Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and simplify your answer: start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite food, then give one or two specific supporting details (where and why). Avoid invented names or unclear phrases and limit to 3–4 short sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas.

예시: My favourite food is ramen. I usually eat it at a small shop in Tokyo because the broth is rich and comforting. I go there at least once a week, and eating ramen helps me relax after a busy day.

제안: Good basic structure and relevant details. Improve naturalness and coherence: combine ideas with linking words and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "football practice"). Keep sentences concise and vary vocabulary (e.g., fast food, hang out).

예시: When I was young, I loved fast food, especially hamburgers. I often went to McDonald's with my friends after football practice on weekends because it was a convenient place to hang out.

제안: This answer is confusing because it talks about age rather than seasons. Directly answer the question about times of the year (seasons or holidays). Use clear tense and correct grammar, avoid filler words (umm). Provide one specific seasonal example and a reason using a linking word (for example, because or so).

예시: Yes, I eat different foods in different seasons. For example, in summer I prefer light salads and cold noodles because they feel refreshing, while in winter I like hot soups and stews to keep warm.

제안: Your answer begins well but ends incompletely and has tense and clarity issues. Give a clear topic sentence stating whether it changed, then explain why with one or two specific reasons. Use past tense for childhood and present perfect or present for now. Finish your sentence and avoid trailing off.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed since I was a child. When I was young I loved my mother’s homemade dishes because they made me feel comfortable, but now I prefer lighter, healthier meals because I care more about nutrition and energy.

× My favorite food is Lawmen Dillon, numerous amounts of ramen chops in Tokyo and I have visited there once in a week, at least once in a week, and when I eat ramen I always peel relaxed and this is a motivation.

✓ My favorite food is ramen from Ramen Diner in Tokyo; I visit there at least once a week, and when I eat ramen I always feel relaxed and it motivates me.

Errors: incorrect restaurant name 'Lawmen Dillon' (likely 'Ramen Diner') and awkward noun phrases 'numerous amounts of ramen chops' and 'I always peel relaxed'. Also word choice and adjective/adverb use were wrong ('peel' should be 'feel'; 'relaxed' as adjective describing the speaker is fine; 'this is a motivation' should be 'it motivates me'). Suggestion: use correct vocabulary, replace incorrect verbs with appropriate ones (feel), and reorder the sentence for clarity and natural adjective/adverb placement. Grammar Problem Type ID: 13

× I have visited there once in a week, at least once in a week

✓ I visit there at least once a week

Errors: wrong preposition and tense combination 'once in a week' is non-native; correct collocation is 'once a week'. 'Have visited there' is unnecessary present perfect for habitual action; use simple present 'I visit' or present perfect simple if emphasizing experience. Suggestion: use idiomatic prepositions for frequency: 'once a week'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× When I was young, my favorite food was junk food, including hamburgers.

✓ When I was young, my favorite foods were junk food items, including hamburgers.

Error: number agreement and specificity. 'Favorite food' can be singular but followed by a list of items is clearer as plural 'favorite foods' or rephrase 'my favorite food was junk food such as hamburgers.' Use plural to match multiple items. Suggestion: match singular/plural and keep consistent noun forms. Grammar Problem Type ID: 1

× I especially liked to go to McDonald's with my friends, in particular on weekends after practicing the football, I often visited there.

✓ I especially liked going to McDonald's with my friends, particularly on weekends after practicing football; I often visited it then.

Errors: incorrect infinitive 'liked to go' is acceptable but 'liked going' is more natural here. 'In particular' followed by a comma creates a run-on; use 'particularly'. 'Practicing the football' uses an unnecessary article; say 'practicing football' or 'practicing with the football' depending on meaning. 'Visited there' is incorrect preposition use; use 'visited it' or 'went there'. Suggestion: use 'practicing football' and correct pronoun reference for place. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× Yes, my food preference is has differed based on my age.

✓ Yes, my food preferences have changed as I have gotten older.

Errors: verb phrase 'is has differed' is ungrammatical (auxiliary conflict). 'Differed based on my age' is awkward; use 'have changed as I have gotten older' or 'have changed with age'. Also 'food preference' plural is more natural when listing various foods. Suggestion: choose a single correct auxiliary and tense structure and use natural collocations like 'changed with age'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× When I was young I like junk food including hung hamburgers and pizza.

✓ When I was young I liked junk food, including hamburgers and pizza.

Errors: tense mismatch 'When I was young' requires past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. 'hung hamburgers' is a typo for 'hamburgers'. Suggestion: use past tense for past time reference and correct spelling. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× But when I get older I like more umm, nutrient food including salads or a pizza.

✓ But now that I'm older I prefer more nutritious food, including salads or pizza.

Errors: tense mismatch and word choice: 'when I get older' implies future; if speaker is older now use 'now that I'm older'. 'I like more umm, nutrient food' is ungrammatical; use adjective 'nutritious' and prefer 'prefer' for preference. 'a pizza' is odd after 'including'; use 'pizza' without article. Suggestion: use correct tense and descriptive adjective 'nutritious'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× Yes, it has changed when I was a child, my favorite food was homemade dishes by my mother because it makes me comfortable and relaxed but when I get older because I.

✓ Yes, it has changed. When I was a child my favorite foods were my mother's homemade dishes because they made me feel comfortable and relaxed, but as I grew older my preferences changed.

Errors: sentence run-on and tense inconsistency: mixing present perfect 'it has changed' with 'when I was a child' and present 'it makes me'. Use past tense for past states 'were' and 'made me feel'. 'Homemade dishes by my mother' is more naturally 'my mother's homemade dishes'. Sentence ending 'because I.' is incomplete. Suggestion: split into sentences, maintain consistent past tense for past descriptions, and complete the thought. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5