Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で意味は伝わりますが、文法ミス（条件法の誤用、語の重複）、冗長表現、そして一文がやや不自然です。改善点：1) 主語と動詞の一致や時制を整える。2) 重複した語を削除する。3) トピック文の後に理由を補強する短い具体例を加える。4) 5文以内で簡潔にまとめ、リンク語（because, so, for example）を適切に使う。

예시: My favourite food is cucumber because it tastes fresh and reminds me of summer. For example, I often eat sliced cucumber in salads or with a little salt, which makes me feel refreshed.

제안: 内容が分かる一方で文法や語順の誤り（a breadではなくbread/a kind of bread、冠詞の誤用）、不完全な文、句読点の問題があります。改善点：1) 名詞の可算性に注意して冠詞を使う。2) 外国語では形容詞句を明確にして理由や状況を短く補う（where/when）。3) 文をつなぐ接続詞を使い、語を省かない。

예시: When I was young, I liked a sweet bun that looked like a little hat. We usually ate it at school break, and I remember enjoying it with milk.

제안: 答えは具体例を挙げている点は良いですが、時制と語の重複、冗長な表現が目立ちます。改善点：1) 現在形を使い、重複語を取り除く。2) 季節ごとの具体的な例を1〜2つに絞り、論理的に結ぶ。3) 接続詞（for example, in summer）を用いて流れを良くする。

예시: Yes. For example, in spring we eat fresh cabbage and asparagus, while in summer I prefer cucumbers and tomatoes because they are refreshing and in season.

제안: 意図は伝わりますが、話が回りくどく、文が断片化しています。改善点：1) 短く明確に答え（Yes/No + 理由）を述べる。2) 不要な繰り返しを避ける。3) 理由を示す際は簡潔な具体例を使う。

예시: No, it hasn't. I still like cucumber because I enjoy its fresh taste, and I rarely think about changing my favourite food when I eat.

× My favorite food is cucumber because if I would eat eat it, I could feel like summer is coming so I like to eat it.

✓ My favorite food is cucumber because if I eat it, I feel like summer is coming, so I like to eat it.

Conditionals with 'if' describing a general truth use the present simple in the if-clause and present/simple result. 'If I would eat' is incorrect; use 'if I eat'. Also remove the duplicated 'eat'. Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× When I was young I liked a bread.

✓ When I was young, I liked a bread.

'Bread' is usually uncountable; before a count noun use an article, but 'a bread' is unnatural unless referring to a type/loaf. Better: 'I liked bread' or 'I liked a certain type of bread.' For minimal correction keeping sentence shape, adding a comma improves flow, but prefer 'I liked bread.'

× It looks like hat because that bread is very sweet and we usually eat it in. School.

✓ It looks like a hat because that bread is very sweet and we usually eat it in school.

Missing article before 'hat' ('a hat') and the period before 'School' is incorrect. 'in school' should be continuous; remove the extra period. Also 'that bread' is acceptable if referring to a specific bread.

× Yes, I think so, because when it's become spring, we we eat spring cabbage and it it become summer we will eat cucumbers or tomatoes, something like that.

✓ Yes, I think so, because when it becomes spring, we eat spring cabbage, and when it becomes summer, we eat cucumbers or tomatoes.

Use present simple for general seasonal facts: 'it becomes' not 'it's become'. Remove duplicate words ('we we', 'it it'). For habitual actions use present simple rather than future 'will'. Use commas and conjunctions to join clauses correctly.

× No, I haven't. Actually. Even if I changed my favorite food, I couldn't realize that because I when I eat something I don't think about this topic. So actually I haven't.

✓ No, I haven't. Actually, even if I changed my favorite food, I wouldn't notice because when I eat something I don't think about this topic. So actually I haven't.

Split and connect fragments correctly: 'Actually.' alone is a fragment. Use 'wouldn't notice' for hypothetical past-to-present change ('couldn't realize' is awkward here). Remove extra 'I' before 'when'. Ensure tense consistency: present 'I don't think' with hypothetical conditional 'wouldn't notice'.