Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details (flavour, aroma, and social/family importance). Use linking words and correct grammar (e.g., 'because it has a rich flavor and a wonderful aroma; moreover, it brings people together'). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: My favourite food is biryani because it has a rich, complex flavour and a wonderful aroma. Moreover, biryani is a special family dish that brings people together during celebrations, so it has strong emotional value for me.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and specific reasons. Correct grammar (use past tense) and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' and 'so'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and mention one or two examples of junk food and why you liked them.

예시: When I was young, I preferred junk food, such as chips and fast-food burgers, because I enjoyed the taste and I did not know it was unhealthy. Also, I used my first pocket money to buy these snacks, so they felt special at the time.

제안: Answer the question directly, then give clear seasonal examples. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'in summer I prefer spicy foods; in winter I prefer warm, comforting dishes'). Use linking words ('however', 'for example') and be specific about dishes if possible. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Not always; it mainly depends on what my mother cooks. However, in summer I prefer spicy, cooling dishes like salads with chili, while in winter I enjoy warm, comforting dishes such as stew or rice with spices.

제안: Start with a clear statement about change, then explain reasons and give a contrast with specific examples. Use correct tense and vocabulary ('I used to prefer unhealthy snacks, but now I choose vegetables because they are healthier'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, it has changed. I used to prefer unhealthy snacks as a child, but now I choose vegetables and balanced meals because I understand the health benefits and want to stay fit.

× My favorite food is biryani because it has a delicious taste and a flavorful and flavorable and aroma is very special and and moreover in many reason I like biryani because it bring people together and it's our famous dish.

✓ My favorite food is biryani because it has a delicious, flavorful aroma, and its scent is very special. Moreover, for many reasons I like biryani: it brings people together and it's a famous dish in our country.

Problems: repeated and incorrect adjective forms (flavorable is wrong), awkward coordination, incorrect noun/pronoun forms (aroma is often described as 'aroma' or 'scent' and needs possessive 'its'), incorrect preposition/phrase 'in many reason'. Also verb form 'bring' should be third person singular 'brings'. Suggestions: remove duplicates, use correct adjectives (delicious, flavorful), use possessive 'its aroma' or 'its scent', replace 'in many reason' with 'for many reasons', and use 'brings' for third person singular subject 'it'.

× When I was young, so I remember that I like food junk food because of that, I don't know that it have harmful for us and it is too expensive in because I do my first my father give pocket money in in that time.

✓ When I was young, I remember that I liked junk food because I didn't know it was harmful to us. It was too expensive, but at that time my father gave me pocket money.

Problems: tense inconsistency and incorrect past forms: 'like' should be 'liked' to match past timeframe; 'don't know' should be past 'didn't know'; 'have harmful' should be 'was harmful' (correct verb and adjective order); 'it is too expensive' should be 'it was too expensive' to keep past tense; 'my father give pocket money' should be past 'gave me pocket money' and include object pronoun. Suggestions: keep verbs in past when talking about childhood, use correct past forms ('liked', 'didn't know', 'was', 'gave'), and reorder phrases for clarity.

× Uh, not always because umm, it depends on my mom because what she cooks, but in uh, summer I prefer to have spice eating and winter I was to have warm things like uh, uh, such special dishes.

✓ Not always; it depends on my mom and what she cooks. In summer I prefer spicy food, and in winter I like to have warm dishes and special meals.

Problems: tense and word choice: 'spice eating' is incorrect; use adjective 'spicy food'. 'I was to have' is wrong tense/structure; use 'I like to have' or 'I prefer'. Also sentence fragments and repetition. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual preferences ('I prefer', 'I like'), replace incorrect noun phrases with correct collocations ('spicy food', 'warm dishes'), and split into clear sentences.

× Yes, definitely when I was a child. So I prefer unhealthy food and moreover something that something that is harmful when I was young. So I understand and I prefer vegetables because it is healthy for us.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a child I preferred unhealthy foods and ate things that were harmful. Now I understand, and I prefer vegetables because they are healthy for us.

Problems: inconsistent tenses: mixing past and present ('I prefer' should be past 'I preferred' when referring to childhood). Redundant phrasing 'something that something that' and incorrect agreement 'it is healthy' referring to vegetables (plural) should be 'they are healthy'. Suggestions: keep past tense for childhood actions ('preferred', 'were harmful'), remove redundancy, and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural nouns ('vegetables... they are').