cần nói thì quá khứ nhất quán (I liked), tránh tiếng lấp và sửa lặp từ (tasty and delicious). Nên có chủ đề ngắn rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể. Dùng từ chính xác như "relaxing" và tránh mệnh đề không cần thiết.

예시: When I was young, I liked eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate, because it tasted rich and helped me relax after school.

제안: Câu trả lời không trả lời đúng câu hỏi về mùa trong năm. Cần trả lời trực tiếp (có/không) rồi nêu ví dụ cụ thể theo mùa (mùa hè, mùa đông). Tránh câu không rõ nghĩa và sai thì. Nên dùng liên từ để mạch lạc (for example, however).

예시: Not really; my diet doesn’t change much through the year. I might eat more hot soups and stews in winter but prefer salads and cold fruit in summer.

제안: Cần câu trả lời rõ ràng và dùng từ phù hợp. Sửa thì (was/were) và các từ sai ("candy kiss", "mistakes", "squeezing") thành từ có nghĩa. Nên giải thích ngắn lý do thay đổi (ví dụ khẩu vị trưởng thành, ưu tiên vị đắng hơn). Dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because).

예시: Yes, it has changed. As a child I preferred sugary sweets and candies, but now I prefer darker chocolate because I enjoy less sweet, richer flavours.

× Chocolate is my cup of tea because it is very convenient to carry out when I am studying or working at the coffee shop, and when I eat it I tend to enjoy a lot of steam.

✓ Chocolate is my cup of tea because it is very convenient to carry when I am studying or working at a coffee shop, and when I eat it I tend to enjoy it a lot.

Original sentence has awkward adverb placement and incorrect verbs: 'carry out' is wrong for taking something with you; use 'carry'. 'at the coffee shop' should be 'at a coffee shop' for general reference (article error). 'enjoy a lot of steam' is nonsensical; likely intended 'enjoy it a lot' or 'get a lot of pleasure'. Suggestions: move adverb phrases closer to verbs they modify, use correct verb collocations (carry, enjoy), and use an indefinite article for general places.

× When I was young, I'm very like the uh, eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate because it is very tasty and delicious for me and it is a best thing to relax.

✓ When I was young, I really liked eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate, because it was very tasty and helped me relax.

Mixing past and present tense: 'When I was young' requires past tense throughout. 'I'm very like' is incorrect: use past tense 'I really liked'. 'the uh, eating chocolate' is awkward; use 'eating chocolate'. 'it is a best thing to relax' should be 'it helped me relax' or 'it was the best thing to help me relax'—article error and verb choice. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past), remove filler words, choose natural collocations (liked eating, helped me relax).

× First topic is vastly different from my childhood in my. In my childhood I want to eat so quick food, but now I tend to miss tasty.

✓ My eating habits are vastly different from when I was a child. In my childhood I wanted to eat quick, convenient food, but now I prefer tastier options.

Original has incorrect sentence order and tense errors: 'First topic is vastly different from my childhood in my' is ungrammatical. Use clear subject 'My eating habits' and correct comparative phrase 'different from when I was a child'. 'I want to eat so quick food' mixes present tense and wrong adjective order ('quick food' should be 'quick, convenient food') and should be past tense 'wanted'. 'I tend to miss tasty' is unclear; likely 'I prefer tastier options'. Suggestions: restructure sentences for clarity, maintain tense consistency, use correct adjective order and collocations.

× Yes, definitely. When I was a child my favorite food is sweet things such as candy kiss, but now I want to eat mistakes such as dark chocolate, squeezing or even soft.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a child my favorite foods were sweet things such as candy, but now I prefer things like dark chocolate, fruit, or soft snacks.

Mix of past and present: after 'When I was a child' use past tense 'were'. 'candy kiss' is unclear—probably 'candy' or 'Hershey's Kiss'; use correct noun. 'I want to eat mistakes' is incorrect word choice—'mistakes' should be 'tastes' or 'things'. 'squeezing' and 'even soft' are unclear; possibly meant 'chewy' or 'soft snacks' and 'fruit' for 'squeezing' (squeezing could mean 'squeezable fruit like oranges' but unclear). Suggestions: use past tense for childhood, choose correct nouns for foods, and list clear examples with parallel structure.