Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答内容相关且信息充足，但表达较重复，句子冗长且有口语填充词（例如 "you know", "actually", 重复的句子结构）。建议：1) 开头用一句主题句直接回答（I do walk a lot.），2) 用一到两个支持句提供具体原因并使用连接词（for example, because），3) 避免重复和多余填充词，控制在最多5个句子内。注意简洁自然的表达。

예시: I do walk a lot. Because I live in Hong Kong, public transport is more convenient and taxis are expensive, so I often walk to stations. For example, I usually walk 10–15 minutes to the nearest MTR station every day.

제안: 回答直截了当但时态和词形使用不准确（混用一般过去与现在时，如 'prefer' 应为 'preferred'，'watch televisions' 不自然）。此外，表达重复且逻辑衔接弱。建议：1) 使用正确的过去时表达童年习惯，2) 用连接词表转折（but, however），3) 提供具体细节或例子说明现在的改变。

예시: No, I didn't. When I was a child I preferred staying at home and watching TV rather than walking outside. However, looking back I wish I had been more active, so nowadays I make an effort to walk regularly for my health.

제안: 回答包含合理原因但表达混乱且重复（例如重复否定与形容词，杂乱的名词短语）。建议：1) 开始用主题句直接给出主要原因，2) 用连接词列出两个清晰的支持点，3) 使用更自然的词汇搭配（fresh air, greenery, peaceful atmosphere）。

예시: People like walking in parks because the air is much fresher and there are fewer cars. Also, the greenery and peaceful atmosphere help people relax and reduce stress.

제안: 回答表达清楚但有冗余和语法小错误（例如 'there was the street was very clean'）。建议：1) 用一到两句给出明确地点与原因，2) 避免重复相同信息，3) 提供更具体的细节（如哪条街区或具体景点）以增强说服力。

예시: I'd like to take a long walk in Tokyo because it's a very clean and orderly city. I visited once and enjoyed strolling through neighborhoods like Shibuya and Asakusa, where the streets and sights were fascinating.

제안: 回答直接但重复且有口语填充词（'like', 'I live like I live'），结构松散。建议：1) 直接回答并给出具体时间或频率（e.g., yesterday, every morning），2) 用一两个简洁句子说明地点和距离，3) 去掉无谓重复，保持自然流畅。

예시: Recently I walked to the nearest subway station to go to campus. It takes about 10 minutes from my home, so I walk there almost every morning.

× Well, actually I do because you know I live in Hong Kong and Hong Kong is a very big city and a very expensive city.

✓ Well, actually I do because I live in Hong Kong, which is a very big and very expensive city.

句子中重复使用“Hong Kong”和“a very”导致冗长且结构不够紧凑。此处需用非限定性定语从句（which）或用并列形容词来修饰“city”。同时保持现在时。建议用逗号和关代引导从句，使句子更自然。

× So I always take the public transportation and if you want to go to the public transportation station, you have to go there.

✓ So I always take public transportation, and if you want to go to a public transportation station, you have to go there.

“public transportation”前不需要定冠词“the”表示一般概念；第二处应使用不定冠词“a”来泛指某一站点。注意名词单复数和冠词用法的区别。

× Actually, no, actually when I was a child, I prefer to stay at home and watch televisions.

✓ Actually no. When I was a child, I preferred to stay at home and watch television.

主句发生在过去，应使用过去时“preferred”。“television”作为可数名词表示电视节目或电视机时常用单数泛指“看电视”用“watch television”，不加复数。

× But when I look back, I think I should work more.

✓ But when I look back, I think I should have worked more.

回顾过去时，表达对过去的未做之事的遗憾应使用完成体“should have + 过去分词”，而不是一般现在时的“should + 动词原形”。

× Maybe because in parks there was no car there were no cars so the fresh the air was very fresh and and in parks we can see a lot of trees and the green the color of green could make us feel comfortable I think.

✓ Maybe because in parks there were no cars, so the air was very fresh, and in parks we can see a lot of trees; the green color can make us feel comfortable, I think.

原句存在多处问题：时态应为过去（there were no cars）；重复词（the fresh the air，and and，the green the color）应删去或合并；“could”改为一般现在时“can”更贴合对公园一般特性的描述。建议分句并用标点使句子更清晰。

× I went to Tokyo once. It was very clean and beautiful city and there was the street was very clean so I like walking in the street of Tokyo.

✓ I went to Tokyo once. It was a very clean and beautiful city, and the streets were very clean, so I like walking in the streets of Tokyo.

“beautiful city”前需冠词“a”。“the street was very clean”重复且冠词不当，应改为复数“the streets were”以表达一般性观察；“in the street of Tokyo”应改为“in the streets of Tokyo”。

× Well, as I said, I literally walked to the subway station because I live like I live far away from my campus and I have to take a subway.

✓ Well, as I said, I usually walk to the subway station because I live far away from my campus and I have to take the subway.

句子时态和表达不一致：若描述习惯动作应用一般现在时“usually walk”。“literally walked”表示过去一次且与后文“I live”冲突。英文中通常说“take the subway”而不是“take a subway”；“live like I live”重复，应简化为“I live”。

× So if I want to go to the subway, I have to walk there.

✓ So if I want to go to the subway, I have to walk there.

句子本身语法正确；保持一般现在时表达习惯性或条件事实，无需更改。