Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases (e.g. “a sweet tooth”, “in my period”), and limit length to 3–4 sentences. Add one brief reason or example with a linking word for coherence. Also correct grammar: use singular/plural appropriately and simpler expressions.

예시: I’m fond of sweet foods, especially ice cream. For example, I often choose ice cream after dinner because it helps me relax. Also, I enjoy cakes and candies on special occasions.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid vague or broken phrases. Use correct tense and cleaner sentence structure; replace unclear fragments like “passed this and with flying colors”. Provide one specific example and link it with a connective (e.g. “so” or “for example”).

예시: As a child I loved candies, especially after I did well at school. For example, when I passed an important exam my parents would reward me with a bag of sweets, so I associated candy with celebration.

제안: Answer directly and use correct grammar and linking words: contrast seasons with words like “however” or “whereas”. Be slightly more specific about frequency or occasions. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. In summer I often eat ice cream to cool down, whereas in winter I usually enjoy hot pot with friends because it’s warm and social.

제안: This answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Start with a clear statement (Yes/No), then give one or two concise reasons with examples, and avoid filler words. Use correct verb forms and reduce repetition.

예시: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I preferred sweet treats like candy, but now I prefer savory foods such as hot pot because I enjoy strong, salty flavors and social meals with friends.

× Well, I have to say that I am a sweet tooth, so I love some sweet cake or candies.

✓ Well, I have to say that I am a sweet tooth, so I love sweet cakes and candies.

Use of articles and noun forms: 'a sweet tooth' is correct, but 'some sweet cake' is unidiomatic. Use plural 'cakes' and 'candies' without 'some' here. Also 'sweet' modifies the plural nouns. Suggestion: say 'sweet cakes and candies' or 'cakes and candies' for natural phrasing.

× Especially in my period, I am usually really into ice cream.

✓ Especially during that time, I am usually really into ice cream.

The phrase 'in my period' is incorrect in English; use 'during that time' or 'during that period'. This is not a verb error but a phrasing issue; corrected to natural prepositional phrase.

× When I was a child, I was really a big fan of candies.

✓ When I was a child, I was really a big fan of candy.

'Candy' as an uncountable noun is more natural when speaking generally in American English; 'candies' is acceptable but sounds plural countable. Use 'a big fan of candy' or 'a big fan of candies' consistently. Also no tense change needed.

× I still remember that when I passed this and with flying colors, my parents usually bought me a bag of candies for rewarding.

✓ I still remember that when I passed exams with flying colors, my parents usually bought me a bag of candy as a reward.

Multiple problems: awkward structure 'passed this and with flying colors' should be 'passed exams with flying colors'. 'For rewarding' is incorrect; use 'as a reward'. Changed 'candies' to 'candy' for naturalness. Maintain past tense 'bought' to match recollection.

× Of course I usually eat ice cream in the summer, but when it come to the winter it's really cold so I usually hang out with my friends and enjoy some hot pot.

✓ Of course I usually eat ice cream in the summer, but when it comes to winter it's really cold so I usually hang out with my friends and enjoy hot pot.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it come' should be 'it comes'. Also 'to the winter' is unnatural; say 'to winter' or 'when winter comes'. 'Some hot pot' is unnecessary; 'enjoy hot pot' is more natural.

× I think so because when I was a child I I was leans towards to some things with her but now when I am an adult I I think I love something salty such as hot pot or some you know some some salty food.

✓ I think so because when I was a child I tended to like sweet things, but now as an adult I prefer salty foods such as hot pot.

Multiple errors: 'I I' duplicated; 'was leans towards to' mixes tenses and structures. Use past simple 'tended to like' for past habit. 'Prefer salty foods' is a clear present preference. Remove filler 'you know some some'. Use plural 'foods' and 'salty' as adjective before noun.