Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は明確ですが、表現がやや冗長で語順や冠詞の使い方に不自然さがあります。具体性を保ちながら簡潔にし、冠詞（a/the）や数の一致、語順に注意してください。また、“for example” を使う場合は具体例を列挙する語順を整え、接続詞で流れを良くすると自然になります。

예시: My favourite food is Japanese seafood. For example, I love sushi and sashimi, and I often have miso soup with fish or shrimp.

제안: 内容は伝わりますが、文法ミスと繰り返し、語彙の誤用（"big volume pools"など）で分かりにくくなっています。主語と時制を一致させ、理由を短く論理的に述べ、正しい語彙（e.g. large portions）を使ってください。つなぎ言葉（because, so）を整理して一文を二文以内に収めると良いです。

예시: When I was young, I preferred foods with large portions because I played football every day. I was always hungry, so I needed to eat a lot after training.

제안: 意図は分かりますが、言い淀みや時制の不一致（現在の習慣について話すなら現在形を使う）があります。短く明確に言い切り、理由を具体的に述べてください。例えば季節の食材の入手や調理の手間を挙げると説得力が増します。

예시: I would like to, but I usually don't. It's difficult for me to prepare seasonal dishes because seasonal ingredients can be hard to find and they often take more time to cook.

제안: 回答は変化を示していますが、文法（過去形や所有格）、語順、言い淀みが気になります。比較を明確に述べ、理由を一つか二つ具体的に説明してください。また不要な繰り返しを避け、味の表現を整理しましょう。

예시: Yes. When I was a child I preferred strong-flavoured foods like curry, hamburgers, and ramen. Now I prefer lighter tastes, such as sushi and sashimi, because I enjoy fresh and subtle flavours.

× When I was young I liked the food with big volume because I played football at the club every day so I had I was always hungry so I have to or need to eat big volume pools.

✓ When I was young I liked large portions because I played football at the club every day, so I was always hungry and needed to eat big portions.

The sentence uses awkward and incorrect quantifiers and phrases such as 'big volume' and 'big volume pools'. Use 'large portions' or 'big portions' to refer to amounts of food. Also tense consistency: 'was always hungry' matches 'When I was young'. Use 'needed' (past) rather than 'have to' to match past context. Remove redundant words ('I had I was'). Suggested improvement: replace 'big volume' with 'large portions' and keep past tense verbs consistent.

× I have to or need to eat big volume pools.

✓ I needed to eat large portions.

In a past context, modal expressions should be in the past form. 'Have to' is present; 'needed to' is the correct past equivalent. Also 'big volume pools' is ungrammatical; use 'large portions'. Suggested improvement: use 'needed to' for past obligation and 'large portions' for quantity.

× I want to do so, but I couldn't do so uh, because it is difficult for me to prepare the uh, food, uh.

✓ I would like to, but I couldn't because it is difficult for me to prepare the food according to the season.

'I want to do so' (present) clashes with 'couldn't' (past). For polite desire, 'I would like to' is appropriate when explaining a general preference. Clarify the reason and use 'according to the season' as the correct prepositional phrase. Maintain consistent tense and more natural phrasing. Suggested improvement: use 'I would like to' for preference and 'according to the season' for seasonal preparation.

× In accordance with the season and.

✓ according to the season.

'In accordance with the season' is formal but acceptable; however the fragment is incomplete and ends with 'and.' Use 'according to the season' and complete the sentence. Ensure sentence is not fragmentary. Suggested improvement: finish the sentence and remove trailing conjunctions.

× Yes, I think I was a child my favorite food was uh, has very strong taste like uh Curry or hamburger or ramen.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my favorite foods had very strong flavors, like curry, hamburgers, or ramen.

Tense and agreement errors: 'I was a child' should be connected with 'when'; 'favorite food was has' mixes past and present. Use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. Use plural 'foods' or list items consistently and 'flavors' instead of 'taste'. Also capitalize consistently and remove filler words. Suggested improvement: use 'when I was a child' + past tense verbs and 'had very strong flavors'.

× But now I like uh, sushi or sashimi and the taste with the the.

✓ But now I like sushi and sashimi and milder flavors.

The sentence ends abruptly and contains duplicate 'the the' and vague 'the taste with the the'. Replace with a clear noun phrase such as 'milder flavors' to contrast with 'very strong flavors'. Remove filler words and duplicate words. Suggested improvement: finish the contrast explicitly: 'milder flavors' or 'lighter tastes'.